Be a Boss in Comics

The subject matter is quite good, and the writing is not bad, but I feel that the pace is too slow, and it feels like it should be fast or slow, or slow. Especially the second half of the plot so far, there are some places that are too detailed, and I don't feel too comfortable at the moment. But finally there is such a comic plus a forum theme. It's not just to extend my life. I'm touched. I hope the author can write better and better.

Let's talk about the advantages first: the plot is quite good, the characters are also portrayed in detail, and everyone feels flesh and blood. Disadvantages: 1. The beginning is too cumbersome. I keep buying equipment. The beginning is very important. If you don't get into the theme or fun point quickly and there is no description, it is easy to go directly. 2. Although the characterization is quite good, it is a bit too much. A plot can be very long. I feel that some rhetoric and content can be deleted appropriately. 3. "Silent for 1 second" appears too frequently. Because I listen to books, it is very uncomfortable. I think it can be replaced by "paused", "stupefied for a moment", or even changed to "silent for a while". It always makes me uncomfortable to listen to it every second. It can also be changed according to the context, such as "a little overwhelmed", "screaming crazy in the heart", "not knowing how to respond for a while", etc. The above is purely a personal opinion. My sense of listening to books may be different from that of reading. After all, reading can skip tedious stages and the content of the mall can be skipped quickly, while listening to books requires manual skipping. Sometimes I feel the pace is a bit slow even when I drive twice as fast. Say important things three times: don't spray, don't spray, don't spray. After all, reading novels is your own business. You will know whether you like it or not after reading it. I hope everyone will read it first. I just provide a suggestion and express some of my opinions. Thank you [laughs]

The descriptions in some places gave me the feeling that AI was used, and sentences were broken in places where there was no need to break them, just like the writing style in Tomato short stories. But the plot and character settings are pretty good [OK] I can't do it anymore. These periods make me feel so uncomfortable. The smell of AI is too strong, my family, I can't stand it anymore

It looks good. Although some plots of the heroine are handled strangely, it is overall very good to watch. Especially the players in the first closed beta test, everyone is so helpful to each other and warm. The official is more thoughtful. I hope that the heroine will actually buy the identity plot of the closed beta test.

Progress: 72 Very good, very appetizing subject matter. The heroine pretends to be a boss, but she is probably the boss in the first place, or has lost her memory, been sealed, or gone back in time. The heroine was quite lively and cheerful at the beginning. From the moment she joined the national team, not only did her voice disappear from the system, but she also became invisible. It gave me the feeling that she had changed so much, like she was a different person. From a cute little sweet girl to a cold boss who rarely talks, it can be understood that she is pretending to be a boss, but why is she pretending to be a boss in front of readers. At first I thought it was a type that could be easily filled with cups, but once I entered the dungeon, it became a bit heavy, and the gold content of the dungeon increased. What is Tiandao, the author of the comic, mentioned at the beginning, hiding? Looking forward to the follow-up.

I saw Chapter 28 → First of all, the pace of the beginning is slow, and a lot of space is used to describe the heroine's life experience and the settings that are related to the rest, but it is too long. Then there is the introduction that says there are many official Dragon Kingdom scenes. Even if the hidden identity of the heroine is not found out later, there are still suspects. The five of them are familiar with each other and can still carry the peace charm with them every day. It is found that everything is normal with the heroine. It can be completely figured out. A group of people are chattering and a lot of people are waiting for one person to show up (how can anyone be so stupid when there are so many scenes) In the end, the supporting characters had too many dialogues. Knowing that the people who came out of the first dungeon are not normal and express themselves in different ways, only talking more and talking less, the image of the supporting characters did not stand up. Especially when Li Xue knew that the heroine's identity was Zai Zai. What if Zai Zai suffered a loss? Zai Zai must be very sad and could only cry secretly alone... Zai Zai, after finally finishing 27 and 28, I came to the second level. (It seemed like the system was very protective of the heroine and gave her a lot of equipment. It was a pity that I left before the show started.)

Overall, this book is pretty good. The main plot is quite interesting. The heroine only needs to grow up a little to become invincible. The logic is relatively smooth, and most of the words used can reflect the love for her daughter. But the shortcomings of this book are also obvious: there are too many meaningless descriptions. Large sections are devoted to descriptions of characters' expressions, movements, and scenery. It gives the impression that the interactions between characters are very slow, as if everyone is taking their time. Some descriptions are also quite embarrassing, especially as they get more serious in the later chapters. These chapters are already unbearable. Maybe the author has become busier and uses more tools to assist... This kind of description has caused many plots to be very strange. For example, many simple plots coupled with this kind of description will make people analyze a lot of meanings, but if you continue to read, you will find that the analysis is completely unnecessary. All in all, it was painful to watch. Alas:-(See you soon.

Like it very much! ! However, I feel that the pace will be relatively slow. I probably understand that the author wants to create vivid characters, so some pages are longer, but the whole episode is a group chat is really a bit exaggerated) I have to say that it is indeed successful, the character development is OK, and one more thing, can the heroine stop being silent? She feels so silent. . ) There is just a little too much silence.) These are all minor and innocuous problems, because the author's overall thematic content and cheats are what I like to read! ! !

The plot is novel, the writing is also very good, it requires using your brain, and the time loop seems to be quite complicated, but I like it. It is probably a real and fake world. I have been living in a copy, and then suspected that everyone is an NPC. Then after the protagonist obtains the memory of the first internal beta, it seems that the time loop is closed when he blocked an attack on his brother's safety charm at the beginning. The author's imagination is very big and rich. I heard them say that there is some AI, but I think it is quite good-looking. It is worth recommending [Like][Like][Like][Like] The only drawback is probably that I encountered this book too early! It's not enough to read at all [smiles] Well, although they say some of them are written by AI, I can't tell. It feels like it's written by AI and it feels like an exam. I think this book is okay. Maybe some of them were modified by AI [Thinking]

This book is overall very good, the story line is okay, the characters are well drawn, and the emotional lines are delicate. Moreover, the official book is not the background board or path in other novels of this type. The official version of this book is conscious. The heroine is the kind of person who has force (given by the system), plays behind the scenes, and pretends to be a boss. It really pokes me, everyone is very nice, I look forward to a follow-up post [send heart][send heart][send heart]

Nice! ! ! It's well written, but it's a bit short. Who knows the pain of being tied [crying], the author please update it soon [please update]

Very nice. I look forward to the day when the heroine will truly become a ghost boss, but I am also a little worried that those memories will cause psychological problems for the heroine. If the official and her brother notice it, it will be a bit troublesome. There is also the fact that the heroine is a dream chaser and not a dreamer. The heroine will definitely have to give an official explanation after she comes out of the dungeon. The heroine is currently working hard to become stronger on her own. My brother and the others will definitely grow in the future and become strong men who can clear A-level, S-level, and SS-level dungeons. I look forward to that day. But after my brother and the others become stronger, one day they will know the "final" and what the identity of the ghost means. In short, everyone in this book is great! The official is smart, the first-time closed beta players are very interesting, the heroine and the protagonist group are also very warm to get along with, the little gift and the comic readers are very cute, and I look forward to the day when other ghosts will appear in the future.

It won't take long to tie it up. Teacher, please update soon. It's so beautiful! ! ! I really love the baby girl. It's so enjoyable to watch all the way through. Although there are many supporting characters, they don't steal the spotlight from the main character at all! The description is also good! I really like this type of Dihua, come on, teacher!

It's good-looking, and the author tried his best to write it realistically. There are group portraits of both men and women with high combat capabilities, and the supporting characters also have character descriptions. The world will not be viewed only from the perspective of the protagonist. The changes in the world are not only due to the development of the storyline from the perspective of the protagonist. The personalities of the supporting characters will change or become more stable due to various things. The utopian reality of the world. There are various hardships and accidents, but everything will be fine in the end, a utopian outcome, and the tragedies that may occur during various hardships will also make people laugh. I love the unexpectedness of this sense of security. I don't want to feel the pain of being abused

The writing is very beautiful, and the author is very good at writing. It is very imaginative and very brain-burning, but I think I may not be suitable for this kind of book. I don't like to use my brain. This kind of book is too brain-burning. For me, my head hurts a little when I see the back, but I thought it was just the front. It's very templated, very cliched, but when I saw it later I thought wow, my head hurts all the time and I can feel my brain running, and I feel like my CPU is going to smoke, so I probably won't pursue it anymore, my head hurts a little ˚‧º·(˚ ˃̣̣̥᷄⌓˂̣̣̥᷅ )‧º·˚, but I will still keep a very good book in my bookshelf＼（＞0＜）／Come on. Convex^-^convex It's so spicy! O(￣▽￣)ｄ good

What a great book! This is the type of comic forum I like

It's good-looking, very enjoyable to watch, and it's a holy show in front of people. It finally has an official existence, and it's done in line with the situation. The plot is also reasonable. I hope the heroine will get her identity soon. It feels like it would be cool if she was originally a ghost.

Good looking [Chigua] I like the character of Li Xue very much. I feel like a real person in reality. I empathize with her very much. I hope the protagonist will grow up quickly [laughing] Also, the pace is a bit slow. Did the author use any polish? [What] How about making it a little faster [face covering] It took more than 50 chapters for the protagonist to download the first copy.

It's very beautiful. This book is really beautiful! The heroine was very happy [laughs] and the overall plot was also very good! The country's brainstorming is also very interesting [Blowing Kiss], but the copy is a bit bland, and there is not such a strong sense of crisis (it is a copy of those doors in reality, not the first internal beta) and the ending is a bit too sudden [awkward laugh] Personally, I feel it is a bit unfinished [face covering] I changed my reading number halfway through, so the reading time was not very long, but I read the whole book [blowing kiss]

The writing, logic, plot and character creation are both online in Infinite·Transverse Comics·Invincible. The story is about a second-generation god who awakens his memory and finds himself in a low-dimensional comic world. With the help of the author and the way of heaven, he ascends again. The overall rhythm of the story is smooth and has no major ups and downs. The early stage of the story is a standard comic plot, with abilities improved through popularity and cognition. However, from the mid-term, it can be considered that it is no longer a time-traveling novel. There are two main reasons. First, the frequency of external barrages is extremely low, and cognition and human beings The importance of Qi is almost nil. Secondly, the protagonist's B level plummets. After purchasing a high-power template, he almost loses his high-dimensionality and mystery. He no longer improves his ability through the system and cognition, and lacks initiative in promoting the plot. It is like a comic book reader who has become a comic character and has lost the ability to change the plot and is pushed around. This in turn leads to boring plots in the later stages. It embarks on the path of a pure plot novel where monsters are killed but not upgraded, the force value is high but the brain value is insufficient, and the villain is known but is repeatedly escaped. There are also a lot of holes left unfilled at the end, and I look forward to the extra chapters to fill them in. The overall quality of the article is relatively rare in tomatoes, and it can be used as recreational food and is recommended.

I feel that the whole book is very comfortable to read, and there are no shocking flaws. The scale and scope of the plot are well grasped. I feel that it is the only novel among the many micro-group portraits I have read that does not make the protagonist look like a supporting role. It only takes a few strokes and is taken directly every time [Read carefully]

The content is good-looking. Although I felt that the heroine was cheating a lot in the early stage, I actually found it very interesting later on. The heroine's cheating wasn't too big, and the world view was pretty good. The author was also very careful about setting up the story and suggested that the author change the cover. I wasn't interested in this cover at first, but when I clicked in, I found it was unexpectedly good-looking.

The first time I saw the protagonist accidentally go from a high dimension to a low dimension was in a comic. The game copy, the hidden "fake" ghost player, this setting is fun, and the comic author and the protagonist are both high-dimensional, so it is equivalent to Tiandao in the small world being one of our own, hahaha, then can it be assumed that the comic author also loves our protagonist?

The biggest feature of this book is: rules are dead, people are living, and people decide the direction. It wasn't very good at first, but after reading more than a dozen chapters, you can find that this book is much more interesting to people outside the copy than the copy. Contrary to most copies of the book, it's refreshing [laughing]

It's nice to read, but I think some of the descriptions are unnecessary and make people want to stop reading. But overall it's still nice to read. It's my favorite type. I hope I can keep writing.

Beautiful! Beautiful! It's just that the unlucky group chat records are too long and too long, and the purchase of equipment in the early stage is also quite lengthy, but after a few chapters the plot picks up. Please update quickly!

It's good to read. The atmosphere of this book is very joyful and full of vitality. The forum is so alive (sometimes it feels like there are too many breasts). However, the psychological description of the heroine is relatively small and there is a lack of contrast (but the scene is very cool. I hope there will be more updates!

My family, it's so good-looking✧٩(ˊωˋ*)و✧, it's the type I like. "The abyss sends an invitation, and it's also the way to the sky, and only those with heavy burdens can tread it." "Destiny has not favored it, but the road to dreams is open to everyone." Ahhhhhh, it's really super good-looking, and the author's writing is also super good. 🍀🍀🍀🍀My chest felt tight after reading it, and I've been following it for a long time. , It's over like this, it's over with flowers 💐💐💐

Great, this is a comic book, my granary can be saved! The heroine is cute and lovable, has an atypical growth type and is sober and powerful. The other characters are also well-characterized, the writing is good, the logic is online, and the elements are rich.

Not bad, not bad. I like it very much. Come on, author, don't stop updating [blowing kiss] The subject matter is well chosen, but the AI flavor has become more and more intense recently, and the plot has become a bit inexplicable.