The Younger Brother of Xianmen Was Originally a Daughter

The idea is not bad, but it was exposed too quickly. In my original imagination, the protagonist should be exposed in the middle and late stages. The main body should become a genius, and then defeat all the geniuses. The disguised body should have a minor skill and become friends with many people, but the combat power is not high. When the disguised body is in danger, it uses the one-time power condensed by the main body to save the day. Then it is seen by the pursuers of the main body and falls into the Shura field [sneaky smile]. Then the main body and everyone work together to solve the big trouble, overpower the crowd to attract everyone's attention, and finally the disguised body goes to fight with those men. During a party together, the disguise was broken due to some small accidents and exposed in front of everyone. Then the protagonist got drunk and encouraged all the suitors to fight. Finally, he came on the scene and beat the winner and ran away. That would be perfect [laughter][laughter][laughter][laugh][laugh][laugh]

Yes, the author's own inner description has created a world of cultivating immortality of his own. At present, it seems like a fantasy and bizarre story. The writing style is immature and uneven in some places. But the biggest feature of the author's writing style may be the sentences with a hint of allegory and many metaphors. But it's not good if you use it too much. The author needs to learn how to use it correctly, and also learn the psychology of character dialogue. The author should have initially grasped the framework of dialogue, but it is still full of a general sense of reality, so if you study the dialogue a little more, this will be a good work. Also, the language is too concise. There should be no more and no less. As long as you can fix these and give some more time and imagination, you will have a relatively excellent work and a leisurely world of your own. By the way, the author feels that the current update motivation is not very good. It is updated occasionally and the update frequency fluctuates.

Don't change your marriage, don't change your marriage, don't change your marriage [crying]

It's pretty good, but the writing is a bit dry and rushed, with few details, and the non-protagonist is a bit too flat, but the writing is pretty good, but the protagonist is still too kind. I read it in one sitting, it is a good book.

Well, the writing is excellent and the plot is good, but the style is a bit awkward and leans towards romance, which is still worth watching. In addition, the sexual changes in this article are only for setting, and there is basically no description.

The writing is very good and the story is exciting. Very depressing. It can be seen that the author intends to use the way the heroine is abused to make the other male characters feel "guilt" and "sympathy", so as to guide them to be pampered in the future. That's how Zhiyu Wen is. When I read it in the early stages, my heart always trembles, just to foreshadow the final ending.

I feel like the protagonist is very similar to Kage-ryu, they are almost the same template. Symptoms similar to the demonic body, white hair and red pupils [thinking] [thinking] [thinking] [eating melon] [eating melon] [eating melon] Putting aside some minor flaws, overall this book is okay. It would be even more perfect if the protagonist gets an eyepatch and covers his eyes [smirk] [snicker] [snicker] [sneer smile] [sneer smile] [sneer smile]

It takes a lot of courage to write what you want to express in your heart. The injustice in reality, the darkness of human nature, the powerlessness of the current situation, and the confusion of the future. From the book, you can imagine that you can be as kind, brave, and unyielding as Bai Ci. Tragic experiences and determination to break the status quo are like a real story, a living book

The world of immortality is an enhanced version of the dark modern society. Why do many people always stay mediocre all their lives? It's because they only follow what others say and don't use their brains to think. Nature has given them the best brains, but unfortunately, their souls are ruined.

After reading a few chapters, the protagonist has a clear wisdom Stomach pain, getting more and more stomach pain

I just finished reading the first volume and I feel a little overwhelmed, depressed and sad. . . It feels like there is still a lot of plot that has not been continued. Bai Ci's father, Xiao Chen, Shen Qinghe and Su Wenxuan seem to be all over. Maybe this is the best ending. It's been a long time since I've been so fascinated by the work. The work is very novel and I like it very much. It's my first time to comment. I would like to support the author with five stars [Blow a kiss] By the way, hasn't the protagonist turned black yet? If I had turned black earlier, I wouldn't be able to bear it anymore [laughing]. It's a pity that the protagonist is not strong enough.

I feel very good that the protagonist has no strength in the early stage, so that's all I can say. I have nothing to say. If you read this novel and see my comments, please don't leave comments after reading a few pictures. It's just a bit of a knife.

The writing style is comfortable and the emotions in the text are also well written. Sometimes I watch it myself, and I can empathize with it, and the writing is really good. After reading so many articles on immortality, I also feel that this is the protagonist in my mind. This is the world of immortality where real opportunities and dangers coexist. I hope the author will always write like this. I really like it (ω)

It's very nice. The main content behind it is probably the protagonist traveling around and meeting all kinds of people, and a series of short stories happen.

It's so good-looking, and it doesn't fall into the trap of female pornographic novels. You must give it a try.

It's okay, I hope it ends well! ! !

The plot after the heroine joins the sect tells the general background and the relationship between the main characters. It is also an important period of transformation for the protagonist's character. Before the foundation is established, it is abusive, but after the Blood Ganoderma successfully establishes the foundation, the potential of the setting is still great [eating melon] This should be the protagonist Goldfinger (I look forward to the protagonist turning around in the future). It's been a long time since I've seen such a good article on unsystematic cultivation of immortality [laughs] Great support to the author! [Blow a kiss][Blow a kiss][Blow a kiss]

Good good's writing is pretty good. I recommend updating 100 times a day.

It's the first time I've seen this kind of thing. Is this what darkness is like? It's heartbreaking and tiring to watch. I have withdrawn the children. I have finished eating now. I feel that I will never read dark novels again. I thought it was sweet in the introduction and found it very sad after tasting it. The main story is full of emotions. I will go and read the sweet novels. Overall, it is good but not suitable for me.

At the beginning, this book was an obvious online article. After reading it, I felt that the author wanted to write something a little advanced. The author's writing style is not bad, but I feel that the environment of Tomato is not suitable. Then people may want to read the kind of shit, and then men and women have sex with each other. But to be honest, I feel that the author went off topic

It's so beautiful, good reviews [Love] This book is really well written, and the characterization is the highlight of the book. The protagonist is not a born invincible child of destiny. She has the ignorance of her youth, the confusion of her journey, and her struggle and perseverance when faced with choices. On the road of spiritual practice, one not only pursues the advancement of cultivation, but also tempers one's heart through difficulties such as grievances, separations, entanglements between good and evil, and understands how cruel the world of immortality is. The supporting characters are by no means tools. The good and evil characters all have their own obsessions and difficulties, breaking the rigid black and white setting and making the entire fairy tale world more vivid and three-dimensional. And the author's writing style is also pretty good, and overall it's really good.

I feel like I should give it a five-star support as a newbie. I don't see much darkness so far, and I don't have any tendency to be pushed down yet.

Like the romance comics I read when I was a kid

Nice! One of my favorite books recently, the author will update it soon! [Love][love]

I rarely comment, but this one is really good. The plot is very exciting. Pindao has no education and is not good at speaking. In short, it is a good reading experience.

I like this kind of fairy product😒

A very clean book

I didn't think the first part was very special at first, but the part after Bai Ci was penetrated by the blood Ganoderma lucidum was well written. Although the later description is simple, it was very good with the emotional background from the previous part. [Like] I hope it can be continued.

Good-looking, but depressing and dark, I feel that the last sentence of the introduction is the essence of this book

It's very interesting, very beautiful, and the writing is very good. The details of the characters are also very good, it is not a mindless novel, it is very realistic. A novel that fascinates me.