HP, Abacus Beads and Platinum Peacock

What a cool character and a cool plot. Every time I thought that a certain node would end in a weird or pretentious situation like other fics, but in fact, every bad incident would be solved in a gentle or seemingly gentle way, especially the part in the original novel where the lion "survived from a desperate situation" and won the Academy Cup. The protagonist's network strength is simply terrifying, and the intensity of scheming is absolutely unmatched by the trio. The cooperation with the network can stop it just right. Normally, he is inconspicuous in front of Xiaolong (doubtful?), And he is gentle and polite in everything he does. But if something really happens, he is at the level of "Superman". Don't worry about how the problem is solved. In short, it is solved. He has the capital to enter Azkaban at the age of eleven. Oh my God, how can he be so awesome?

It's okay, there's no OOC at the moment, and the writing is delicate. It's just that the descriptions in each paragraph are too delicate, a bit like AI writing (not in a derogatory sense orz) Well, some parts can be abbreviated, which will be better. For example, in this scene, you don't need to describe every person's behavior. It is most likely to highlight a certain atmosphere, but the atmosphere does not need to be emphasized repeatedly. The overall impression is still very good, I haven't seen the main article in a long time [Blow a kiss]

This is not Deha's HP article that I read for the first time. Then I realized that I am not Ke Deha, but I just like Xiaolong

So far, I haven't seen anything OOC. The character of the protagonist is very calm. In fact, he feels more like a "businessman" who understands the pros and cons, and his methods are smart enough. Moreover, I feel that he speaks very elegantly. The dragon is really cute and has a dragon flavor. I feel more like Slytherin. The perspective is not like that of an outsider, who may not be friendly to the protagonist, but it feels like a normal thing. So far, there are a little tiny sprouts, but because both of them are still minors, it is not too much. It is more like a slow progress, starting from friends. Very nice, recommended.

It's very interesting. I've read nearly fifty chapters. The protagonist is a standard Slytherin, calm, smart and calculating. There is no embarrassing pretentious plot, no bloody relationship development, and Draco has not become a spoiled wife. He is still a noble platinum master. The current relationship between the two is in line with the Slytherin friendship. I think there is no OOC, and the emotional development is natural. In short, it is almost perfect. The only thing is that the description of the Lou family is a bit long-winded. I wrote nearly ten chapters about the Lou family's things during the Christmas holiday. , I personally still prefer the emotional game between them. I hope to abbreviate the specific development of the family.

Good-looking and good-looking, Xiaolong's character is still arrogant, and Mo Senluo is always at the worst possible step to prevent the situation from getting worse. Just like the name, Mo Senluo is like an abacus bead, calculating every day, Xiaolong is still like a platinum peacock, and his emotional line is In the gradual development, there are still many interesting points (although there may still be more evaluation and utilization now🤔), and the oriental fantasy is well integrated. There is also Xiaoduo, who is smart and silently observing. I look forward to the follow-up development [Please update][Please update]

It's your own, just brush it with a cheeky face~(˶╹ꇴ╹˶)~ Due to personal style issues, some babies may find the writing more complicated, but it really can't be changed. If you don't like it, please move on. Love you 🥰💐💐

Sheyuan is very friendly. The teacher writes everything without my faults and it is completely in line with my taste. It is like a miracle. PS: ① The Academy Cup is the Snake House's ´ₒ⦁⩊⦁ₒ` ② There is no plot in the original book where Lupine asked Neville to imagine the Boggart as a Boggart who became Neville's grandma ③ Xiaolong is completely the original character, but Moshenluo taught him to be more effective He achieves his goal, and when Xiaolong does something, he just doesn't go too far, and then it's fine as long as Xiaolong is happy. Xiaolong doesn't have to suppress his own personality at all. Mosello is still very fond of him in some aspects. ④ Xiaolong also won Quidditch with Slytherin✌︎' ֊' I am very satisfied with it, and the character design is also very enjoyable⌯oᴗo⌯

Yes, the author's knowledge is extremely high, and the content of the original work is almost the same. The appropriate new plot is logical and not abrupt. The relationship development will not be too fast, and it is not OOC. Neither of their characters are particularly quick to fall in love, but the mutual trust in the early stage is very delicious, five-star praise.

I really love Mo Senluo's rational and calm character. I just don't know when the two guys will make progress. It's a bit impatient to come early [laughs]

Ahhhhhh 137 You are not alone! But now, he looked at Mo Senluo's weak and unconscious face, and what was surging in his chest was not a measure of interests, but something more primitive and burning - unwillingness, anger, some kind of strong possessiveness that was forcibly awakened about the inviolability of "possessions", and perhaps, there were some things beyond the category of "ally" or "chess piece" that even he himself did not want to delve into. He slowly leaned down and pressed a very light but extremely solemn kiss on Mo Senluo's cold, sweaty forehead. "I saw your opportunity." Draco's voice was low, with the hoarseness unique to a teenager's voice change period, but there was an unquestionable determination, "But the chessboard you want, you are not the only one to play, Moshenluo."

The teacher's writing was super good. I was so happy to watch the rebuttal section where the academy added points. I like this feeling of having control over everything behind my back.

The protagonist's character is very interesting, and the plot is also very good (mainly focusing on the career line). I was still thinking about when the love line would start, but then I turned around and thought, no, it turns out that it has already started? [Laughing and crying] The back story is also very sweet, taking Xiaolong on his career path I love Xiaolong very much [sending my heart]

The author's writing is very good. The character settings and plots are well transitioned without any strong sense of abruptness. They are all acceptable. The relationship between the two protagonists and the characters of both parties are well transitioned. The author is very good at writing. The writing style is very good and there is not a lot of embarrassment.

It is very interesting, but there are many similarities in the plots in the book. For example, in the Potions class, Harry must first describe Harry's potions and how poorly he practiced them, and then Snape asked the protagonist an out-of-the-box question, and everyone else listened attentively. For another example, when the trio was involved in a public controversy, Ron was silent while Hermione was flipping through the information. It feels like a whole set of routines has been formed, but I just changed the way of saying it. I hope there can be some new ideas in these contents.

The protagonist is very sane, calm and collected. The main character is Draco. The protagonist looks a bit like Gallon when looking at Draco. The protagonist is of mixed Chinese and French descent. The French family has a pretty awesome background. The Chinese family background is somewhat similar to that of a noble family. The author's writing style is very good, especially the environment description technique can be used in the composition with slight modifications.

The teacher's writing is so good. It's good. It's good. It's good. It's good. It's good. It's good. It's so good. ε٩(๑> ₃ <)۶з

This book is really well written and has distinct characters. And the little dragon is cute too

The author's writing style is very delicate, the kind of writing style that moisturizes things and writes the story quietly. Readers can easily be involved in the book, and the behavior of the characters is also very consistent with the personality, which is well received. (Another: Big cheers to the author^^)

I feel that it is well written, and it is considered to be a good piece of fan fiction. It is worth recommending. [Sending Hearts]

It's a long and flowing article. Overall it's good, and the writing style is also good. However, some parts are too wordy and describe too many scenes, especially the part about the Lou family. The plot progress is a bit slow. It's so well written as a fanfic. Who would dare to think that it's so well written? It's just a fanfic. Sometimes when I'm reading it, I suddenly realize that I'm reading a fanfic. [Crying] The writing is very detailed. I will follow the author to the death.

This is the most high-end meal I have ever had from the beloved young master. The teacher's writing is very good and he is very friendly to our little dragons. The Cp is also very delicious😋˶>ᗜ<˶

It's so good-looking, the protagonist is really a standard Slytherin, always staying calm and rational. The characters are not perfect either. The writing is also good and even more perfect.

+1 Point for main attack, +3 points for pampering dragons, +2 points for snake garden, +2 points for high IQ, and +2 points for good writing skills. All in all, it looks great. Good reviews?

To Grolick: At first, when I saw the author saying that you are "the only son of a young daughter, the only son of a young son, with extraordinary talents and noble birth," I thought you would be unilaterally protecting Draco, thinking that you would be a perfect "tool man." Facts have proved that I was wrong. You are thoughtful, cautious and decisive, turning the tide at just the right place and time time and time again, and the means you use are always accurate. It's perfect, isn't it? You treat each other as "chess pieces" and "tools." I read hundreds of thousands of words of conspiracies and political confrontations, and admired your talent and timing, but I suddenly got a glimpse of your cold and bitter childhood. The author is undoubtedly a genius, and he perfectly explains why you are so resourceful and cold-blooded that far exceeds those of your age, yet you put a knife in my heart. Why? Why? Why you? Why you? Why should the sins of others be imposed on oneself, and the love of parents is so fragile, tacitly concealing it, and allowing a child to fall into a deeper and deeper quagmire! The clips that used to show your strength now reflect your fatigue and fragility, as well as your lost youthful spirit. I can only suffer through the screen and shed tears for your unspoken wounds. When the cold power status replaces family affection and strangles your young throat, my sadness also replaces the original smile, and I watch with collapse as you embark on the inevitable path. I am more and more happy for you to meet Draco. The golden light illuminates you like a light. I watch your relationship gradually deepen. You taught him how to stand side by side with you, and Draco is a very good student, isn't he? You have finally embraced happiness. Seeing how happy you are in your future clips makes me feel happy too. Perhaps only this ending is worthy of the ups and downs along the way. Now I even feel ashamed and regret for "praising" your reason at first. After you have more and more feelings, I cry with joy. My heart ached and swollen after reading for several hours, and tears slowly seeped out of the corners of my eyes. From beginning to end, I didn't seem particularly sad, but I felt sad for a long time. Fortunately, you are happy... Fortunately, fortunately. Although the stories we can see always come to an end, I wish you all the best and happiness forever, and hold hands and go on together! You are a perfect match!

Recommend! ! ! This evil guy is so happy! ! !

It looks so good. I've already seen half of it. I'm curious when we can get together.

It's also a very delicious book, but there seem to be too many adjectives. Well, the seasonings are a bit too much.

I recommend that anyone who has never had a five-star Michelin meal come here to eat here. Well, the food of this teacher is outrageously delicious. One wears a mask of gentleness every day, and the other pursues interests. Both businessmen are very easy to work with, and he is also a guiding type. It would be a pity not to watch such a good meal.

It's super beautiful. I recommend everyone to watch it.