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I took on the worst possible start in the pirate world: a Draco slave, a mermaid hybrid, and a collarbone mark.
But I know that in the West Sea, there is a girl with blue eyes who is on the run.
So when I was twelve years old, I found ten-year-old Robin and gave her a bag of bread, three baileys, and a sentence that she would use her whole life to verify:
"Knowledge is guiltless."
Then I turned around and joined the Navy, was taken away by Lieutenant General He and became a closed disciple, was tempered by Lieutenant General Garp, and was trained by Marshal of the Warring States Period.
I climbed to the position of general, stained my hands with countless blood, and built my network of power.
I thought I had everything under control until the peacock died in my arms.
From that day on, something completely shattered.
Navy colleagues began to privately call General 'Yunhu' the "silver-haired mad dog".
It doesn't matter.
I would rather join the sect of the Five Old Stars and the Financial Martial God and become Im's sharpest proxy blade, but I would also like to hide my ambitions and purposes in the whirlpool.
Hancock loved me, Vivi fell into a political marriage, Nami said that my arms are the only harbor, Perona would not have nightmares in my arms, and Reiju chased from dreams to reality.
But every night, I still touch the burning mark under my collarbone and think of those pale blue eyes in the barn.
Robin, wait a minute.
Wait for me, this mad dog, to chew up the old world for you...
[Paranoid mad criticism + Become a demon for love + Two-way redemption + Dark Marshal + Multiple heroines]
The first part has been completed, details await the release of the second part
Reader comments
So far it looks pretty good! [Blowing kiss]
By the way, the main character is a woman~ [laughs evilly]
Although it is a new book, I have not finished reading it yet. I will briefly analyze Sephiria's personality and make subjective comments. You can skip it.
Sephilia was helpless in her previous life, with no relatives or friends, except for placing her feelings on the virtual character Robin. This kind of person usually has several things: seeking emotional companionship, escaping from the pressure of reality, and pursuing low-cost emotional relationships.
This is why Sephiria is very patriarchal in the article (love makes people feel heavy). Its characteristics are: subjugating herself to serve the object, closely understanding the object's preferences, putting the object's needs above herself, suppressing her own personal emotions and ignoring her own needs, worrying about the joy and sorrow of the object, planning and wanting to control the future, and masochistic pursuit of power.
Sephilia's behavior, which seems to be beneficial to her, is actually controlling.
Robin seems to be being served, but in fact he is a domesticated and controlled person.
In short, the relationship between the two is not healthy. Many times in the original text, I felt that Sephiria's efforts beyond the limit were too much and could not be repaid, and she was kidnapped by invisible morality. (But fortunately, she did not ask for anything in return and would not turn into a yandere.) This is more important. It is precisely because she does not ask for anything in return that it is even more disturbing. I think Robin had the same idea as me in the early stage.
But as far as I can see, Robin has gotten used to it, and the relationship between the two has developed rapidly. The promises made by the two are also very heavy. They will always, definitely, and only. The information between the two is not equal. Sephiria knows everything about Robin and has never told Robin too important information. The character she created for Robin is a person with a tragic past, mysterious and lonely, who understands her, is dedicated to her, has strength, ideals and reason, and is an extremely perfect senior. His doubts have never been resolved, but they are gone when he falls in love (I don't like the way Robin has become like this)
Finally, I want to complain about a few points. When the two of them were in Black Iron, Sephiria went out early and came back late to support the family, while Robin stayed at home because of his injury. I always thought that after Robin recovered from his injury, he and Sephiria would support the family together, but all Robin did was to use his abilities to monitor at home. He also learned how to cook to help Sephiria, and secretly exercised his abilities like Sephiria, but no. In my impression, Robin is stronger, and she will enjoy being alone as a matter of course, okay? In short, the character design is not established. I can't see Robin's shining point, but a domesticated emm. And what I have seen so far is that Sephiria went back to celebrate her birthday with Robin for the second time, and she started to joke around with Robin without any change. The two had not communicated in depth, and they were separated by a year. In short, it was a bit abrupt, and the relationship was also very fast. The article did not say what Robin had been doing for the whole year, and she didn't say anything. That's all I want to say at the moment.
Whether it is gentle suggestions, sharp criticism, or enthusiastic encouragement, they are all meant to make a book from rough to refined, from ordinary to excellent. I have absolutely no intention of finding fault with it. I like it very much, so I hope it will be better. I hope more people will read it. I hope you will not be unhappy after seeing some of my suggestions.
Some of my personal comments after reading the entire article so far
The emotional part is a slow and steady narrative. Although many people have been persuaded to quit because of this reason, I still recommend everyone to be patient and take a look. The emotional development of Sephiria and Robin from childhood to adulthood is relatively clear and will not give people the illusion of being together inexplicably. The storyline and the delicate writing perfectly combine to create this pair of delicious CPs (os: Lily is awesome)
For someone like me who is not a fan of the original novel, I don't have a big problem with reading. This is a big boast. The plot settings are relatively consistent with the original plot (in my opinion).
The author's writing style is also of a delicate and natural style, including some emotional narrations and the development of the story, which are very detailed, vivid and rich. The description of the environment and the demeanor and personality of each person are very good, not so complicated and detailed.
It can be said that this work is the highest quality among the fan works I have ever seen. I haven't seen such a pure Lily for a long time... Boss, I will follow you for the rest of my life...
Part 2
I still want to lament that no one has good works.
This is one of the rare two-female stories about Pirates that I have seen on Tomato. This one can definitely be considered a piece of cake.
The emotions are delicate, the writing is smooth and so on.
The most important thing is that the plot is really exciting and delicious. If you like novels, you must not miss it.
I heard there was a knife in the back, I hope it's not too sharp [fear][fear][fear]
I'll write a more detailed review after I finish the few chapters I've stocked up [Thinking][Thinking][Thinking]
The emotions are very delicate and belong to the long-lasting type. I recommend it to those who are patient. The protagonist and Robin are really at odds with each other. It's so cool to redeem each other. At first, I thought that when the protagonist told Robin that your world is just a book, Robin's outlook on life, values, and world view would collapse. Collapse, but this situation did not happen. The author handled it very well. Robin accepted this reality calmly and often joked with the protagonist because of this. As far as the whole book is concerned, Robin is still very consistent with the original work without OOC. I hope the author will continue to work hard and create better works.
It's good-looking, with delicate emotions, not overt, and very friendly to people who don't know the original work. The protagonist is not strong from the beginning but develops slowly, with connections and power [Blowing kiss][Flowing kiss][Flowing kiss][Flowing kiss][Flowing kiss][Top post][Top post][Top post][Top post]
The heroine's character is very suitable for this world
Not as long as other pirate books, but a little more relaxed. It felt a bit boring in the beginning, but it got better after chapter 20. The most important thing is when to buckle (buahi
Let's put it this way, I think the author is completely inspired by Robin's dream girl, so I boldly predict here that even if other female characters join in the future, Robin will only be the heroine's favorite one, because I saw that there is more than just Robin in the introduction, and the author spent such a long time describing the chapter with Robin. It can be seen that he really loves this character [Like]
But there is a saying that Chapter 52 is so funny, it perfectly explains what a dream girl and a single pusher are.
Nice! [Admiration] Please give me more [Send your heart] [Send your heart] [Love]
It's good to read. There are very few books about One Piece.
It's so beautifully written, it's amazing.
The little sweet article is beautiful.
Very nice, looking forward to the follow-up
Is the author writing an autobiography on behalf of others?[Laughing][Laughing][Laughing][Laughing]
It's very interesting. I hope I can continue writing.
So sweet and reassuring [crying] Reading these few chapters before going to bed, even if I dream about getting into trouble at work, I will admit it [crying]
It's a good article with more details on facial expressions and emotions.
It's very beautiful, the writing is very delicate, and the two of them are so sweet at the moment, but when I think about the fact that they may have to separate in the future (´；ω；`)
It's very interesting. The author has put a lot of effort into it. Will it be updated again?
So far it looks pretty good! [Blowing kiss] By the way, the main character is a woman~ [laughs evilly]
Although it is a new book, I have not finished reading it yet. I will briefly analyze Sephiria's personality and make subjective comments. You can skip it. Sephilia was helpless in her previous life, with no relatives or friends, except for placing her feelings on the virtual character Robin. This kind of person usually has several things: seeking emotional companionship, escaping from the pressure of reality, and pursuing low-cost emotional relationships. This is why Sephiria is very patriarchal in the article (love makes people feel heavy). Its characteristics are: subjugating herself to serve the object, closely understanding the object's preferences, putting the object's needs above herself, suppressing her own personal emotions and ignoring her own needs, worrying about the joy and sorrow of the object, planning and wanting to control the future, and masochistic pursuit of power. Sephilia's behavior, which seems to be beneficial to her, is actually controlling. Robin seems to be being served, but in fact he is a domesticated and controlled person. In short, the relationship between the two is not healthy. Many times in the original text, I felt that Sephiria's efforts beyond the limit were too much and could not be repaid, and she was kidnapped by invisible morality. (But fortunately, she did not ask for anything in return and would not turn into a yandere.) This is more important. It is precisely because she does not ask for anything in return that it is even more disturbing. I think Robin had the same idea as me in the early stage. But as far as I can see, Robin has gotten used to it, and the relationship between the two has developed rapidly. The promises made by the two are also very heavy. They will always, definitely, and only. The information between the two is not equal. Sephiria knows everything about Robin and has never told Robin too important information. The character she created for Robin is a person with a tragic past, mysterious and lonely, who understands her, is dedicated to her, has strength, ideals and reason, and is an extremely perfect senior. His doubts have never been resolved, but they are gone when he falls in love (I don't like the way Robin has become like this) Finally, I want to complain about a few points. When the two of them were in Black Iron, Sephiria went out early and came back late to support the family, while Robin stayed at home because of his injury. I always thought that after Robin recovered from his injury, he and Sephiria would support the family together, but all Robin did was to use his abilities to monitor at home. He also learned how to cook to help Sephiria, and secretly exercised his abilities like Sephiria, but no. In my impression, Robin is stronger, and she will enjoy being alone as a matter of course, okay? In short, the character design is not established. I can't see Robin's shining point, but a domesticated emm. And what I have seen so far is that Sephiria went back to celebrate her birthday with Robin for the second time, and she started to joke around with Robin without any change. The two had not communicated in depth, and they were separated by a year. In short, it was a bit abrupt, and the relationship was also very fast. The article did not say what Robin had been doing for the whole year, and she didn't say anything. That's all I want to say at the moment. Whether it is gentle suggestions, sharp criticism, or enthusiastic encouragement, they are all meant to make a book from rough to refined, from ordinary to excellent. I have absolutely no intention of finding fault with it. I like it very much, so I hope it will be better. I hope more people will read it. I hope you will not be unhappy after seeing some of my suggestions.
Some of my personal comments after reading the entire article so far The emotional part is a slow and steady narrative. Although many people have been persuaded to quit because of this reason, I still recommend everyone to be patient and take a look. The emotional development of Sephiria and Robin from childhood to adulthood is relatively clear and will not give people the illusion of being together inexplicably. The storyline and the delicate writing perfectly combine to create this pair of delicious CPs (os: Lily is awesome) For someone like me who is not a fan of the original novel, I don't have a big problem with reading. This is a big boast. The plot settings are relatively consistent with the original plot (in my opinion). The author's writing style is also of a delicate and natural style, including some emotional narrations and the development of the story, which are very detailed, vivid and rich. The description of the environment and the demeanor and personality of each person are very good, not so complicated and detailed. It can be said that this work is the highest quality among the fan works I have ever seen. I haven't seen such a pure Lily for a long time... Boss, I will follow you for the rest of my life... Part 2 I still want to lament that no one has good works. This is one of the rare two-female stories about Pirates that I have seen on Tomato. This one can definitely be considered a piece of cake. The emotions are delicate, the writing is smooth and so on. The most important thing is that the plot is really exciting and delicious. If you like novels, you must not miss it. I heard there was a knife in the back, I hope it's not too sharp [fear][fear][fear] I'll write a more detailed review after I finish the few chapters I've stocked up [Thinking][Thinking][Thinking]
The emotions are very delicate and belong to the long-lasting type. I recommend it to those who are patient. The protagonist and Robin are really at odds with each other. It's so cool to redeem each other. At first, I thought that when the protagonist told Robin that your world is just a book, Robin's outlook on life, values, and world view would collapse. Collapse, but this situation did not happen. The author handled it very well. Robin accepted this reality calmly and often joked with the protagonist because of this. As far as the whole book is concerned, Robin is still very consistent with the original work without OOC. I hope the author will continue to work hard and create better works.
It's good-looking, with delicate emotions, not overt, and very friendly to people who don't know the original work. The protagonist is not strong from the beginning but develops slowly, with connections and power [Blowing kiss][Flowing kiss][Flowing kiss][Flowing kiss][Flowing kiss][Top post][Top post][Top post][Top post] The heroine's character is very suitable for this world
Not as long as other pirate books, but a little more relaxed. It felt a bit boring in the beginning, but it got better after chapter 20. The most important thing is when to buckle (buahi
Let's put it this way, I think the author is completely inspired by Robin's dream girl, so I boldly predict here that even if other female characters join in the future, Robin will only be the heroine's favorite one, because I saw that there is more than just Robin in the introduction, and the author spent such a long time describing the chapter with Robin. It can be seen that he really loves this character [Like] But there is a saying that Chapter 52 is so funny, it perfectly explains what a dream girl and a single pusher are.
Nice! [Admiration] Please give me more [Send your heart] [Send your heart] [Love]
It's good to read. There are very few books about One Piece.
It's so beautifully written, it's amazing.
The little sweet article is beautiful.
Very nice, looking forward to the follow-up
Is the author writing an autobiography on behalf of others?[Laughing][Laughing][Laughing][Laughing]
It's very interesting. I hope I can continue writing.
So sweet and reassuring [crying] Reading these few chapters before going to bed, even if I dream about getting into trouble at work, I will admit it [crying]
It's a good article with more details on facial expressions and emotions.
It's very beautiful, the writing is very delicate, and the two of them are so sweet at the moment, but when I think about the fact that they may have to separate in the future (´；ω；`)
It's very interesting. The author has put a lot of effort into it. Will it be updated again?