Folk-Custom Cultivation, Starting with Funeral Work

I read Chapter 11 and couldn't wait to review it. It's not as bad as the comment section said. I think it's quite good on the subject of tomatoes. The style of writing has changed so quickly since then. It's not good to be an official.

It feels like the author should be an old author who has opened a new account. The writing skills are relatively deep. The relevant characters and some subtle descriptions are also relatively detailed. The setting of the macro background also makes people accept to continue writing, and it feels like they can go very far. The rest of the plot is boring. It feels like I changed the map and focused on describing some folk customs when I first started writing. Start with a few tips that feel engaging. Now, I feel like I am going to embark on the traditional path of cultivating immortality.

The first part is written very well, but the second part is like a different person.

Mother-in-law and mother-in-law are not decisive enough when doing things. The first is about Mr. Liu. There is a problem and he wants to fuck him. The protagonist is still passive and fights back in a roundabout way. It takes several chapters. Then there is the old ghost and his apprentice. They were caught after committing a crime. Then Master Zhang Xian and the protagonist talked nonsense with them, and the other party even bargained with them, obviously trying to hide something. The most ridiculous thing is that he also said that in accordance with the law, accomplices should be assigned. Just write a soul-searching technique

What can I say, I could have given it full marks. To be honest, the first few chapters were very interesting to listen to, but the jumps were too fast. The pace was good, but after the inn was burned, I felt that it was suddenly out of touch with the beginning of the plot.

First of all, the author's accumulation of folklore knowledge far exceeds that of ordinary Tomato authors, and his writing style is also good. Logically speaking, accumulation + writing style, the author should be popular. However, the novel is somewhat interesting, but it cannot be read in detail. The layout and structure are average. Reasons: 1. The author's new novel should not be published in two copies or even three copies; As a newcomer, you should not polish your debut work carefully. Writing cannot be done quickly. Just making quick money will not work. Write a good book first. 2. The description of the cultivation system is not systematic. The descriptions of various heretical methods are actually OK, but the basic cultivation system is not polished enough. You should go to Qidian to see more imitations, such as the pure Xiaolong works by Qidian author 3. The plot foreshadowing and advancement are old-fashioned, with no new ideas and will not make you feel better. Let me give you some suggestions. Watch more Lin Zhengying zombie movies to see how the movie lays out and advances the plot, and how to deal with conflicts. In short, I am not a novice system author, but I can beat 80% of the authors on Tomato, but I am not careful enough, the layout and plot are cliché, and I need more practice, but the dual-opening does not pay attention to the readers.

How should I put it? It was okay in the early stage, but it was a bit confusing later on. Many of the foreshadowings in the early stage were not recycled, which made me feel very disconnected. For example, the will-o'-wisps and the like were due to the double-opening, and the rhythm was difficult to control?

I took in two children who didn't know the details, but also confiscated the plugs. What role did the plugs play? Did it play a role in revealing the world? In addition, the male protagonist keeps saying that it has some effect, maybe something like that, really,,, the subject matter is obviously very good, ugh

The smell of AI is too strong

Generally speaking, people who do nothing at the beginning are ignorant of metaphysics and believe in science [laughing and crying]