A Guide to the Eternal Juvenile

The setting is novel, the world view is relatively dark, and the writing is cold. Overall, it's pretty good, but it's a pity that the writing technique, with its third-person perspective and a lot of line drawings, seems a bit boring and makes it easy to abandon the text. I would like to give some suggestions to the author. He can revise it from beginning to end, intersperse some memory fragments appropriately or let Qi tell some funny jokes (?) To provide a slight transition period between various encounters. It can be seen that the author wants to write about a very difficult road to survival that is always disrupted by changes, but he can't be so desperate all the time, there has to be a little rainbow~ The programming-related knowledge in the article seems quite professional, but people who don't learn this will probably abandon the article because they can't understand it) By the way, first of all, I am not a shotacon, and secondly, I clicked in because I saw that the protagonist is shota. I feel that the author can write more psychological descriptions of children, inner thoughts, and cuteness, so that they can attract Shotacon readers to continue reading. Of course, I am not a shotacon (seriously) The protagonist has survived on his own for so many years, but he has no experience of growing up physically or mentally as an ordinary person, so he is still a child. He has learned a lot of ways to survive because of the harsh environment. I think it is okay to use some childish and cute descriptions. The perspective of the protagonist I see in the article always makes me feel that he is an adult and a child at one time. How should I put it? It's a bit contradictory (scratching my head) Then, the setting of psychic powers in the article is very interesting. The classification and other aspects seem to be original, but it is mentioned a bit late. I think such exciting content can have some foreshadowing or preview in the front, otherwise everyone would think it is the wasteland survival of ordinary human worldviews at the beginning... That's all I'll write for the time being. Come on, author!

The following content is my humble opinion. This is my subjective feeling after reading the book. If anything is offensive, please ignore my comments. : This work is pretty well written. The author is pretty good at expressing emotions. The writing style of the novel reflects a cold feeling, and the author's writing skills are also qualified. The description of the novel is relatively delicate and the plot is dark. It is easy for readers to sympathize with the protagonist. It is very cruel. The protagonist's experience is uncomfortable to watch. It is too cruel. But on the other hand, this shows that the author's writing ability is still good and can make readers empathize. This novel has a bit of literature and art, and the wording is relatively advanced. It feels like it has some characteristics of poetry. This article is a slow-burning one, so you can read it carefully. And the author integrates his own worldview into his works very well, making the world appear more real. This is a trait that many Tomato writers don't have. The author does not put his worldview on the surface, but truly integrates it into the plot, making the work more immersive. But it feels like some of the descriptions are of little use. Even if it is to express the character's mood or artistic conception, it feels a bit redundant and seems a bit over-edited. Of course, it may also be the author's special writing style or habits. This opinion is just my humble opinion. If you don't like it, don't criticize it. I also don't know why the author always writes some words wrongly. In the end this work was worthy of a "B" rating. Although this work cannot be called a star hanging in the city, it has begun to take shape in its own right. It can be called a good work. With a little carving, it can definitely become a more perfect gem. I see potential from the author and hope that the author will continue to work hard and update it. 😳 This is just how I feel about what I've seen so far. If I read more, I might be able to give a more objective and detailed evaluation, so I will try my best to follow up. And I also believe that the author will definitely write better. There are some inaccurate remarks about the characteristics of some poems. But I think the author uses a lot of line drawings. Moreover, there is nothing poisonous about the writing, which makes people want to read it patiently. The author's writing style is relatively good, and his portrayal of the characters' psychology is also vivid and vivid. This writing style with many small details reminds me of "Lord of Mysteries". It is full of life and real. I really like this style. In short, it is somewhat different from those fast-paced cool articles on Tomato. There is a certain threshold for reading, and it may not necessarily meet the taste of the public. But it should appeal to some people who like the genre.

Koshota's Suffering Knife

This book is very good, the writing is very good, the plot is also very good, it gives people a sense of calm and a little bit of sadness. And a sense of reality. I feel like this should be of the type that will be more exciting later on.

Shocking and delicious, it is simply a good article that is rarely seen in a century. The little girl who reads this kind of survival and chaos calls it awesome. The author's online world view is not common but it is okay. I like this kind of survival rules and so on. It may change in subsequent updates. For now, it is very okay.

Now that I see it, I feel that it looks awesome, which is pretty cool. However, the first few chapters of the protagonist are really miserable, but they are also very vivid and shocking. It's just that the system of cultivating immortals, or the superpower system, is a bit abstract and hard to understand. The writing style and concept are both good, and it's not a mindless piece of writing, which is very rare. I hope the author will continue to work hard.

The technique of describing the poor image cannot be surpassed, it is strong, it is really strong And the way of describing superpowers cannot be surpassed by Tomato. It is highly recommended to read it. If you were not a web writer, this would definitely be a masterpiece [Bird Food]

The writing is good, and it is a long-flowing type. The plot line of the story is very smooth. I didn't see any traces of AI. The whole story is surrounded by a touch of sadness. Maybe sadness is the main theme of this story. There are too few chapters at the moment, and I don't seem to find anything particularly outstanding. I'll give it a 5 as a token of encouragement.

I have read Chapter 215 so far, and my feeling is that the early stage (in Feixuli) was the Diary of Little Balsam Pear, and then I started picking up small bitter melons from big ones, and small ones from small ones, and picked up a whole room of little boys [lick screen] [lick screen] [lick screen] The only regret is that the three powers of Xiao Sui'an are empty, self-destruction, and the drama is gone 😢 Overall, it is very interesting. Come on, author, don't stop updating.

At first, 7 was in the left eye. In order to deal with the statement, the scientists broke it. Later, it was repaired and replaced in the right eye. In the previous 50 chapters, the protagonist used the power to grow the left eye under the command of 7 in the right eye. Now in the chapter (rebirth), 7 needs to be transformed because of the growth of power, so 7 has to dig it out. It turns out that it was dug out from the left eye. When did 7 run back to the left eye? After leaving the earth, what is the main plot? How do you feel about it and write whatever comes to mind?