Key points: no male protagonist, no female competition, modern cultivation of immortality, non-traditional cultivation system, daily growth direction, not a fast-paced and refreshing article, write wherever you dream.
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Pei En leaned on the bed, the fluorescence of the mobile phone screen reflected on her face. She scrolled through the outrageous notifications and couldn't help but mutter: "The world has started to get a little abnormal recently..."
Pein accidentally played a holographic game until the spell she learned ignited a small flame in reality.
? ? ?
Oh my god, the game she was playing wasn't going to come true, was it? !
…
Pei En used a teleportation disk in an emergency and fell asleep. Later, she was awakened by a chill. Looking at the unfamiliar environment around her and the vague cold fragrance in the air, she slowly turned her head.
A snow-white fox squatted at the head of her bed, its nine fluffy tails swaying gently behind her.
A cold female voice sounded in her ears, "Pei En, you are injured."
Reader comments
It's pretty good. I basically pay attention to the wording. Other than that, the seniors and seniors pay attention to everything. Nothing is too outrageous (but there is some shit/I'll go). The majority of the female characters are female. Although it's a gameplay, they can basically understand it. It should be friendly to those who don't play games.
One flaw that I personally care about is that I feel that there are occasional weak descriptions without realizing it. The protagonist, including the protagonist, sometimes likes to use "slender" to describe women (of course there are many strong women in it). In addition, there aren't many descriptions, but it seems that women still have skirts/long hair and so on. Since it's not female-oriented, I think it's acceptable.
Abandoned, the reason is shown in Chapter 1 (it should have been added by the author later). The comment sisters have screenshots.
I didn't think there was anything wrong with not being radical myself. After all, ideas change slowly. What do you mean by the latter part?
Very good, the story is told very clearly
The disadvantage is that the sense of déjà vu is really strong, not so much about the setting but the direction of the story, including drops from monsters, being told by an "NPC" that all the materials in the body can be used, the cold-blooded senior who was only mentioned once, being betrayed by teammates, precursors to invasion, etc.
The heroine's past experience is well written. It can be seen that she has a relatively complete world view. There may be a little path dependence in the front, which is normal. It can be seen that she also has writing skills and ideas! Come on (:3っ )っ
It's a very interesting setting. The game is gradually invading reality. It's still in the early stages. The writing is very interesting. I'm looking forward to the main plot unfolding.
It looks good but there are too few [please update]
It looked good, but it stopped suddenly. It was too little.
It's nice to watch, interesting, and the logic is very smooth [like]
It's pretty good. I basically pay attention to the wording. Other than that, the seniors and seniors pay attention to everything. Nothing is too outrageous (but there is some shit/I'll go). The majority of the female characters are female. Although it's a gameplay, they can basically understand it. It should be friendly to those who don't play games. One flaw that I personally care about is that I feel that there are occasional weak descriptions without realizing it. The protagonist, including the protagonist, sometimes likes to use "slender" to describe women (of course there are many strong women in it). In addition, there aren't many descriptions, but it seems that women still have skirts/long hair and so on. Since it's not female-oriented, I think it's acceptable. Abandoned, the reason is shown in Chapter 1 (it should have been added by the author later). The comment sisters have screenshots. I didn't think there was anything wrong with not being radical myself. After all, ideas change slowly. What do you mean by the latter part?
Very good, the story is told very clearly The disadvantage is that the sense of déjà vu is really strong, not so much about the setting but the direction of the story, including drops from monsters, being told by an "NPC" that all the materials in the body can be used, the cold-blooded senior who was only mentioned once, being betrayed by teammates, precursors to invasion, etc. The heroine's past experience is well written. It can be seen that she has a relatively complete world view. There may be a little path dependence in the front, which is normal. It can be seen that she also has writing skills and ideas! Come on (:3っ )っ
It's a very interesting setting. The game is gradually invading reality. It's still in the early stages. The writing is very interesting. I'm looking forward to the main plot unfolding.
It looks good but there are too few [please update]
It looked good, but it stopped suddenly. It was too little.
It's nice to watch, interesting, and the logic is very smooth [like]