Traveling Through the Dead Zone, I Became the Ancestor of Yunkui Mountain!

I think you need to change the soul-piercing thing. It's better now. Well, the circle seems to be relatively exclusive. Although I don't care, the story just needs to be good. It's a sinking market anyway. Why do they think about this thing? It all depends on the story. Of course, this is just a small opinion. If you are an ambush writer, then you'd better come as early as possible. The pace is faster now, and you can probably bury it within ten pictures. Otherwise, some readers, well, they will leave a negative review without seeing the ambush writer section. I have seen this kind of thing too many times. You can also add some small daily details, otherwise it will be easy to finish writing, especially in this type of game that has not yet been completed. It is easy to come up with some new things, new concepts, or the previous things have been changed.

Overall, I tried my best!

My writing skills need to be improved, keep up the good work

Generally speaking, you can look at the beginning

Although the pace of the first ten chapters is slightly faster and some of the plots are a bit stiff, the author's writing skills have been significantly improved in the later chapters. The size of the story is no longer important. The protagonist travels back and forth in the world of the three games (Genshin Impact, Zone Zero, Collapse Star Railroad). There are no obvious chapters in the story. Readers who want to read the original storyline are asked to play the game. Overall, this book is quite in line with my appetite.

Good but a bit fast

Why do people think it's not good to send a girl as a gift? [Thinking] I think it's okay. I think this book is pretty good. Keep up the good work, author. I look forward to your wonderful performance in the future. [Blowing kiss]

The writing is good, I find it interesting anyway

I can take my apprentices on a trip later.

Can the author give me the cover? 🙏🙏🙏