Online Gaming: I Transformed into a Female Sword Immortal

After the beginning, it turns into a business struggle article, which is really awesome. I'm here to see the game, not the business.

In the transformation story, there is no description of women's bodies in women's clothing. It would be better to write about the heroine. It's a pity 🤦

You've done all the tricks just because you don't have the ability to turn the table over.

It's not very nice, and the author can't tell the difference between the game and reality. Games are games, reality is reality, and the two cannot be compared. Since you are writing about an online game, the main storyline should be about fighting monsters and upgrading. What kind of palace battles are you writing about? I've seen more than 80 chapters where the protagonist is still at level 10. If he doesn't kill monsters, won't he level up? And if you, the author, plan to write about online games, then you should understand one truth, that is, strength is the most important thing. As long as the protagonist is strong enough, he will kill enemy unions indiscriminately until they are disbanded. Moreover, there is no advantage of rebirth in the protagonist, so what is the point of writing about rebirth? As for the author, do you think it is possible to treat the protagonist in reality? As long as the game doesn't come to reality. Who will target the protagonist? For those powerful and powerful forces, who can't get rid of the big tail, who is so messed up, and who will do something that is thankless? Even if reality comes later in the game, only the protagonist knows about it. Does anyone else know? Since you don't know, it's even less likely that you will face the protagonist offline for the sake of winning or losing in the game. Even if those people behind know about it, do you think the country will not be able to react? This book can only tell what type of writing the author wanted to write? I can't understand it, it's too complicated.

The subject matter is good, and the beginning is good, but the author must think that he is too clever. He uses online games to add good subject matter to attract readers, and then writes some nonsense in the middle to catch readers off guard. It is a pity that this subject matter has failed.

It's all about business wars. I'm here to watch monsters and upgrades.

Well, what can I say about the plot? It feels a bit unsmooth, unnatural, and not very attractive. Alas, like a business website, unlike an online game article, it still lacks a sense of reality. Even in an imaginary world, it can still be read without a sense of reality.

Very old writing style

🙂 My sister will be kicked out of the hospital soon, and the protagonist is going to make money in the game.

Dude, did you go off topic? Do you want to see how boring what you write next is? It's directly turned into a business war. Damn it, I'm still waiting to see you. Yaochi Holy Land, what kind of equipment does it fit? Rare professions and such, you start a business war for me, what the hell is there to see?