A Mute Girl Who Can't Hurt a Fly × The World's Top Assassin
(A writing exercise, so it has plenty of flaws. If you don't like it, feel free to move on, and please go easy on me. Thank you.)
Lin Wan is the quietest nobody in the village, huddling through life under her stepmother's beatings and her stepbrother's covetous gaze. Until one night, she drags a man on the verge of death out of a stream running red with blood.
His name is Lu Chen. He bears a wound so deep it exposes the bone, and carries a dagger gleaming with an eerie blue light. She secretly hides him away, using half a bowl of thin gruel she'd saved and herbs hastily gathered in the mountains to clumsily keep his faint breath going.
When the woodshed leaks, he silently pushes the dry straw toward her. When she burns the back of her hand, he asks coldly, “If it hurts, why don't you cry?” Lin Wan only smiles and shakes her head, gesturing with her scarred hands: I'm used to it.
That is, until her drunken stepbrother kicks open the woodshed door. As a shadow lunges at her, a streak of eerie blue light moves faster than her trembling eyes.
As blood spatters the woodpile, Lu Chen wipes his dagger clean and holds a hand out to her, huddled in the corner: “Come with me, or stay here and wait to die?”
She takes his bloodstained hand.
From then on, the mute girl from the mountains steps into true darkness. She doesn't know that the man leading her out of the abyss is the top assassin of the infamous Hall of Yama; she knows even less that the twisted engravings on the token at his waist, which she cannot read, will sweep her into what kind of raging undercurrent.
Coming soon: “Infinite Escape: The Silly Beauty Is Being Watched”
[A Silly, Ghost-Attracting Innocent Girl × A Wolfish Protector]
Pretty good. A mute girl with a miserable life experience × a charlatan killer is not a heroine, golden finger, strong woman, canary... Setting. Because of the grace of saving their lives, the two people came together, the mute girl had someone to rely on, and the killer had peace of mind. It's good that the author can finish the story according to the storyline without too many ups and downs, and it has a beginning and an end. The word count is small, no mistakes are made, and the writing is complete. Can be seen. The world is far away, May Lu Qi and Xiao Linghua (Lu Chen and Lin Wan) live in peace for the rest of their lives.
After reading the special comments, I found that although the novel is short, the characters and plot logic are very good. It belongs to the kind of long-running redemption novel. A poor mute girl who is not favored accidentally saves a cold-blooded and powerful killer. From then on, the gears of fate turn. On the way to escape, they gradually got used to and relied on each other, gained friends, and finally gave birth to a big fat child. From then on, the killer went into seclusion and the mute girl had a family. It's a perfect curtain call. I hope the author will reply after reading it to prove that there are readers who recognize your work. 👍👍👍
It's good-looking, and it's a plain and true story. The previous focus is mainly on how the relationship between the male and female protagonists heats up. There is not much written about other things, but it does not feel boring to read because the author writes the psychological changes of the male and female protagonists in a very delicate and touching way. What follows is a turbulent situation, with the male and female protagonists moving toward peace little by little. The thing itself is not written much or complicated. It mainly writes about the feelings of the characters and the words that are very similar to the narration of the story (?). I don't know if the author will write some modern articles in the future, especially campus articles, but I feel that the author will write very well.
The author's writing is really good! The book is not long, but the story is very complete and smooth, and the plot has ups and downs, twists and turns. There are not many characters, but each one is full. Even characters who only appear in a few sentences, such as Red Scorpion, can get a glimpse of the character's emotions behind the text. Moreover, the author is logical, has a beginning and an end, and writes an ending for everyone. The author is very good at describing details, hiding emotions in many small eye movements, which is particularly picturesque. Again, I would like to praise the male and female protagonists. They really have very normal personalities and outlook. It is rare to find such a couple in novels nowadays. The male and female protagonists have no misunderstandings and will not be jealous of friends of the opposite sex. In the days when the male protagonist is away, the female protagonist has been doing what she can, working hard to grow up, and taking care of the family. She is really the kind of woman I have always admired, gentle and tough, wrapping ordinary days with love, and a woman with great wisdom. The only thing I feel a bit regretful about is that there are too many killer waves in Tuoling Town later on. Every time I try to mislead and set up a trap, it feels a bit repetitive. But overall it's very good!
I don't know why so many people in the comment area say that this article is dull. I think this article is very ups and downs. Isn't their experience very thrilling? 🤔 🤔 🤔
Yes, the plot is novel, and the characters are also novel. However, the plot is too short. The part where the male protagonist fakes his own death and escapes from the killer organization on a mission is very concise. If the plot is carefully polished and the writing is more delicate, and it has 200,000 words, it will definitely be a hit! Of course it looks good now [sending my heart] [sending my heart]
It feels like the style of AI
It looks very good so far (´∀`*). The author's writing style is good and the characters of the male and female protagonists are well created. However, I personally feel that sometimes the description of their emotions is a bit wordy.
Super good-looking and intelligent 🥰🥰🥰😘😘😘
The writing is very delicate, the reading is moving, the descriptions are vivid, and the male and female protagonists are really sweet! The process is step by step, not hasty, but a long-lasting and deep feeling. Along the way, the male protagonist and the female protagonist are keeping each other warm. The male protagonist's life is no longer full of blood and blood, and the female protagonist also has a warm home. They are growing up along the way. The calmness of the male protagonist and the gentleness of the female protagonist are so matched. I really like this 🥺