Dragon Clan: Picking up Little Monsters on a Rainy Night

The writing is good, and the most impressive thing is the characterization of the characters, but in many aspects it can be seen that the author is a novice. [Thinking] I would like to make some suggestions. 1. It is best not to exceed four lines for each paragraph. The four lines for mobile reading do not allow you to reduce the content, but to divide it into more paragraphs. 2. Many descriptions are already clear enough. If you add an extra bracket to explain, firstly, it will affect the perception, and secondly, it will affect the sense of substitution. As for other plots, I won't comment too much. I hope the author will write better and better [Note]

It looks good. If I don't join Kassel, my daily life with Eri is pretty good. I occasionally torture my brother-in-law, but it's too little.

If you only focus on the perfect ending and don't care about the plot structure, you can fall in love. The author's writing style is still very good. The protagonist's personality and ability settings are good, and the writing style is quite delicate. However, many characters are marginalized and there is a sense of confusion from the original basic setting. The plot party may feel uncomfortable [Thinking][Eating Melon] The good points remain the original judgment, and it is not recommended that new readers of Dragon Clan fall into the trap of plot parties. The setting is too complicated, the source of childishness is severely persecuted, and all descriptions of people other than Hui and the protagonist are downplayed. Moreover, the author's own understanding of the setting of Dragon Clan is extremely unclear. The characters appearing in the book deviate greatly from the original characters. It is easy for new readers of Dragon Clan to greatly misjudge the original characters, leaving people with other than the protagonist and Hui. It feels like everyone else is a clown, seriously underestimates Herzog's IQ, and overestimates the acceptance ability of the elephant turtle. The character of Zhong Hui conflicts with the original work. She will not say "so-and-so is bad, so-and-so is good" to the people important to her (no matter how different her character is under the influence of the protagonist's appearance, her blank slate character and innocent nature will not let her say such words). Many details affect the perception.

I love it. Can you please update more? I support you by watching commercials [laughs]

There will always be someone who can write down the dragons that Jiangnan can't write down for him. There is always someone who can provide plots that Jiangnan cannot provide.

Very good writing and a good plot, which made the corners of my mouth curl up.

The author is really good at writing daily life. The first two-thirds of the content is written very well, both in terms of rhythm and picture description. However, the quality begins to decline in the later parts. Whether it is fighting or daily life, the rhythm is a bit out of touch, especially the description of the battle is really not good. It feels wrong at first glance, but the excellent love daily life makes up for it. The whole text is basically written around Eri, so I can only say sorry for the other regrets in the original text. There is almost no description. Those who want to save the world can only go out and turn right. The rating I give you is really based on my daily experience. It is really well written.

It's very good, it can be considered a new dragon novel.

Nice. But I would like to ask the author, what timeline is he in now?

It's quite good. I have never read Dragons. I have only heard a few words from other people. Anyway, I quite like this novel, but the author is a bit partial to that kind of sentence structure. Xx, not xx, xx, xxx. But overall it's pretty good.

Nice. The little monster was pampered from an orphaned girl directly into the daily life of a newlywed. When will the author update ten times a day [laughter]

Like this book very much. I had been reading for a long time and couldn't find the book I wanted to read. This book appeared many times in my recommendation list. I read the introduction several times and mistakenly thought it was the kind of dragon book that changes tragedy but somehow doesn't pay attention to details. But after reading it, it really shocked me. It pays great attention to details. The descriptions are very touching, especially the sweet spots. I used to be embarrassed when I read these, but I just feel very sweet when I see the author's big letters. Full marks recommended [cry] [cry] [cry] [cry] It really saved me from the book drought for so long. I like the author to continue his hard work [blowing kiss] [blowing kiss]

Dr. Lin is cold on the outside and hot on the inside, fragrant and soft, with pear-painted clothes, incompetent and wrathful.

The character creation in the early stage is quite good, but there are some problems in the later stage, but it is watchable. Overall, I can give it 4 stars. There are a lot of problems in the later period. The characters written by the author are all like robots, emotionless and dry, as if they were written by AI, as if they were AI [smile]

It's pretty good. I'm really looking forward to Shangshan Yue's reaction to the protagonist and Tachibana Masamune after he learns about Eriki.

I originally thought he was an AI, but when I looked at it, I suddenly realized that he is very good-looking. I like it! ! ! ! ! For our new readers and plot fans, this book is extremely unfriendly

Not bad, come on, I'm looking forward to it

A new Dragon Clan fanfic is really rare

I can accurately say that there are not many tomatoes that I like now. This book is very comfortable to read. The author's writing style is very good.

It's very good. I didn't join that school. It's pretty good, but the chapters are a bit short. The overall tone of the novel is that of ordinary daily life. It's pretty good. Most of them are self-created plots. It's a bit boring at the end, but including the particularly good novels, most of them are about daily life and pretty good, but I'm a little too lazy to read them.

I highly recommend it, brothers. I can't say enough about how beautiful it is. I like this kind of daily life the best.

The writing style is very good, the emotional line is very good, and he is very good at persecuting my uncle [laughter]

Needless to say, it's a good book and beautiful to read.

Send you to become the genuine Long San

A nice fanfic

Okay, it's pretty good-looking

It's very good, the emotions are written in detail.

Really well written

Comparing Tomato with humanities, it can be said to be T0 level

Ahhhh, the corner of my mouth! ! The corner of my mouth! ! I can't hold it in any longer! ! ✔✔✔