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Let's talk about the shortcomings first: the author is not suitable for writing lily novels. To be precise, he is not suitable for writing any novel that requires the delicate psychological description of both parties in the love process. The reasons for liking each other are written by the author in a direct and strange way. This is not a love story, this is a novel. You should give readers a reason that can arouse their emotions, rather than an inexplicable feeling. Audience problem: The author's book title and introduction clearly state that this is a lily novel. Most people who like to read survival-related cool stories will basically not come. This can be seen from the fact that most of the cool points in the article, the number of comments and likes are high, but there are only a few sentences about the relationship between the heroines. However, the lily written by the author is like the relationship between the male and female protagonists in most cool books. It is only used to prove sexual orientation. As a result, not many people who like lily can insist on reading. The combat power system is complex. In today's fast-paced world, different names are given to different levels. Not many people have the patience to sort it out slowly. And if someone keeps reading, they may not be able to distinguish the strengths and weaknesses of different levels when they come back to read it. Advantages: The author writes good pretentious scenes, and skips most of the psychological activities of the supporting characters. He rarely describes the psychological games between the characters. It is very refreshing to write it quickly. Although there is no depth, it is fast and refreshing enough. It is a classic refreshing writing method. Suggestion: The author directly writes classic and refreshing articles, which are simple, easy to write, and have a large audience. Simply divide the combat power system into numerical ranks, or simple and easy-to-understand distinctions such as upper, middle, lower, low-level, middle-level, and high-level. Reference example "I'm stuck in a bug, why am I invincible?" "Volume 1, before mentioning that disasters will consume the energy of the Forbidden Land. The author needs to control the level of enjoyment, which is, to be precise, the speed at which the protagonist's strength improves. If the early improvement is rapid and the later upgrade speed slows down, a sense of fragmentation will lead to the loss of a large number of readers. If you improve in the early stage, the slower person will finish immediately. Also write Lily: If the author still insists on writing Lily, he can make the relationship between the heroines a little more awkward. According to the author's update speed, my suggestion is to entangle more than five pictures first, and use emergencies in the early stage to force the relationship between the heroines. Make a choice between the other party and an important thing or item, and be entangled in it. The more awkward it is, the better. If you don't know how to write down your mental journey, let the AI polish it. Don't avoid major pitfalls. For example, don't make a choice between the heroine's life and a certain life-saving prop. And after the relationship heats up, don't use this way of writing anymore, as readers will feel nervous. And you can add the Shura field content appropriately. When writing the Shura field, remember that the supporting character's expression description > psychological description ≥ action description, and let the supporting character provoke another heroine who feels that she is being bullied. As for the heroine who feels bullied, psychological description > action description ≥ expression description. Actions are the best way to declare sovereignty, but too much description will make readers impatient, so it should be moderate. Clearly written about Lily's theme At present, I think it is mainly divided into industrial saccharine type and delicate type. The industrial saccharine type is about casually looking for small misunderstandings and other incidents. It does not require too many detailed descriptions of misunderstandings. After the misunderstanding is resolved, it is quickly sweetened. It is fast, efficient, and simple. It can quickly retain readers, but it is easy to be boring later. The delicate type is a detailed description of the process of love, the entanglement of both parties in the love process, the inner struggle, and most importantly, the feeling of choosing the other person without hesitation after the entanglement. This way of writing, the early foreshadowing will dissuade many people, of course, if it is well written, my suggestion for this kind of writing is to cut the knife appropriately, and give some candy after the knife is finished (warm and daily) to retain the person, ([laughing] funny and life-saving)

The plot is reasonable, there are no poisonous points so far, it feels like a cool novel, the feminization process is lacking, and there are few descriptions of women's clothing.

I have been following this book so far, and I personally feel it is very good. I have a very curious question. One day a strange voice said that your lover's feet are the most sensitive. If you don't believe it, try it and find out that it is true. After being surprised, do you really have no strange thoughts? I remember that "Don't Regret" is after talking about weaknesses. I think many people think it is the second week (I don't deny it), but tide doesn't know. So is there some foreshadowing that made tide discover that the voice was definitely from her side? It's possible that I didn't understand it myself. If anyone knows, can you point me out? No harm, just out of curiosity.

This book is still very nice. The content is novel and comprehensive in the early, late and mid-term. Again, everyone has their own favorite things. Just watch what you like, and forget it if you don't like it.

It's good-looking, super good-looking, even though I was just listening to the book [awkward laugh][awkward laugh][awkward laugh]

As for the survival series, it has always been a highlight, you know? I said that there are more than 100 survival series books here. I chose you as the author among the more than 100 books. A good author is one who updates honestly.

It looks more refreshing, looking forward to getting my hands on it.

It's good, but author, you don't want others to know that you like to write this type of novel (Villain's Weird Laughter JPG.)

This is the first time I have seen a dragon that lays eggs and breastfeeds after reading a novel for so long [face covering], I want to support the author of the million transformation novel [awkward laugh]

I'll give it a try, I'm afraid I'll run out of books [face covering] Unbelievable, the book was gone the day after I finished speaking [face covering]

So far, I feel like it's okay, the writing is smooth, and there's nothing too shocking about it. But there is nothing particularly attractive about it. It belongs to the future.

It's so good. If you like it, come and read more. The author's writing is so delicious. I look forward to the development of the plot later [laughing]

Invincible (far superior to others, growth type) Lily (bring some royal food) Shuangwen (just cool and done) Exploded

It was very enjoyable to watch, the subject matter is quite novel

It whets my appetite very much

The speed is too fast, please protect your low score

How can I enjoy such delicious food to myself? Ciallo～(∠ω< )⌒★

The overall thinking is good, but the small details are lacking.

Finally saw a normal family relationship I hate reviews.

It's quite good, I hope it won't be interrupted or unfinished (I also read the author's previous book, but I didn't read it until I found out it was a male [smile][smile][smile])

Why did the group disband?

It's beautiful, but it's a pity that I got into a dark room and couldn't get out [face covering]

It's very beautiful, I feel like I've become golden after watching it [Sending my heart]

The writing is quite good, but the number of words is too few now. I will wait for a few months. Isn't that how I managed to survive [crying]

I hope to live longer, this type is easily blocked! (～￣▽￣)～

This is the first time I have seen this operation of breastfeeding in Bianwen

It looks quite comfortable. I didn't find any poisonous spots during my time.

What else did you say? I'll give it to you, brother.

I just found out that the Demon King book is also written by the author, Rem.

Right, right, right, be careful not to read the book😋😋😋