I Pretended to Be Devoted and Became Everyone's Dream Guy

It's okay. I just feel that the emotional drama develops too fast. There is a destined person in the first world. How did the heroine fall in love with him in the latter two worlds? I suggest the author revise the previous article and add some foreshadowing. After all, the heroine's real-world character does not seem to fall in love at first sight. Even if it is love at first sight, some description should be added.

It looks good, super porridge, but there are a lot of mistakes in it (wrong additions), but it is also very beautiful. I really like the setting. Thank you for the author. [Sending my heart] The author Dadawo Rice Noodles [Sending my heart][Sending my heart]

Nice! I also like the characters very much, but the plot is a bit short and the emotions of some characters are not very full, and I can't get enough of it! ( ´ ▽ ` )ﾉ Everything else is great! ~(≧▽≦)/~Come on! 💕

Yes, it can be seen that the author's writing style is getting better little by little. The characters' emotions are deeper and more immersive, and the plot connection is smoother. The author is great 😘 Except for the first world, the other worlds are all well written. This does not mean that the first world is not good. In fact, it is okay, but there is no sense of substitution, the plot connection is slightly stiff, and the characters' emotions are not delicate enough. The first world is ordinary in my opinion. The first world is more like a training ground, and the other worlds are very nice. Finally, I feel that I can change the title of each world, because ×× is very affectionate and not attractive to readers. For me, this is the case. All in all, the whole article is getting better and better. The author's writing style is very comfortable and there is no discomfort, and the emotional portrayal of the characters has become more profound. When the characters' emotions become stronger, my feelings for them will also become stronger. Great, great, the author is really making progress little by little, and he is very obedient. Although the final world ends in a sloppy way, I can understand it. The overall look of this book is still very good. I look forward to the author's next work [Blow Kiss]

Thank you to the author. Your wording is very comfortable and your ideas are also very good. A little suggestion: the writing style is a little immature, mainly in creating conflicts and resolving conflicts. You can think in advance. When you see the title, how will readers imagine this conflict? Then focus on describing the key plots: first meeting, falling in love, and resolving conflicts. I feel that you have not differentiated the importance. The emphasis is not enough on the exaggeration and the emotion is not strong enough. Can you continue writing? If you have new books, I will also read them. The words you use are really comfortable and I won't be hurt🥰

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The teacher's writing is great. I hope it won't stop updating. I can see that everyone in the author's writing has his own hard work, and the article is very comfortable to read. However, I hope the author can add more emotional lines or daily routines in each scene to make the article fuller, make each scene a little longer, and make the male partner's love for the heroine more detailed. It will feel better 😘😘😘. I hope the author's books will get better and better.

I didn't say anything, I just wanted to find the woman of my dreams. After looking at the reality, I have to throw away things when comparing goods, and I have to throw away money for money. I really feel that a fair-skinned, beautiful, obedient and sensible boy like me is very competitive. He is much more beautiful than those ordinary people. I can't imagine what a happy little boy I would be if I had a wife like Sister Luo (๑‾ ꇴ ‾๑) Sister Luo is always so tall, powerful, handsome and reliable, and she is already happy to be the dream boy (ﾉ∇︎) The ending is rather rushed, and the words are in male-dominated order, so you can't change it after it's finished. You can read the first part, but the later part is more sloppy.

I finished reading it in one go. Overall, it is good-looking. The female character is very comfortable and the heroine is also very strong. In reality, who wouldn't want to be embarrassed by finding such a grown-up woman? I have no bad habits and respect men. Please update, the reader is so hungry at home that he is chewing tree bark (இωஇ )

It's very beautiful, and the setting of the canopy and the role of the love brain is simply perfect! There are so few novels of this type that I dare not publish books for fear that the author will run away.