My Personal Maid Is a Peerless Sword Immortal

Yes, the female channel's writing style is not as detailed as the female channel's emotional scenes. I don't know what I'm thinking about. I guess I don't even have an outline.

I was deceived into it by the cool title, but the writing is really good. The protagonist's early twisting feeling is well written. You can change the indentation of the paragraphs. It often looks like a big pile of text and looks a bit tired.

Isn't it that the background is very big? When I first arrived at the sect, I was wildly insulted and almost killed. After I arrived at the sect, I was constantly targeted, kicked here and there, and two days later, two people came to insult and frame me. I felt that the protagonist's family and father and mother were not good enough. No one's family has a high status for the big yellow dog at the gate. It may be a unique way of writing. I don't understand but respect it.

First, 5 stars for encouragement, and then some suggestions for the author. I have read more than 40 chapters so far. According to the introduction, there are multiple women, but obviously the little maid has more scenes. If there is only one woman, the audience will be larger. The emotional line for the little cook was a bit too shallow, and it suddenly broke my heart, and the slap-in-the-face plot was a bit cliché. After reading more than 40 chapters, someone kept provoking me. From the beginning, I saw that the protagonist's family was so powerful, but when he got to the sect, he dared to bully anyone. It was a bit inconsistent. Bai Wei's identity and background are clearly inferior to those of the Jiang family. Normally she wouldn't dare to confront the protagonist. The writing in these parts is a bit weird and out of touch with reality. The writing is obviously there, but in some places the wording is a bit too much, which makes it a bit annoying to read. You can try to be more detailed and appropriate. Again, this is just a suggestion. I also hope that the author will write better and better.

Yes, the heroine is well portrayed. I enjoyed reading Chapter 256, but Bai Wei's writing was a bit fragmented, lengthy and boring. Everything else is good. More to come.

One star less would make the author proud. I have read more than 100 chapters so far, and I think it's okay. It's just that the early stage is a bit toxic, the transformation into a god to save the day is too slow, and the emotional line progresses very slowly. I looked at the title and thought it was invincible in the early stage, (wry smile). When I looked at the text, alas, it turns out that it is not a particularly exciting article. Also, as a time traveler, there is no system or anything else. The eldest son of a family that traveled through time and grew up. The child is a kind of strength in itself (wry smile). Now I am looking forward to Murong Xue's conspiracy. The plot is quite good and more attractive. I hope the author will continue to write it. I think, even if there are not many people who support it, being able to give Mo Li a perfect ending and finish writing this story may be the greatest meaning to the author... Also, from my point of view, that Murong Xue seems to have some special attributes, and I am looking forward to it. My family is waiting for me to see the latest chapter... That Mo Li, I don't know when I will be able to unlock my heart. Compared with reality, I can't help but sigh, the male protagonist eats so well, I envy the male protagonist I have read the latest chapter so far. I am very convinced that Murong Xue has awakened special attributes. I am very much looking forward to the follow-up plot (Western Region), but it is too troublesome to read several chapters. I will read it for a while. I hope the author will not be a pigeon, otherwise... Then there really is no top but no bottom.

More obvious traces of AI, for example: at the end of Chapter 34, it is described that Mo Li placed the Wuchen Sword on the low table next to Jiang Xue. In the second paragraph of Chapter 35, in the description of Mo Li's appearance, it is also stated that Mo Li is holding the Wuchen Sword in his arms.

I thought there was a very strong maid, but I didn't expect that both the protagonist and the maid were in the Qi training stage, and no one could beat them. The key is that the protagonist has a great background, and then everyone came to ridicule a few words, and wanted to arrest the protagonist and take him to the law enforcement hall. Who are these people? The protagonist is also very kind, not decisive at all, and hesitant in doing things 🤦

It's hard to imagine that in this era, there are books like yours on an article platform like Tomato, with such a "slow" pace. Fighting is "slow", training and physical problems are "slow", and the attitude towards the enemy is even more "slow". The one with high EQ is a Buddhist male protagonist, while the one with low EQ is an "ostrich" male protagonist. He obviously has strong feet, but he wants to bury his head in the ground. As a Homo sapiens, I came to a strange environment without much sense of crisis. I just rely on the opponent to fight in a turn-based system. Is this a passive defense type? Do you really think that as long as you click until the end, the opponent will not continue to cause trouble for you? Will I maintain a balanced relationship with you? When dealing with enemies, you have to hit them painfully, and they will realize that you are not easy to deal with. You say that your male protagonist looks quite Buddhist, but in fact, doesn't he cause trouble for himself by doing this? Your protagonist is so "slow" in dealing with problems. Why? Because this place is full of women, they are all hidden "harems", right? People who have no brains and write well know what should be collected and what should be killed, but you, the protagonist, can't even distinguish between his "enemy" and "teammate", and he is indecisive. Don't tell me that it's because you have to be careful on other people's territory, so can't you take the initiative and become the owner of this land? If you can't do it, find a way to do it!

I can only say that the plot of Ordinary Life is so well written. A bunch of people always come inexplicably. To be honest, it affects the mood of reading the novel. But generally speaking, the emotional line is well written, but there are some particularly classic plots that cause trouble for the protagonist, which is very annoying.