Game Invasion: I Rely on My Vest to Become a God

Yeah, it looks good [blowing kiss] I drew lessons from False God and Qi Mingyue (I think, because I have just read these two books recently, but this setting is not very niche), and also added my own ideas and settings. The writing is very smooth, and the enemies are dealt with very quickly and neatly (this is really very praised). Then I feel that the author's current writing style should be a long article, and I hope to stick with it [Blow kiss] Super pretty, I like it very much! [Adoration]

It's okay, but it feels a bit imitative. It was also invaded by a game. I can't remember the exact name, but the name is the most similar, and there's nothing else.

Well, how should I put it? Well, the overall story was okay, and I could tell there were a lot of things to express. But that said, maybe the writing is a bit messy. But I think this story is very good, and I still like this subject matter. Well, there are just some places that I don't understand. Then give some encouragement. [Send heart][Send heart]

Excluding many question marks in the early stage, the story itself is good. It can be seen that the author wants to write a big world, but he is not sure whether the writing power can support it in the later period (I hope so, it is really good-looking, much better than the many short white articles on Tomato that left me speechless). The author can observe the popular game Arrival stories of Tomato from the author's perspective, and think about how they deal with issues such as branch lines and main lines, foreshadowing, etc. Finally, Yanyan is very cute

Big! Hungry! Rice rice!

It looks good but I don't like the copy. It's too long and not interesting. Can you make it shorter?