Zombie Taoist Fan: Madam Is Too Scheming

I don't know if you can see this paragraph There are several issues with this book. Let me raise them for you. If you are interested, you can correct them. I don't know your specific situation, just my personal opinion. 1. Use a separator after the opening dialogue to separate the dialogue from when the heroine wakes up. 2. The heroine's self-narration after waking up is not a self-narration from her own perspective. It is basically a narrative narrative by the narrator. You have two choices, the best is to recall this past event through third-person recall. Then a lot of connectives need to be used to enhance the narrative effect of the characters' own memories. Second, if you don't understand, directly intervene with the narrator, without her recalling it, make a large-scale declarative narrative, weaken her pronouns, and judge her or make metaphors for her. Probably the posture of a storyteller. 3. I suggest you change the title of this book. If your target audience is zombie fans, then the romance is wrong. If you're into romance, change the zombie fanfic. With your current word count, you have a chance to gain traffic through sorting. I looked at your character design, and there are no major problems overall. You changed the first few chapters to let readers take the role, and changed the title of the book from a zombie fanfic to a more romantic and suspenseful name. 4. The most important thing about the questions I mentioned is the title of the book, and the others are also important, because you start with a declarative narrative, and if you don't have a strong narrator's voice, it will be very flat. 5. If you are interested, you can ask me. I will tell you everything I know. However, it is only over one million words long. If you practice it well, you can get a lot of readers. I think