Beng Tie: General Xianzhou Will Not Be Defeated by a Yandere

The writing is okay, I think it can be called fine chaff. The writing is entertaining yet rigorous. The plot is also unique and clever. Using the fairy boat as a carrier is more interesting in Bengtie fan fiction than those with Wu Nao and the protagonist [Thoughts] But the fly in the ointment is that it feels a bit deliberate to "give away girls" (the following is a personal opinion). For example, Ka Ma, the plot needs to be understandable, but the behavior does not feel consistent with Ka Ma in Bengtie. There are also other heroines who always feel that their behavior is a bit deliberate. I think the emotional scene between Lingsha and the protagonist is very good and not deliberate, it is natural and comes naturally [like] I hope the author can polish the emotional lines between the protagonist and the heroines. And I heard that this book belongs to the harem, I also hope that the author can use this as a keynote to write a new chapter for the regrettable endings in Iron Collapse. In the end, the blood book flows. Ying, please leave a place for Ying Bao [I understand] This book is suitable for readers who like to put themselves into the role (protagonist), and at the same time uphold the concept of "you can't have your cake and eat it too". Silver Wolf and Fu Xuan... Chu [face covering] Just click to the end before reading. And for readers who like to read in the third person [laughing awkwardly], this novel is a bit "interesting". In a sense, although this type of novel satisfies regrets, the emotional lines between the characters can refer to Mendel's pea hybridization experiment. The comrades in front of the screen all have their own opinions. If you want to complain about the protagonist, why not think about our "cute" Lu Mingfei? (Specifically refers to a person)

This is supposed to be a rising star, but it is a new work by an old friend.

First of all, the book written by the author is very beautiful and is an excellent fan fiction. There are many places worth learning from, but what I don't understand is that the character of the protagonist seems to... How should I put it, gives me the feeling of 'obeying orders but not obeying orders', giving people a feeling that they may rebel at any time. Of course, this is just my personal feeling, and I am not dissatisfied with the author's novel. I hope the author does not misunderstand. I give it a five-star review and wish the author good luck. [Laugh]

Overall, I felt good watching it, and the plot was also very interesting. The writing style is much better than some fanfics. I just hope that the author can better connect the subsequent plots. Friends who have plenty of time can take a look

It's a remarkable fanfic. To be honest, the characters are a bit OOC, but it's still okay as a cool fanfic. Also, the recent chapters didn't mention the Fairy Boat Alliance's countermeasures against the Fengrao people, which makes the Fairy Boat's prestige lose value.

A good book, written very logically. It does not develop according to the plot of the game. The author created a route of his own after fully understanding the background of the game. The protagonist Xuan Ge has a distinctive personality and loves Da Lei. Who is the world's sowing king? Xuan Ge! Xuan Ge! Xuan Ge! Who has wives and concubines in this world? Xuan Ge! Xuan Ge! Xuan Ge! If you want to know what happened next, please watch the mighty general Xuan Ge interpret the story of the world for you [Love]

It's a very enjoyable novel, but I really want the yandere bird [send my heart] [send my heart] [send my heart]

It looks good, keep writing.

Although the early writing was terrible and a bit embarrassing -_-||. But the prison work feels like a natural talent. The more you write, the better. The palace battles are also very good. Hope it can continue. Support Lao Zuo! ! ! [Blowing kiss] This book by Lao Da writes the male protagonist's changes in mood very well, and every detail in the book is traceable. But I feel like collecting pearls has the same problem as collecting Kafka. Although it is all an exchange of interests, the change of mood in the later period is a bit random, which I personally feel is a poisonous point. But Lao Zuo's conception of the framework of the whole book is really perfect and well organized. When reading, it can leave a profound impression on people. The protagonist is portrayed in great detail, especially the aspect of "dying on a woman's belly" is really good. I think we can arrange some chapters to focus on the little people from the Milky Way, and depict the relationship between Emperor Xuan and the people in more detail. At the end, I would like to apologize to the author. I was arbitrary in questioning your life before. I'm sorry! [Crying][Asking for explosive updates][Asking for explosive updates][Asking for explosive updates][Asking for explosive updates][Asking for explosive updates][Asking for explosive updates][Asking for explosive updates][Asking for explosive updates][Asking for explosive updates]

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With the fairy boat as the background, the original three-dimensional character of the general protagonist combines the machinations and the paranoid emotions of the yandere. The plot is fast-paced, sweet and tense, and fits the world view of the original work. It is suitable for readers who like the fairy boat theme and the emotional line of the yandere.

It's refreshing. I don't care about the poisonous points. It's a good book. 49 That part made me a little uncomfortable (personal opinion) Alas, Garlic Bird [currently working on the manuscript] [rolls eyes]

When you saw Dahlia and Xingxiao standing outside the door, you may have been really nervous, but I was actually a little painful because my reading perspective has always been into Xingxiao. Thinking about starting from Chapter 7 to Chapter 25, I had to put down my phone because I was in school. After 15 days of school, I read it non-stop. I saw more than 70 pictures. When I stood outside the door, my brain was confused. The relationship between the protagonists was more curious than that in "The Abyss of Youth", and the succubus physique was still there. But the writing style of this novel is quite good. I hope the author will come up with better works in the future. Now it's a bit curious to see it again

Looks good! A well-written book called Little Emperor Uncle [laughing] Just kidding, although it's a bit royal in some places, it's very interesting in terms of writing style, character creation, etc. [Laughing]

It's a great book. I didn't find any poisonous points, and there were no logical problems in the plot. Highly recommended

It's really good-looking. The protagonist's personality is likeable and the interaction between the heroine is also good-looking. I support the author and recommend 100 updates a day [Adoration] To be honest, it is really fine grain, there are no messy poisonous points, except for the previous point of deliberately giving away the girl, there is nothing else. However, although the protagonist likes the big one, I really like the black tower in this book. I hope to be an exception and become the heroine. I really can't be more social. [Adoration] Can Bai Yan be resurrected?

The quality is good and the number of words is quite good. Unfortunately, the writing style is a monotonic decreasing function. The main plot of the original game is almost not included in the article. It just borrows game events to maintain the flavor of the fan fiction. The main plot of the novel is almost entirely from the original work. The male protagonist is invincible in the setting. The writing quality reaches its highest level around the time of the Third Plenty of People's War (that is, when the protagonist is comatose in more than 100 chapters), and then drops all the way. By the time the protagonist ascends the throne of the Immortal Boat, it is back to the normal level. After the protagonist ascends the throne, all the plot lines are serving where the protagonist goes, which women he finds and when he goes to bed, and the hidden lines in the early stage are almost completely invisible. I endured it for three to four hundred chapters, but I just ended it when I first appeared, fell in love with you when I met you, and pulled out the ruthlessness. The plot content has been completely unable to accommodate the huge size of the harem, so that now I can only continue to include female characters to maintain freshness. The quality of the writing has declined rapidly, so much so that I think continuing to write will only lower the rating of the novel. Looking forward to the author's ending Of course, the author has many very bold descriptions that are very interesting, and they can indeed be a source of fun in a boring or even shitty novel platform, but I still think it's time to stop when it's time to stop.

It's so beautiful, I want to see Shura Field and start fighting!

I think the author is. Whose father is Bai Yu? He is a handsome young man. My young master is handsome, clever and as clever as a god. The young man with pearls and shoes is full of people at the beginning of the year. The wanderer in white clothes also follows the young master. He talks about the gentleman and treats him as warmly as jade. In its wooden house, my heart is in turmoil. The young man is high-spirited and heroic, a beautiful young man in green robes, and a deity with a yellow ribbon. It is wide and graceful, its weight is relatively heavy, it is good at teasing, not cruel, its appearance is clear and gaunt, its graceful appearance is refreshing, its posture is small and sparse, and it is as clear as a god.

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It looks good, it looks good, I will review it next time

Although the past is complicated and confusing, the past and present are all beautiful and won my heart. Everyone has their own emotional line, but in fact I prefer the author's characterization. I can see that the author is very careful.

Yes, there are no messy poisonous spots, and it looks very comfortable. Well, let's see if I can help you get a rating of nine. The book is fine Looks good

Good-looking, good-looking, good-looking Come on, big brother who writes about Bengtie! ! !

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It looks good, but I don't know if the author wants to write a long novel or something else. The main thing is that some of the heroine's love lines progress too quickly and the descriptions are not very delicate. Others are quite good-looking, not too poisonous, good-looking, recommended [Top post][Top post][Top post]

It's a very good book. I could only say it was okay at first, but I didn't expect that the protagonist actually has a child. It makes me look forward to the future development.

It's okay. The writing is pretty good too. It just feels like it. . . There is an indescribable feeling, but it looks pretty good anyway. [Thinking][thinking][thinking][shy][shy][shy]

It's good-looking. It's already better-looking than most Bengtiewen.