Collapse of Iron**********

I think it's good to watch, with an original plot, a somewhat unique protagonist, vivid scenes, and some profound philosophical thoughts. But sometimes it only focuses on writing philosophical thoughts and lacks the vividness of the characters, making it a bit cold, stiff, and rigid. For example, in the two things at the beginning, the overall story is grand but lacks some details (I personally feel that the characteristics of the protagonist are not fully reflected, and the impression is not deep enough), and the narrative rhythm is a bit fast. ... In addition, for the protagonist's skills: combat power, situation, intensity, and innovative use can be adjusted (this much can be thought of for the time being)

As a new author, it is already very good to write like this. If you want to improve it, make it more graphic. I think when it comes to character creation, it's like "how to say it." Don't always use so-and-so. Add some descriptions in front to make the character image better. Some novels are so well written that one can get a sense of the picture while reading them, and one can read hundreds of chapters in one go before they can react. Some novels have a good setting and good ideas, but they are written in a very literal and one-sided way, and the characters are bland, making people have no desire to read them. After reading more than ten chapters, it feels like a long time has passed. But I can feel the author's progress. In the following chapters, the characters have improved. If you want to change, I think you should start with the details and how to proceed. Don't just go through it with so-and-so. You can change some words, such as taking a step forward, spreading your legs, coming slowly, etc. You can also add some environmental description appropriately, don't make the plot too compact, and have gentle ups and downs.

It's great to watch, the plot is original, and the character of the protagonist is also very good, but will Hoshi still become a protector? In fact, I can also write about Walter's reaction when he saw Cocolia and Bronya.

It's good to watch, the protagonist is kind but not stupid, and the plot also has an original planet. The author has also seen the detailed settings of Beng Tie, and the characters are not OOC. You pass!

In fact, Belloberg's money should not be returned. On the contrary, the company should pay Belloberg a storage fee. At first, the company lent Belloberg a sum of money and gave him the robotics technology. But the usage code is not given. Beloberg built a large number of them but could not use them and had to save them. The mechas currently in use are built using reversed technology. And during the period when the star orbit was cut off, the company has been monitoring the planet. If they really didn't know that there was civilization on this planet, when you contacted the advertising department in Xiacheng District, the salesperson wouldn't have stayed in the place responsible for this planet for so long. In other words, Interstellar Peace Company has always been trying to survive.

In time, it will become a great book. It reads smoothly, but it is not the kind of bold and refreshing writing. The writing style is more everyday, which is suitable for me to read. The only drawback is that after a while you will see the shit yellow button [crying]

It's very interesting. This is the only novel I've read that takes people from Luo Hu's mouth. Moreover, this novel is not aggrieved. It makes Ling not accustomed to the original characters, and the abundant life gives the protagonist a reasonable reason to make up for the regrets of the original work.

Fairly good, although there are some flaws, no OOC found

It's really good. There is no OOC place at the moment.

A highly recommended article. The description of power is in line with the expectations of the commander's combat power.

It's very interesting, good luck to the author

Come on, it's very well written.

I have to keep writing it, it feels very good

Not bad, not bad, not bad

It's beautiful, the author wrote it superbly

Try to make other time travels as short as possible. Don't write dozens, fifty or sixty pictures at once.

Meow meow meow, I don't know. It's a five-star review.

The writing is very good, keep up the good work, can Xing still step on the path of preservation?

It's very well written, why is the score so low? [Shocked]

Very good, the growth history of a holy father

It looks good, but it will take too long to wait for the author to send it.

I haven't watched it for long, and the plot of mourning Igor deserves this 5 stars.

Nice! The character description is very good! Anyway, I haven't found it unbearable until now.

Have your own ideas, don't worry about backstabbing, just write in the way you like, but don't collapse

It looks good, it feels like the sun and the moon are together, so cool ಥ⌣ಥ

The writing is great, and Ling Shi's B box is very good. Unlike some essays, Ling Shi is not as good as other practitioners.

I can't stop after watching it. It's a very good design and the plot is novel. But the traffic is not good and there aren't many people. The author keeps updating 10,000 times a day. Rating 9.5 Is not a dream.

The writing is really good and very consistent with the three views.

It's beautiful and well written. There is no system, no time travel, and no feeling of being led along.