Travel across Terra and experience all kinds of lives. Record everything I see and hear. The result of it all should be this Terra Travelogue. These are not the first sights this land has ever offered, but they are the first ones I saw. A letter of approval from my former principal completely upended my peaceful life and sparked the idea of crossing this land to write a travelogue of my own…! But reality rarely goes as expected. The endless frozen wastelands of Ursus, Laterano, where chaos and order coexist, Iberia, once at the height of its power… I don’t know whether this travelogue will ever find readers, or whether it will end up as ashes in some Inquisitor’s furnace. But whenever I open it beside a campfire, those voices and faces come back to life in its glow.
The writing seems okay? (Although it's okay to say that I'm a little uncomfortable with this style ੭ ᐕ)੭), but I don't know if it's because of my wrong memory of the settings, but I feel that the previous plot is a bit broken. 1. Regarding the dialogue between the protagonist and the old bookstore owner, I feel that the dialogue text is missing to a certain extent (I think it may be because I have watched too many plots of Ark, and I have not read many novels. After all, they are all dialogues). I did not see your direct text describing the protagonist telling the shopkeeper that the destination of this trip is Longmen, but the old shopkeeper accurately said it later in the text. What if the protagonist wants to go to Longmen to find Rhodes Island? Although it can be inferred from the context that the protagonist should have told the shop owner the route of his action (the dialogue text I saw only stated that he passed through Ursus, and there was also a friend's evaluation of this route. It felt like there was a sentence missing between the two sentences), but I still think this writing is a bit inappropriate. There is also the old shop owner's evaluation of Rhode Island. I feel that he is a little too well-informed, so much so that it seems like the author's comments in the narration (ー_ー)... Rhode Island was founded in 1094, and the Chernobog incident occurred at the end of 1096. By all accounts, Rhode Island has been established on this land for less than three years, and the shop owner's experience of meeting Rhode Island operators will not go back three years. I feel that it would be more reasonable to change the statement that he came a few years ago to one or two years ago. The scene where the spaceship was stopped seemed a bit weird, but in any case, I feel that based on my reading experience of the first volume, this book is worth reading. I wish the author a smooth life, smooth sailing, abundant financial resources, and ten consecutive double gold draws⸜₍๑•⌔•๑₎⸝
It's good to watch. It's been a long time since I've encountered a protagonist with such low damage, so that I can feel the suffering of this land (by the way, the top student doesn't even have a staff)
The writing seems okay? (Although it's okay to say that I'm a little uncomfortable with this style ੭ ᐕ)੭), but I don't know if it's because of my wrong memory of the settings, but I feel that the previous plot is a bit broken. 1. Regarding the dialogue between the protagonist and the old bookstore owner, I feel that the dialogue text is missing to a certain extent (I think it may be because I have watched too many plots of Ark, and I have not read many novels. After all, they are all dialogues). I did not see your direct text describing the protagonist telling the shopkeeper that the destination of this trip is Longmen, but the old shopkeeper accurately said it later in the text. What if the protagonist wants to go to Longmen to find Rhodes Island? Although it can be inferred from the context that the protagonist should have told the shop owner the route of his action (the dialogue text I saw only stated that he passed through Ursus, and there was also a friend's evaluation of this route. It felt like there was a sentence missing between the two sentences), but I still think this writing is a bit inappropriate. There is also the old shop owner's evaluation of Rhode Island. I feel that he is a little too well-informed, so much so that it seems like the author's comments in the narration (ー_ー)... Rhode Island was founded in 1094, and the Chernobog incident occurred at the end of 1096. By all accounts, Rhode Island has been established on this land for less than three years, and the shop owner's experience of meeting Rhode Island operators will not go back three years. I feel that it would be more reasonable to change the statement that he came a few years ago to one or two years ago. The scene where the spaceship was stopped seemed a bit weird, but in any case, I feel that based on my reading experience of the first volume, this book is worth reading. I wish the author a smooth life, smooth sailing, abundant financial resources, and ten consecutive double gold draws⸜₍๑•⌔•๑₎⸝
It's good to watch. It's been a long time since I've encountered a protagonist with such low damage, so that I can feel the suffering of this land (by the way, the top student doesn't even have a staff)