New works are released. You can go to Tomato Novel to read my works. I hope you all like them. Your attention is the motivation for my writing. I will try my best to tell every story!
Reader comments
The first person is very immersive, and the writing power is there, but the power of the writing is wrong. It seems to describe many characters; in fact, it only describes Xu Xian, and if Xu Xian is removed from the other characters, he is like a puppet. The dialogues between the characters were all asked by Xu Dafei and prepared by Xu Xian. Nothing very profound, all I saw were very deliberate performances. The dialogue between Xu Xian and Bai Suzhen is very disconnected. This play cannot be described with Xu Xian as me. The title of the play is narrated with Bai Suzhen as the narration. Xu Xian's image as a cold-blooded conspirator alone is not profound enough, because he is neither vivid nor three-dimensional. The images of Bai Suzhen and Xu Xian stand out because they complement each other. No matter how good you are, you can only say that you have writing skills; but there is no motivation to make people want to watch it, which destroys the established image and separates the plot. Many characters are stiff and the descriptions of the main characters are too sparse and not vivid enough.
I don't know what you are writing, but you always follow the rules of heaven and write casually? It's almost turned into a weird story about rules. It's not easy for those rich and powerful families to use it, right? ?
The first person is very immersive, and the writing power is there, but the power of the writing is wrong. It seems to describe many characters; in fact, it only describes Xu Xian, and if Xu Xian is removed from the other characters, he is like a puppet. The dialogues between the characters were all asked by Xu Dafei and prepared by Xu Xian. Nothing very profound, all I saw were very deliberate performances. The dialogue between Xu Xian and Bai Suzhen is very disconnected. This play cannot be described with Xu Xian as me. The title of the play is narrated with Bai Suzhen as the narration. Xu Xian's image as a cold-blooded conspirator alone is not profound enough, because he is neither vivid nor three-dimensional. The images of Bai Suzhen and Xu Xian stand out because they complement each other. No matter how good you are, you can only say that you have writing skills; but there is no motivation to make people want to watch it, which destroys the established image and separates the plot. Many characters are stiff and the descriptions of the main characters are too sparse and not vivid enough.
I don't know what you are writing, but you always follow the rules of heaven and write casually? It's almost turned into a weird story about rules. It's not easy for those rich and powerful families to use it, right? ?