Writing Skills in a Fantasy World

I would like to encourage you. The subject matter is good, but it is a bit watery and not refreshing enough. Here is a quote. . . ###### Next came the seventh step, the eighth step, the ninth step... Lotte was completely immersed in the practice. He broke down the fifth to twelfth steps, learned them step by step, and practiced them step by step. After learning the fifth step, try to connect the fifth and sixth steps; after learning the seventh step, try to connect the fifth to seventh steps; after learning the eighth step, try to connect the first eight steps...

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