(Multiple female protagonists, with character pictures and rich emotional lines) Luo Chen, a junior student, was involved in a game called Age of the Gods on his way home from a part-time job at night. He awakened his gift of insight. At the beginning, he only regarded it as an auxiliary skill to see the weaknesses of monsters. Unexpectedly, the more he used it, the more something went wrong - he locked on the hidden treasure chest that others could not see; he raised his hand to see through the dungeon puzzle that the boss could not solve; even the villain's hidden calculations could be revealed by him! When Luo Chen relied on this incredible talent to defeat the dungeon, everyone was shocked: What kind of support was this? He was clearly a walking bastard! (Multiple female protagonists, the two worlds will be merged later)
Reader comments
The basic setting is okay, but at 109,000 words, the protagonist's strength has not yet been on the right track, and an unattractive heroine has emerged.
Subsequently, the protagonist's impulsiveness brought about by this role, the protagonist being easily crushed, the protagonist's powerlessness and other dissuading points were followed. I originally had a sense of expectation, but it was gone here.
On the whole, what the protagonist brings to the readers after returning to the orphanage is negative, which slightly dispels the sense of expectation brought by the previous plot.
It's more cliche. Extraordinary people will not be short of money, because there is an upper limit on personal spending power. Any money over 10 million is fake. Money is only counted if it is spent. It is saved for others, especially pioneer extraordinary people. If they can survive and filter out from the copy, it is impossible for them to join the recruitment bureau. Mortals cannot give anything to extraordinary people. Unless they are pointed at the head by an iron pipe, they will only follow powerful extraordinary people.
If the author can't write about world change, then don't write about the organization in the real world. He will disappear directly and break apart when the point is reached. Is it to make the protagonist join a mortal organization, be used, and be unable to resist? Do you feel like writing about resistance? Wouldn't that mean the novel is dead?
Chapter 34: I don't like it, no matter what happens, tell her to be honest, that is, don't resist when being harassed by other boys? The old lady in this orphanage is also like this. She will only ask her children to admit their mistakes, no matter what the matter is.
The writing is okay, but I suggest dividing it into more paragraphs. The paragraphs are too long and make me a bit tired to read.
Give yourself a five-star haha
Want to see but don't want to see
Well. . . . .
Fang Yuan didn't want to watch anymore when she came out.
The basic setting is okay, but at 109,000 words, the protagonist's strength has not yet been on the right track, and an unattractive heroine has emerged. Subsequently, the protagonist's impulsiveness brought about by this role, the protagonist being easily crushed, the protagonist's powerlessness and other dissuading points were followed. I originally had a sense of expectation, but it was gone here. On the whole, what the protagonist brings to the readers after returning to the orphanage is negative, which slightly dispels the sense of expectation brought by the previous plot.
It's more cliche. Extraordinary people will not be short of money, because there is an upper limit on personal spending power. Any money over 10 million is fake. Money is only counted if it is spent. It is saved for others, especially pioneer extraordinary people. If they can survive and filter out from the copy, it is impossible for them to join the recruitment bureau. Mortals cannot give anything to extraordinary people. Unless they are pointed at the head by an iron pipe, they will only follow powerful extraordinary people. If the author can't write about world change, then don't write about the organization in the real world. He will disappear directly and break apart when the point is reached. Is it to make the protagonist join a mortal organization, be used, and be unable to resist? Do you feel like writing about resistance? Wouldn't that mean the novel is dead?
Chapter 34: I don't like it, no matter what happens, tell her to be honest, that is, don't resist when being harassed by other boys? The old lady in this orphanage is also like this. She will only ask her children to admit their mistakes, no matter what the matter is.
The writing is okay, but I suggest dividing it into more paragraphs. The paragraphs are too long and make me a bit tired to read.
Give yourself a five-star haha
Want to see but don't want to see
Well. . . . .
Fang Yuan didn't want to watch anymore when she came out.
I saw a few and was persuaded to leave.
I can only give two stars, no more.