Traveled to the world of Death Note.
On one side is a world-class detective, and on the other side is a high school student with a Death Note.
But "I" have already understood everything about these two people.
Reader comments
As far as the first chapter is concerned, it can be seen that the protagonist completely looks down on Yue and L in his speech, but he relies on the power of the system, not his own ability, but a complete mechanical general, not his own ability.
(The look and feel is extremely bad)
Make it clear that what you are writing about is a human being and not a god. The protagonist in your novel is just like Yue in the later period of getting the notes. Gods are written everywhere as being superior to others.
It is said that it is behind the scenes, but a special police officer position is given. This position is easy to collapse, and it is neither good nor bad. Knowing the script does not require the police's resource advantage, and you have the magical power of the system.
Although I don't know what the author has written, but if you want to write a cool article on this topic, then this is not suitable.
The plot is very confusing and abstract later on. Go and see for yourself. The protagonist still feels like his left and right brains are fighting each other.
As far as the first chapter is concerned, it can be seen that the protagonist completely looks down on Yue and L in his speech, but he relies on the power of the system, not his own ability, but a complete mechanical general, not his own ability. (The look and feel is extremely bad) Make it clear that what you are writing about is a human being and not a god. The protagonist in your novel is just like Yue in the later period of getting the notes. Gods are written everywhere as being superior to others. It is said that it is behind the scenes, but a special police officer position is given. This position is easy to collapse, and it is neither good nor bad. Knowing the script does not require the police's resource advantage, and you have the magical power of the system. Although I don't know what the author has written, but if you want to write a cool article on this topic, then this is not suitable.
The plot is very confusing and abstract later on. Go and see for yourself. The protagonist still feels like his left and right brains are fighting each other.