After Wearing the Book, I Refused to Give the Heroine a Golden Finger

It's really beautiful, the writing is detailed and the transitions are natural, but I would like to make some suggestions, that is, can the author remember to divide it into paragraphs? Segmentation is really important! I didn't even read this article at first, until I started listening to the book… Because when I read the paragraphs with large sections, an old bookworm like me feels that the first thing is to increase the difficulty for readers, and I will feel resistance. The second is that I preconceptions that such large-section articles are generally written by novice authors. As for novice authors, they are afraid that they will not finish the article, fear that the writing is not good, etc., So I usually just discard it... Haha, after saying all this, I want to tell the author that segmentation is really important! I'm not afraid of sharing too much. The old bookworm is afraid of sharing too little! !

Don't make such long paragraphs, write them in paragraphs

The writing is very good! It's not the kind of mindless and refreshing article. It feels like I've seen the old-fashioned cultivating immortality written by the big guys in the past. It makes solid progress and the heroine rises steadily. It's very comfortable to read. The introduction is a little irrelevant to the article. Fortunately, I clicked to read it, otherwise I would have missed the good article.

As you watch, the heroine is growing like a broken bamboo

Not bad, very novel, worth watching [Like][Like][Like]

It's very beautiful, but the heroine's birth was very difficult.

The writing is very good and the world view is also good. If the introduction is revised, I believe more people will read it.

Very beautiful, I want to read more

Beautiful, novel ideas

It would be even more perfect if Luoluo could get an artifact space, the Medicine Garden Spiritual Spring.

I hope the animal friends can always accompany the heroine🌹

The writing is very delicate and the descriptions are lifelike. It's hard to read [Adoration] because there are too many words [Adoration] [Sending Hearts]

The story is very attractive and the writing is very good.

Full marks for this, it's a beautiful article and I don't want to stop after reading it.

It makes me curious and interested in continuing to read.