Adventures in the Cultivation World with My Spirit Beast Brothers

It's really beautiful, the writing is detailed and the transitions are natural, but I would like to make some suggestions, that is, can the author remember to divide it into paragraphs? Segmentation is really important! I didn't read this article at first until I started listening to the book... Because when I read the paragraphs with big sections, I, an old bookworm, felt that the first thing is to make it more difficult for readers, and I would feel resistance. The second is my preconception that such long-sectioned articles are generally written by novice authors. As for novice authors, they are afraid that they will not finish the article, or that the writing is not good, etc., So I usually just discard it... Haha, after saying so much, I want to tell the author that paragraphing is really important! I am not afraid of sharing too much, but I am afraid of sharing too little!!

The writing is very good! It's not the kind of mindless and refreshing article. It feels like I've seen the old-fashioned cultivating immortality written by the big guys in the past. It makes solid progress and the heroine rises steadily. It's very comfortable to read. The introduction is a little irrelevant to the article. Fortunately, I clicked to read it, otherwise I would have missed the good article.

Don't make such long paragraphs, write them in paragraphs

Not bad, very novel, worth watching 👍👍👍

It's very beautiful, but the heroine's birth was very difficult.

As you watch, the heroine is growing like a broken bamboo

The writing is very good and the world view is also good. If the introduction is revised, I believe more people will read it.

Full marks for this, it's a beautiful article and I don't want to stop after reading it.

Beautiful, novel ideas

Very beautiful, I want to read more