Traveling Through ***************

The writing is okay. The protagonist of this book mainly conquers musical girls in the daily world and uses the simulator to conquer the three characters. However, the fate nodes in the simulator cannot be changed is still too frustrating. I hope that this kind of plot will have one or two simulations at most. A time traveler is not a time traveler if he does not save tragedy.

So far it looks pretty good, I hope to write more about reality and less about simulation @My Talent of God I suggest that you give up this book and start another one, or make a major overhaul. There can be simulations, but they can only be simulations, rather than Honkai Impact and the band happening at the same time, because for now, I don't see that the author's writing can write both sides well at the same time. If you don't know how to write, go to Mao Station and look at similar ones, as well as things about yourself in the future. This is a big mess. I really can't imagine that it's already 2026 and there are still people writing like this [laughs] @ talented

It's like a magic pill to think of this subject [laughing evilly]

Come on, author, I will eat everything. Please wait until I finish the second model before commenting. It's okay, so after the separation of personalities, the essential function of the system (to win the favor of the character in the main world) and the actual effect (to win the favor of the three characters, but also to reverse it???) Aren't the left and right brains fighting each other? To be honest, the simulation of this system is really poisonous (although I have high poison resistance). It is best to point out this simulation function at the beginning, no However, it is abrupt and confusing. The second simulation is a pure explanation, with nothing. It is best to put the explanation content in the text, which is easy to lose sight of. In fact, there is a clever trick to make readers endure the pain and read it. You directly tell everyone about the Green Lily at the beginning (for example, find a place in the introduction to insert the simulation of Ben San, and click on Green Otto). . . . . . I'm in a good mood, give me five stars first, wait for Shura Field, wait for Otto (audience expectation value +1) @ talented

[Eating melon] It looks good [laughing evilly] Come and see [laughing evilly] [laughing evilly] [laughing evilly]

It's pretty good-looking, and it's already second to none among tomatoes. But I can only give it one star less because of the real world aspect in advance. You might as well write about daily life in the first half of the book and go on adventures in the second half.

As expected of Tan Lidou [laughing evilly][laughing evilly][laughing evilly]

I can watch it, but I hope the characters and plot won't be ruined later on.