(Light suspense + light supernatural + two male protagonists) Gentle and restrained in the first year × Straight-forward and stubborn in the second year Li Baixi, a cute and irritable college student, accidentally unlocks the "evil-attracting physique", and evil spirits and weird things in the dormitory come to visit one after another. Fortunately, the sinister and mysterious teacher Zhang Qi is secretly guarding him, and a hilarious and terrifying campus supernatural adventure begins! Campus daily life is a mix of thriller and supernatural, funny and suspenseful. Behind every "false alarm", there is a secret that is not simple.
Reader comments
Regarding Chapter 1 or Chapter 2:
This should be regarded as a logical error, or a descriptive error.
I think opera accents magnify the individuality of men and women.
The man's enunciation is clear, loud and full of energy.
Women should be more pointed, soft and strong at the same time, suppressing first and then raising.
Looking at this babbling, I directly introduced the female voice, which means it is sharp, but you said it was as soft as cotton, I can't imagine it.
I watched One, Two, Fifty-One and Fifty-Two, and the ending was not my cup of tea after all, so I didn't have the heart to watch it.
First of all, at first, I felt that the author was too literate, and I couldn't understand the gorgeousness. This is definitely not a good thing in a novel. The work is oriented to the audience and is very tolerant. Showing off technology may actually discourage people from reading.
Some punctuation marks, sentence paragraphs, descriptive forms, etc. All show your knowledge.
You seem to like to use idioms to describe scenes, which is not a good thing. I personally looked through some dictionaries, but it is impossible to recognize them all. What's more, these idioms were originally born from other people's descriptions of their own scenes. What you do is like a lot of buildings embedded together. What is that called? Chimera seems to be.
For those who listen to books, there is actually no difference. You are a short-circuit, but I listen and read at the same time. According to my personal preference, your format is a bit like:
XX made some movements and some psychological descriptions of expressions and then continued: "………………"
My suggestion is to take out what I said separately. This way I feel more comfortable watching it.
He shrugged and rolled his neck.
"Isn't this a piece of cake?"
XX calmed down his momentum and exhaled more calmly. Then his eyes condensed and he prepared to throw the knife, straight towards XX's head.
For example, I feel more comfortable reading it. After all, it is a novel, so the length of the paragraphs should generally be kept at two or three lines.
Nothing has changed in Chapter 50, but the fight scene is indeed much better, at least there are fewer bad words. And based on these two chapters, I speculate that the protagonist seems to be useless in Chapter 50, and even a little stupid.
When it comes to the finale, when it comes to the emotional explosion point, you still use the same old description method and still use gorgeous words. This is not good. I personally feel that it is like diarrhea, but it is convenient for accumulation in the sphincter. If you want to use the environment to express the sadness of the protagonist, then you can use line drawing. But it was no use, you blocked my hole alive.
In short, this way of describing it is too common. I gave it to me until I finished, and it is not to my liking. I also find it difficult to deal with other people's appetite.
When writing novels, you have to realize one thing. The novel is what you think of. It is your spiritual world, not mine. In your spiritual world, you know every detail in it, even if it is an old mark.
The essence of writing novels is to describe your spiritual world. You have to consider the readers. The readers are not you. They can't imagine what you think, and they won't directly own that gorgeous castle. So you have to use words to describe it, but you use other people's words to describe yours. Isn't this nonsense?
When you write about the emotional breaking point, you may think a lot, and you may think that the surrounding atmosphere may be a little darker, and then you suddenly realize: Yes, I have to write that the surrounding atmosphere is a little darker, for fear that we will not understand, and it is some nonsense. This is very important.
You may not get bored, but you and the reader are from two different perspectives, and you should think from their perspective instead of immersing yourself in your own world.
There is another thing, I don't know if I am right or not. Anyway, I seem to be right about the issue of using symbols. For example, if a person wants to say a long sentence, but it would be too depressing if it is only one paragraph, so it is divided into several paragraphs, but in fact it is still the same person talking.
You are:
"……………………"
"………………"
"………………"
"………………………………"
I think it is:
"……………………
"……………………
"………………………………
"………………………………"
I think the Three-Body Problem, the original Bible, etc. Are all like this, right? But the problem is not always the same.
It's really beautiful, the writing is good, it's a treasure trove of articles, but why are there so few comments?
Regarding Chapter 1 or Chapter 2: This should be regarded as a logical error, or a descriptive error. I think opera accents magnify the individuality of men and women. The man's enunciation is clear, loud and full of energy. Women should be more pointed, soft and strong at the same time, suppressing first and then raising. Looking at this babbling, I directly introduced the female voice, which means it is sharp, but you said it was as soft as cotton, I can't imagine it. I watched One, Two, Fifty-One and Fifty-Two, and the ending was not my cup of tea after all, so I didn't have the heart to watch it. First of all, at first, I felt that the author was too literate, and I couldn't understand the gorgeousness. This is definitely not a good thing in a novel. The work is oriented to the audience and is very tolerant. Showing off technology may actually discourage people from reading. Some punctuation marks, sentence paragraphs, descriptive forms, etc. All show your knowledge. You seem to like to use idioms to describe scenes, which is not a good thing. I personally looked through some dictionaries, but it is impossible to recognize them all. What's more, these idioms were originally born from other people's descriptions of their own scenes. What you do is like a lot of buildings embedded together. What is that called? Chimera seems to be. For those who listen to books, there is actually no difference. You are a short-circuit, but I listen and read at the same time. According to my personal preference, your format is a bit like: XX made some movements and some psychological descriptions of expressions and then continued: "………………" My suggestion is to take out what I said separately. This way I feel more comfortable watching it. He shrugged and rolled his neck. "Isn't this a piece of cake?" XX calmed down his momentum and exhaled more calmly. Then his eyes condensed and he prepared to throw the knife, straight towards XX's head. For example, I feel more comfortable reading it. After all, it is a novel, so the length of the paragraphs should generally be kept at two or three lines. Nothing has changed in Chapter 50, but the fight scene is indeed much better, at least there are fewer bad words. And based on these two chapters, I speculate that the protagonist seems to be useless in Chapter 50, and even a little stupid. When it comes to the finale, when it comes to the emotional explosion point, you still use the same old description method and still use gorgeous words. This is not good. I personally feel that it is like diarrhea, but it is convenient for accumulation in the sphincter. If you want to use the environment to express the sadness of the protagonist, then you can use line drawing. But it was no use, you blocked my hole alive. In short, this way of describing it is too common. I gave it to me until I finished, and it is not to my liking. I also find it difficult to deal with other people's appetite. When writing novels, you have to realize one thing. The novel is what you think of. It is your spiritual world, not mine. In your spiritual world, you know every detail in it, even if it is an old mark. The essence of writing novels is to describe your spiritual world. You have to consider the readers. The readers are not you. They can't imagine what you think, and they won't directly own that gorgeous castle. So you have to use words to describe it, but you use other people's words to describe yours. Isn't this nonsense? When you write about the emotional breaking point, you may think a lot, and you may think that the surrounding atmosphere may be a little darker, and then you suddenly realize: Yes, I have to write that the surrounding atmosphere is a little darker, for fear that we will not understand, and it is some nonsense. This is very important. You may not get bored, but you and the reader are from two different perspectives, and you should think from their perspective instead of immersing yourself in your own world. There is another thing, I don't know if I am right or not. Anyway, I seem to be right about the issue of using symbols. For example, if a person wants to say a long sentence, but it would be too depressing if it is only one paragraph, so it is divided into several paragraphs, but in fact it is still the same person talking. You are: "……………………" "………………" "………………" "………………………………" I think it is: "…………………… "…………………… "……………………………… "………………………………" I think the Three-Body Problem, the original Bible, etc. Are all like this, right? But the problem is not always the same.
It's really beautiful, the writing is good, it's a treasure trove of articles, but why are there so few comments?