Punishing: Gray Raven Commander: Paradox Immunity

This book is really good-looking. I have also found a few books related to dual combat before, but too many of them were cheating. After reading it, I felt that the plot was not at all right. The plot of this book is very well written. Although it does not have a particularly explosive plot, it is very comfortable to read. Especially for someone like me who has played Zhan Duo and is very picky about the plot, I have no problem reading it. I'm looking forward to the author's next plot. As long as the plot doesn't break down, I'll read your book as the second line of the dual-body plot [Send my heart][Send my heart][Send my heart]

This book looks pretty good, and the author's writing style is not bad, but it feels a bit boring. Why do you say that? For example, the plot of the main plot has been made a little more detailed, and it always feels "familiar", but some small details have been changed. I have finished reading the chapters I have written so far, and I am looking forward to the next one 👍

It's pretty cool. I feel like the protagonist can do even more superhuman things than the original lead after becoming immune to Pamish 🤦

The quality is very good, it has its own thing, and the commander of this novel is really useful in the early stage 🤦, he is simply a superman, this novel is really good, especially the theme of double combat, it is not easy 🥺

This novel must have taken a lot of time. It can be seen that some details are very attentive. The author has a very clear understanding of Zhan Shuang. Overall, it is a very high-quality Zhan Shuang article that I have seen.

First of all, let's talk about the evaluation. If you see it, you'll earn it! I think this book deserves more than a 7.5, At least an 8.5, Or even a 9. In my opinion, even if you don't read the subject of war, this novel is quite unique and excellent among fan fictions. There are no brainless cheats or OOC. I only saw vivid characters telling fascinating stories. It is true that not every character has been fully developed so far, but I can really see the character arc of the protagonist. He is no longer an object or substitute brought in by the readers, but a flesh-and-blood person. This is really awesome. The author's writing style is really good in Tomato. I have never seen an article that writes the protagonist's growth so perfectly. At the same time, the plot has never been boring to me. It is neither a one-man show nor a redundant protagonist. If you have played Zhan Shuang, you will be done without thinking. This may be Tomato's best Zhan Shuang fanfic; if you have not played it, the book itself is also a very good novel and very friendly to newcomers. You only need to make up for the settings of Pamish Virus. Photos of many characters can be found in the comments. I believe that as long as you don't dislike the subject of war, you will definitely like this novel. It's just that the subject matter limits its popularity. It perfectly presents the best fan fiction in my eyes. You must read it!!! Digression: The author must not stop updating if the data is not good. I have never read such a good fan novel, and I am really scared. Be sure not to stop updating, readers will do anything 😢

When writing a Zhan Shuang fan novel, especially if Gray Crow is the protagonist, it is inevitable that the novel will be close to the original work (due to various reasons). How to add and reasonably integrate your own elements on top of this is the key - especially for those who do not follow the deus ex machina routine. Personally, I think this book and the next book "Death Retrospection" have done a good job, at least up to the latest chapter. As for traffic, we can only say that we rely on love to generate electricity. Speaking directly on the two platforms of Maoke and Yangshizi, in terms of pure dual content, this one is already the top one in terms of traffic and quality. I think the author, since you are willing to pick it up again after two years of being in Maogu, and you have even issued a special statement, it means that you probably have something to hold on to. It would be great if you can calm your mind. But if you really feel that too much utilitarianism in your head affects your writing, it's not impossible to call it a day. But then again, the content of the current serialization has actually equaled or even exceeded the author's old one. It would be a pity if it really got cut off.

Love too much After staying up two nights in a row to read this fanfic, I have nothing else to say, except that I like it, pure liking and love. This magical book is already a fairy in my mind, an indispensable medicine, and an extremely outstanding work in the Zhanshuang fan fiction. I hope the author will update more

The original chief was too much like a hero and a savior. His whole body was filled with the glory of divinity, but he had very little human side. He even just looked like an extraordinary person who existed only to save the world. The protagonist Ashiu has a more humane side than the original chief. He can fight with his brothers and friends, and make some jokes in less formal occasions. He is more humane and more like an "ordinary person". Although this ordinary person is constantly being pushed forward, it is also better for us players and readers to get involved. Anyway, the author wrote really well

Very very good, the first one is just a foreshadowing, the rest is really beautiful, and the writing is not bad either, it gets better and better the more you look at it, and it's very polished\(//∇//)\