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The golden finger is not excessive, even very difficult. The path of mortals to survive by cultivating immortals is very real, and the protagonist's growth in strength is also very real and reasonable. For the good characters among mortals, we also help them as much as we can, and we will not help if we are unable. This implements the original work of Mortals: "If you are poor, you can be alone, and if you are rich, you can help both." One of the core ideas of "The World" is full of mortal flavor. It is a fan novel that is very close to the original work. The original character creation also fits the essence of the character. It is not OOC. It is very good. I look forward to the growth and adventure of the protagonist Chen Fan in the world of immortality! The early plot is very interesting, and it is very consistent with the world view of Mortal Cultivation of Immortality. It is a very good fan work. However, after arriving at the Chaos Star Sea, I don't really like the plot of Jiyin Island. The protagonist's life is too aggrieved, much more aggrieved than Han Li's experience. This does not mean that the protagonist is not strong enough. There is nothing wrong with giving in to the strong in order to survive, but the time is too long. I don't know how the author plans to arrange for the protagonist to escape from the control of Jiyin Island. Is it possible that he has to have a baby to escape, or should he wait for Han Li to form a pill in the Chaotic Star Sea and the Void Heaven Palace is opened before finding a way to escape from the control. Anyway, being depressed for too long, even if it is a performance, will have a bad impact on the protagonist's psyche and personality over time, and it is easy to produce inner demons. Moreover, the protagonist has also practiced the Dayan Jue, and has to survive the tribulation of the mortal world on the fourth level. He has been immersed in the Demon Sect for a long time, and still To simulate and deduce demon sect skills and perform various cruel tasks of exterminating families will definitely have a great impact on the protagonist's temperament and will pollute a person's soul. After all, the protagonist is not a heinous villain, but in the final analysis is a kind-hearted mortal. I hope the author will arrange for the protagonist to escape from the control of Jiyin Island as soon as possible, return to casual cultivation, look for opportunities, and break through as soon as possible

The coolness is spot on, the writing is OK, and the plot has the intention to create something new without being too shaky or OOC. In summary, ten points or even nine points for mortal fandom. Hope these advantages remain! Come on, author! I would like to ask, is the single female lead more beautiful?

There is no future, I am afraid of the system

The plot closely follows the framework of "The Story of a Mortal's Cultivation of Immortality", the writing is interlocking, and the plot has ups and downs. So exciting.

It's very well written. Come on.

Mortal flow comes out again

I rely on the author, you are not popular

It's hard to write a mortal fanfic to the end

🐰🐰🐰Well, well, well, well

This is the first time I have seen a writing and lending system for cultivating immortals. It is interesting.

It's okay, but tampering with the system too much is not too much.

Come on author, the main character didn't lick Han Li, it was quite interesting. If you work hard on yourself, the system does not exceed the standard, but doubles the reward. All in all, it is pretty good.

It looks good to me but it needs to be updated