Collapse of Iron**********

Rating B, future star. At least the first chapter of Sky Dream is pretty good, and I'm curious about the follow-up Su, Ancestor, and Alicia at the end. It's a bit of fun, but it's not easy to hurt enough, and the knife isn't harsh enough. But if you don't grasp the balance between joy and knife, it will be disappointing♪~. The vulnerability needs to be increased, and the knife needs to penetrate deeply. The first part is not easy to hurt enough, about 3 layers, the knife is not deep enough, and the knife is small. Therefore, the chapter should be as long as possible, and the description of the determination to die should not be too bloated, too empty, or too watery. Let her develop and live her daily life, and when the time comes, she will die on her own, just let nature take its course. In the first chapter, Kong Meng's death was a bit hasty and a bit fluid. I believe the author has his own plans.

Good-looking, a rare simulation article. The simulation of Pado that I have written so far is very good-looking. The emotional line with Saifeier is quite delicate. Bai E's description is also good. Later, Pado's death successfully made me cry once.

Please give me five-star praise [love]

Let me tell you how I feel. It feels so fast. This is my first feeling. The narrative is fine, but the writing is a problem. It makes me feel that it happened so fast. I started betting in the blink of an eye and then won all the way. Then I lost in the last game. Then I wrote something to make me cry. I didn't even react before I started to cry. So I felt very baffled. This is not meant to be ridicule or anything. It was just my first feeling. The author still has a lot of room for improvement.

Come on, come on, I invite you to share this delicious novel with me

You actually secretly released a new work, Haji Shu, you guy [laughing evilly]

For now, it's worth a taste

It's okay, it's worth tasting [note], it's delicious.

Poor author I really can't bear to see you earning four yuan a day

Very beautiful! ! ! I'll give you a five-star rating, it doesn't cost any money anyway~

Come on, author! Looking forward to reading great stories when you come back from the final exam! [Praise]

Nothing much to say, it's nice to read, but the volume is small, so I don't recommend keeping the book.

The current evaluation is average to above average. The beginning of "Sky Dream" is good, but the ending of "Sky Dream" is a bit too hasty. The knife is not bad even if it is a small knife, and the oracle's predictions are also somewhat interesting.

Like, waiting for Kevin's plot.

It's good, I love reading it, I'm happy to read it, but it's a bit sparse and not many people commented on it.

The emotional me was once again touched by my sincere feelings

Very beautiful, worth checking out

What did you say! Give it!

A very nice book

Five-star praise, author, cheers

It looks great, please give it a thumbs up to the author

Good looking, watch more if you like

The master's writing skills have not diminished [Like]

It's so arrogant. It's so arrogant.

What I want to say has been said before by others.

Hungry~ The good news is following the big army. The bad news is following the army Went looking for food, meow~

Come on author, you are the best

I also prefer the theme of Thirteen Heroes and Jie

Author update! ! ! Don't stop updating! ! ! ! Let us beg you

Come on, teacher! Come on, teacher. It was hard to find a book that suited my taste. I'm so book-hungry right now! I don't want to update another chapter ah ah ah ah