Demon Slayer: Kimetsu No Yaiba Fic Tongmo Kotoha: Withered Lotus in the Garden

I really like this children's book. It shouldn't have only this score at all, it should be around 9 points. The author's ambition is very bold and his steps are very big. His writing style is smooth and his narrative rhythm is good, which makes up for this point very well. Many people don't dare to write modern if lines and don't dare to write about the true feelings of hollow people, because they are afraid of OOC. The author not only dared to write, but also gave a very careful logic and persuaded me very well. First of all, the foundation has been laid in the expansion of the original work. Tong Mo himself seems to be unintentional, but in fact he has been tempted, and he is moved without knowing it. The original part is very well written and restored very delicately! Secondly, the reincarnation in hell restricted Tongmo from cannibalism and killing, forcing Tongmo to start thinking about how to lay out what he wanted instead of just ruthlessly plundering. Then, you will see a reincarnated Tong Mo who was ignorant and gradually filled with his own desires. These desires are very unfamiliar to Tong Mo and he doesn't know how to deal with them. Everything is on the verge of getting out of control. In the end, Tong Mo got the only salvation in his life. Under the guidance and company of Qin Ye, he understood the origin of his desire and what kind of feelings he had for Qin Ye. He is willing to try to learn to be a real person for Kotonoha and give her the love and companionship she wants. It's just that the hehe between them is too difficult to achieve. The biggest obstacle for them to be together in the whole book is actually Tong Mo himself. This design gave me a very pleasant surprise. It can be said that the author grasped this core contradiction and completed the entire book. I don't agree with some people who say that Tong Qin is bland. From the original work, it can be seen that Tong Mo is an evil ghost who wants to keep Qin Ye by his side even if he can't understand his own emotions, and never thought of giving Qin Ye a second choice. Once he opens his mind a little bit, he will be as serious as Tong Mo in this book. Kotonoha's portrayal is also very good, very flesh and blood. You will see that she is very principled as a person, and she can also be confused and painful, but she is always gentle and firm. Facing Tongmo, who is a bit of a hypocrite, Kotonoha will also feel pain, and will also think that maybe separation is the best choice for the two of them. However, once Kotonoha really chooses Tongmo, she will use her love to water this hollow man until he really grows the roots of love and understands what love is. Between the two of them, Kotonoha is the real leader. I have also seen one or two scattered comments that disagree with the author's story design, but fan fiction is always difficult to agree on. I am very surprised to see such a Tong Qin text and I like it. It is normal for some people to not accept it. Everyone's understanding is different. Starting from the story itself, I will give this Tongqin article full marks. I hope more people can read this high-quality fanfic! Forgot to mention, the extras are also very interesting. Highly recommended to everyone who likes Tongqin!

This book puts more emphasis on the hypocritical side of Tong Mo. When I look at them now, I feel quite painful. The happier you are now, the more painful it will be when it is revealed. But this also shows that the capital writing is very good!

The relationship between Tongqin in the previous life filled up the gaps in the original work and fit very well. It is also very delicious in modern times. The dank male ghost🍵 is full of art. Little Qinye can only fall into the trap step by step in the script designed by Mo Mo Tou [shy][shy][shy]

The writing is super beautiful. I burst into tears watching the scene where Tongmo turns into a fox and dies for Kotonoha. The author please update it quickly. It's not enough [crying][crying][crying][crying][crying]

The author is so awesome. I must have been lucky enough to read this book in my previous life! The early emotional line not only fits the original work but also has its own creative ideas! The writing is delicate and very delicious! 🐜🐜🐜🐜🐜!

I particularly like the previous description of Kotonoha's time in the Paradise Cult. Hehehe, Kotonoha's mommy is so doting on her! The subsequent reincarnation of the pseudo-bone made me laugh all the time, and the emotional transition was handled very well... I cried while watching it... The teacher is very good at cooking! Delicious, love to eat delicious food😋 However, I was a little disappointed that I didn't see the male mistress described in the introduction. [Thinking] Since the outline has been changed, I suggest that the teacher can also change the introduction!

The modern PA written by the teacher is really in line with Tongmo's character. To borrow the words of other teachers, Tongmo allows Kotonoha to be himself within the scope of his control. Once it exceeds this range and Kotonoha has other people close to him, this man will break the defense and find opportunities to separate Kotonoha and others. Many people say that Tong Qin is indifferent, but I disagree. You can't see that Tong Mo has no feelings, and you really think that this man has very weak feelings for Qin Ye. In the first life, this man decided on his own that Kotonoha would stay by his side and die. If Kotonoha had other suitors, Tongmo would have taken care of them. If Kotonoha's modern pa had both parents, he really wouldn't necessarily be so dependent on Tongmo. But according to this man's character, Kotonoha will still grow up beside Tongmo. It feels like Kotonoha is bound to Tongmo, and the old man does not allow his mother to leave him and be with others.

It's so beautiful to play. The characters of Tongmo and Kotonoha are not OOC at all. The plot and emotions are super delicate. It focuses on describing the emotions of Tongmo and Kotonoha. There are both ambiguous teasing and warm happiness after expressing their emotions. The pseudo-siblings after reincarnation really impressed me. All in all, it is a masterpiece of Tongqin that was delayed by ratings.

It's very beautiful and not OOC at all... It's one of the top three long-form fanfics I've ever seen... The author must continue writing it. It's really, very beautiful... I read more than half of it in one breath (╥╥) It's so good, so good, so good. Come and check it out! Sister Tong Qin really eats well with such a cook🥰🥰🥰

Reincarnation is a very interesting book. I was really surprised when I turned into a little animal. It's such a cute plot. When I was reincarnated as an adult, I always felt that Renma and Kotonoha talked more, and the mystery of Tongma became less and a bit OOC, but the plot was still very sweet. Although it was funny to watch the plot of the reincarnation of an adult and the appearance of the God of Fun at the end, I am very satisfied after finishing a complete story and it is he➕The story has extras➕The writing is smooth and the plot is less OOC. I wish you all a happy reading. Another interesting point is that the author dreamed that Tong Mo came in person to force the ending to be changed to he. The old man loved Xiao Zizi, and Xiao Zizi loved Xiao Mozi. No matter what, I hope they are true!

I like the supplement to the original work. It's really good that it's not forced. As a ghost, Tongmo will never be able to truly be with Kotonoha, and Kotonoha will never be able to accept him as a man-eating ghost. Their relationship itself is deceptive. Be is their destined ending (It tastes so good, does anyone understand?) The original line Tongqin's he always makes people feel like a dream of Tongmo (an old man's fantasy) Although I haven't watched if yet But You two, please live happily without any sin in your new life [Love]

It's great, the writing is good, and the characters are very consistent with the original work [Blowing Kiss] It's beautiful

The high quality of the fanfiction is scary, so scary, and beautiful. I have fallen in love with the author [blowing kiss] After reading it, I realized that the author had buried a lot of foreshadowings. It was really a miracle [crying]. Tongmo went from an empty evil ghost to the end, under the influence of Kotonoha, he worked hard to learn to be a human being and gave Kotonoha true love. Kotonoha is always the same as in her previous life, gentle and tough, with flesh and blood. Facing the puppet side of Tongmo, Kotonoha will also make painful choices [crying] but bravely take it [crying]. This is the charm of a perfect girl. The cause and effect of sin and atonement are not superficial at all, and the changes in the relationship between the two are portrayed in such a delicate and profound way. At first, I really hated those people from Hell, but later on I was shocked. With Kotonoha's love pouring over me, the old man had completed his own redemption [crying] [crying] [crying] It's so beautiful woo woo woo [crying] [crying] [crying]

The teacher's writing style is very good and the quality is so high! The stream of consciousness is also very powerful and the story is very interesting. [Adoration][Adoration]

Not bad, not bad, very good-looking. He is worthy of being a dank male ghost. He is cruel to others but also cruel to himself. He is so happy that his apple muscles cannot stay flat during the whole process [smirk][smirk][smirk][smirk][smirk]

After watching the main three lives, well, actually there are more than three lives, I just felt very touched and delicious in my heart. The emotional progress of the two people is very rhythmic, and it doesn't just happen suddenly. The author's portrayal of the emotional changes between Tong Qin and Tong Qin is very delicate. I like it very much, and I also have a love for youth. A happy life, I really can't help but shed tears. Thank you to the author for filling in my beautiful imagination of Kotonoha's life during the Eternal Paradise Sect. In fact, I want to say that if Kotonoha is happy, Tongmo will be fine if he dies.

This book really twists and turns again and again, it's so fun. Like it very much. Also, Dad, I really like this book. I am writing a Tongqin Tianmu Wen, and I want to include your book in it. Is that okay? I will mark the title of the article and the author's name in a big name. [Send heart][Send heart] I really recommend it. There are also things like the leader's dreams, it's so interesting [adoration][adoration][adoration]

It's so good-looking, I would like to call it 🍅Tong Qinwen's second best-looking one

Like. . The concept is so clever, I really like the modern if

Okay, okay, the third life is sweet, I like it😍

Super pretty, super pretty. Very cute two people making love to me [shy][shy][shy]

Not bad. It looks okay now. Just don't have a knife.

I don't really read modern IF, but this book is really sweet and not OOC [blowing kiss]

It feels very close to the original work

I like it so much, it's so frustrating when I'm not in love

It's really pretty 👌

Super beautiful, I like it very much

Father, Queen and Queen must be happy

Wow, the description is super delicate [laugh][laugh][laugh]

Beautiful😍very beautiful