I'm Just Telling You Why It's Really Changed for Me

There is an outline of the novel, but the narrative is relatively flat, the writing technique is jerky, and there is still a lot of room for improvement. Character descriptions and narratives should be more natural, appropriate, and realistic, rather than being written in a straightforward manner like a running account.

It's pretty good, I still want to watch it

Not bad, except that it is not practical to fly planes on the aircraft carrier. It should be said that it is impossible to just let people fly planes randomly. Everything else is okay.

If you have any ideas, please tell me so that I can correct them.