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First of all, as a reader of 2500+ and a small author, I would like to give my thoughts to the author. The book is very good. I like Kuchiki Byakuya in 50 and Bleach. The story is also very good so far. I think the author can pay attention to a few points. First, the protagonist, as a time traveler, knows the story of Wulin, but in the book, such as Long Bing, he did not guess it, and there is a little contradiction. The second is the author's generous narration and description. It can be seen that he has written several novels. It has a foundation and feel, without redundant nonsense and colloquialism. It is the language of the novel. However, the detailed character description is too straightforward, and the narrative is a bit simplistic. Sometimes it looks like a biography of the character, like a narration in a movie describing what the protagonist has been doing during this period. [Adoration] [Blowing Kiss] I personally think that more communication, verbal dialogue, monologues with the protagonist, inner OS, Xie Su and Xu Xiaoyan can be more lively. After reading Chapter 90, I feel that their presence is a bit less, and maybe Yun Che is a more reserved person. , Sometimes I feel that I don't have much communication with Donghai F4, it just feels like time slowly passes and the relationship gradually becomes stronger. Some emotional scenes in the middle are not explained and it will be a bit abrupt and unnatural. Many words can be said through description instead of narration. A third-person perspective can analyze what has changed and what is in my heart. I also feel that it is more consistent with the original work. For example, Xie Shi is still an arrogant young master in Donghai, and Xiaoyan is still very lively. If the way of speaking and tone of voice are more similar, the author will definitely be very popular [send heart] [send heart] [send heart] [send heart] I like this setting and story very much, but after seeing the completion, I feel that the biggest problem here is that the narration is a bit narrated [send heart] [send heart] [send heart] I hope the author will work hard [blowing kiss] [blowing kiss] [blowing kiss]

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Is there a female protagonist? Who?

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