Taking the Zhao Surname: The Battle of Yashan, a Great Victory

The writing is good, but more serious than the irregular use of punctuation marks, which is a common problem for Internet writers, is the repetitive plot. Mrs. Xiong was clearly out on a mission, but suddenly appeared at the Banquet of the Ten Thousand People; Wen Tianxiang had obviously been abducted by Mrs. Xiong on the boat and was heading straight to Yashan, but he came ashore again for no reason and was killed in a plot; Duan Zong had obviously died once, and before his death, he gave his younger brother Tuogu to the male protagonist. He was given swords and shoes to go to the temple to pay homage to the unknown, and later he lived and died again so that the male protagonist could further seize power. Too many of these plot bugs will seriously affect the viewing experience. If they appear again later, it will lead to a serious wave of abandonment of the book. I hope the author will be cautious and it is best to make corrections himself.

It feels like there are some jumps, such as omitting a battle and negotiating for Wang Li to compromise, directly turning into a supervisory army and fast-forwarding to the plague. It's like a series of independent short stories. Also the dialogue is difficult to read without quotation marks.

The writing is good, but many of the dialogues in the middle do not have double quotation marks, which makes it difficult to read. Author, please change it quickly.

This book is very beautiful

The writing is very good, both in terms of character description and wisdom and courage. Come on, author, your writing is at the forefront of tomatoes!