Has the Mist Hashira Been Saved Today?

Uh 🤔 Why can the heroine directly tell the content of the prediction at the beginning, but then she says she can't tell it directly? Side effects (or ancestral curse)? There is no explanation in the article; another question is that the scene changes in the article are too general (?) And there is no specific look and feel. How can the protagonist be in a house one second and in the Butterfly House the next, and where is the training? Are you staying in a Ubeyashiki residence? So why is Tokitou here? And didn't the previous article say that Bei Mingyu was here to guide the heroine's training? Why has it changed again (and Tokitou's character design, eh🤔 feels a bit OOC) I've read about 1/3 of it, and then I've read about 1/2. I feel that the author's setting of this fanfic is quite interesting, really interesting, and the appearance of prophecy in this kind of fantasy work is quite attractive. The title of each chapter is also very precise But I feel that the interaction between the heroine and the original characters and the scene changes need to be thought about, or the expressions need to be changed? There may be a lot of things that I want to express but have not conveyed to the readers (just my personal thoughts)

There are many mistakes, the timeline is confusing, and basic character traits are not understood! Muichiro has no Haori

The author's writing is very good. I will give you a book review, a reminder, and a gift. Can you give me more? [Thinking] Then the interaction between the heroine and Tou Tou, I hope it will be more and sweeter

If the timeline is messy or Teriya's younger sister is definitely under 7 but Tohru is 14... It's hard to say, and Muichiro doesn't wear a haori... I really recommend that you carefully read all the plots of Demon Slayer to strengthen your knowledge about Demon Slayer and then write according to your own writing style. If you don't understand even the most basic plot, the novel will have a lot of OOC parts.

There are a lot of private settings and the timeline is messy. Qiantu was saved, but there was no role for Qiangtu later. The part of the Infinite City battle has the most private settings: there are no scenes between Miss Tamayo and Yushiro, Muzan jumps into the Infinite City and fights Muzan without even having his health bar lit up; he kills ghosts without cutting the neck or core; it feels like Tanjiro and Hino's Breath are useless.

I like the subject matter very much, and the writing is good, but the timeline is too messy. I save Qiu Usagi and Masaki, and then I get to the beginning of the main plot of Demon Slayer. In addition, at the beginning of the plot, it is said that Teriya is the heroine's older brother. He was about nine years old. On the right, the heroine is four or five years old. It is known that Teriya and the others are quintuplets, so the heroine should be the second child after the quintuplets. Later, it was introduced that the heroine is the second daughter. It is really confusing. I would like to know more about it when writing a fan. .

The basic points of the characters are all wrong... The timeline is not very clear, and the highlights of the original work have been deleted... The heroine is of no use, and this prediction is of no use... I can't see how to save Xiazhu. The writing is pretty good... But it feels unfocused.

It's pretty good, the emotional line is thin and the water flow is long, but I just don't have the passion to watch it.

Why is it so different from the original work? I didn't say anything.

The story develops very quickly. After rescuing Qiu Tu and others, there will be no role for them later. And after rescuing Qiu Tu, Ichiro was not rescued? I don't quite understand the author's timeline. Muichiro's emotional line is also very fast later. He pays inexplicable attention to the heroine, and then reminds the heroine, can't the heroine's bloodline awaken the prophecy? I have been carefully reminding you before, but I don't quite understand.