[Fourth Calamity, Schrodinger's heroine, farming, and players' daily lives]
Three years after transmigrating, Li Lin has finally gathered enough materials to establish a respawn point, thanks to making a name for himself in the underground city as a mysterious merchant.
From this moment on, the Fourth Calamity from Blue Star will sweep across this world, and Li Lin can ride the players' coattails to break free of his inability to leave the underground city.
Lost in his daydreams, Li Lin watches as a player raises a sword and attacks him...
Imperial soldier: “This is bad, Marshal! Our vanguard was attacked by goblins riding elf deer!”
Imperial Marshal: “Do you hear what you're saying? Goblins riding elf deer?”
Player A: “Your mercenary group is called the Sword of the Elves, so why are you all goblins?”
Player B: “Ahem, too many of us have died lately, and reviving elves is too expensive. We're using goblins as a stopgap for now.”
I suspect that you wrote it with AI, but you also made some typos. I feel that you may have used a little AI assistance. There are contradictions in some places. Issues about whether the languages are interoperable are sometimes patched, and sometimes the languages are clearly not interoperable but the issue is simply ignored.
NPCs with level 5 language translation capabilities can only barely understand the Chinese spoken by players. Players have not learned the imperial language, but they can communicate normally with ordinary adventurers.
I remember that players could only transform into monsters, and those in the strategy team were even goblins. How did they get out of the dungeon? The author's side description is based on thick armor, but the protagonist only brought a simple armor back to the camp to sell. Even if it was worn, the empire should have strict inspections to prevent intelligent monsters from sneaking into the empire, but the two of them went out easily.
As for some small details, I think AI assistance should be used or the author is not rigorous about the setting of his book. I will give one more star for the purpose of encouragement.
Sacrificing a little nun may be a little annoying in the early stage, but generally there is no big problem. The writing style of the book is a bit too real like Sword of the Dawn and this game. Also, these dozens of chapters are definitely written by humans, and typos often appear. A suggestion here is to throw the nun's body out and tell outsiders that she is gone, and then let the new consciousness that inherits the nun's life experience use the new body. This is a matter of opinion and wisdom. The above is the evaluation of an 800-hour book lover.
It feels very interesting to me when I see it so far. There is no big poisonous point, and there is no plot where the game suddenly affects reality. Players who want to maintain comparison are creatures who like to have fun. It is good for the national level to basically use the game as a laboratory to conduct experiments that are difficult to implement in reality. The above content is only my personal opinion, please don't comment if you don't like it😔
I didn't expect that there were so few ratings. This book is actually the author's first book. After finishing it, I can only wait for the serialization of qaq. Overall, the development and logic of the plot are pretty good, and the writing is also okay. It's not boring to read. Although there are some emotional lines, they are not all negative and are still within an acceptable range. Looking forward to subsequent updates, no need to be a eunuch woo woo woo
I'm dying of trouble with naming names. Can you recommend some good online names? Otherwise, I'll have to start with the readers [crying]
A paragraph is too long
I always have a feeling of déjà vu
It's not bad, but the player only needs a VR to arrive, and does not need full-body equipment. It's a little bit poisonous. It is recommended to skip Chapter 7 directly. It's okay to sacrifice a nun at the beginning. It's normal for the western fantasy worldview to be darker.
Very pretty. It is also very interesting in the theme of the 4th natural disaster.
As a non-templated fourth natural disaster article, it is already very good.
I suspect that you wrote it with AI, but you also made some typos. I feel that you may have used a little AI assistance. There are contradictions in some places. Issues about whether the languages are interoperable are sometimes patched, and sometimes the languages are clearly not interoperable but the issue is simply ignored. NPCs with level 5 language translation capabilities can only barely understand the Chinese spoken by players. Players have not learned the imperial language, but they can communicate normally with ordinary adventurers. I remember that players could only transform into monsters, and those in the strategy team were even goblins. How did they get out of the dungeon? The author's side description is based on thick armor, but the protagonist only brought a simple armor back to the camp to sell. Even if it was worn, the empire should have strict inspections to prevent intelligent monsters from sneaking into the empire, but the two of them went out easily. As for some small details, I think AI assistance should be used or the author is not rigorous about the setting of his book. I will give one more star for the purpose of encouragement.
Sacrificing a little nun may be a little annoying in the early stage, but generally there is no big problem. The writing style of the book is a bit too real like Sword of the Dawn and this game. Also, these dozens of chapters are definitely written by humans, and typos often appear. A suggestion here is to throw the nun's body out and tell outsiders that she is gone, and then let the new consciousness that inherits the nun's life experience use the new body. This is a matter of opinion and wisdom. The above is the evaluation of an 800-hour book lover.
It feels very interesting to me when I see it so far. There is no big poisonous point, and there is no plot where the game suddenly affects reality. Players who want to maintain comparison are creatures who like to have fun. It is good for the national level to basically use the game as a laboratory to conduct experiments that are difficult to implement in reality. The above content is only my personal opinion, please don't comment if you don't like it😔
I didn't expect that there were so few ratings. This book is actually the author's first book. After finishing it, I can only wait for the serialization of qaq. Overall, the development and logic of the plot are pretty good, and the writing is also okay. It's not boring to read. Although there are some emotional lines, they are not all negative and are still within an acceptable range. Looking forward to subsequent updates, no need to be a eunuch woo woo woo
I'm dying of trouble with naming names. Can you recommend some good online names? Otherwise, I'll have to start with the readers [crying]
A paragraph is too long
I always have a feeling of déjà vu
It's not bad, but the player only needs a VR to arrive, and does not need full-body equipment. It's a little bit poisonous. It is recommended to skip Chapter 7 directly. It's okay to sacrifice a nun at the beginning. It's normal for the western fantasy worldview to be darker.
Very pretty. It is also very interesting in the theme of the 4th natural disaster.
As a non-templated fourth natural disaster article, it is already very good.