(Cold, powerful commander gong × gentle but strong-willed shopkeeper shou; a formidable duo; base-building, survival, and progression; 1v1; happy ending; mutually devoted couple; base management + cyberpunk)
After Ye Ciqiu awakens his prophetic ability, he is bound to an apocalypse base-building System. From the start, all he has is a dilapidated hotel.
While everyone else struggles to survive in the apocalypse, his hotel offers free water and electricity, and its vending machines stock unlimited instant noodles, cola, and self-heating hot pots!
Before long, the icy, cold-faced commander Cen Yanchuan arrives, injured, and becomes his first guest as well as his most steadfast ally.
Soon, forces from all sides gather at the hotel, with one big shot after another clamoring to stay, all hoping to secure a place in this sanctuary amid the apocalypse.
As crises keep piling up and various factions eye his property, Ye Ciqiu waves a hand:
“Upgrade the hotel! Unlock a healing hot spring and farmland that grows spirit plants!”
His commander-turned-tenant silently protects him, clearing every obstacle in his way.
When a world-ending tide of zombies reaches the gates, Ye Ciqiu stands atop the upgraded hotel and smiles calmly.
“Welcome to ‘Old Dreams.’ This is the only paradise in the apocalypse, and also... humanity’s last hope.”
Author, I like your description, but this book does not deserve this star. However, I think it will be very popular as long as it is changed. You can change it like this, change the prophecy to rebirth. Then there is no need to waste a special ability to describe such disasters in the so-called future. Then you give a protagonist a growth-type ability, which gives him the ability to protect himself and gradually becomes more powerful. Finally, I want you to add a setting. That setting is in the hotel and the land around the hotel. The protagonist has absolute control and can be forcibly expelled and obliterated, and the protagonist is invincible within the scope of the hotel. Then if you want to add some dramatic conflicts, you can do it like this. Inside the hotel, the protagonist wears a mask, but outside the hotel he needs to do some tasks, collect some materials, etc. And it is not invincible outside the hotel, which can create some conflicts. This can also add some slap-in-the-face plot. Then the emotional conflict can make Gong fall in love with the one without the mask, and then because the masked protagonist wants to be slapped in the face, he will protect the unmasked protagonist, which leads to Gong's jealous scene, and then a love triangle between the two people is formed. I hope that when you see this comment of mine, you can try to overturn some of your previous rhythms and write again. Because I really like your writing style and description
It's almost equal, let me make some suggestions first. In fact, I find it very strange, because it was said at the beginning that powers cannot be used, and the protagonist has the highest authority. Does that mean that others cannot destroy [what][what][what] Moreover, the hotel was suddenly built at the beginning, and it quickly attracted the attention of others. It felt quite dangerous. Later, I went out to rescue people, and was pointed at by others, but wasn't this at the door? Can bullets from outside be fired directly in? 🤔 So the question is whether it is absolutely safe inside the hotel (land). In fact, it seems that it is not necessarily safe. I think, the author can change it to be absolutely safe in the house or the room. The protagonist making friends with various forces can be a way to solve the crisis, but it is still very dangerous to be targeted in the early stage. Now that I have seen the latest chapter, there is a protective force field, which should be better, but it is still strange. Isn't it absolutely safe from the beginning? [What] Based on other people's comments, the main problem is that the protagonist, at least after going out, has no ability to protect himself. This is quite a big problem because the situation is really not very good 🤦 At this time, we hope that the protagonist will not go out, but staying in the hotel is not a problem. My suggestion is that the author can set up a device in the protagonist's room that can directly return to the city when threatened, so that he will not be afraid of death when going out. There are too many suggestions. Let me briefly introduce the advantages. First of all, I like the world view very much. There is also the hotel that the protagonist suddenly gets in the apocalypse a long time later. Everything is good. Then I was very happy to see the hotel upgrade. It felt very cultivated and very unpleasant. Wrong, we are not afraid of shortage of supplies. I am very happy just thinking about it 😳 In short, I'll give it five stars for encouragement. By the way, I feel like I haven't written much about the emotional line. My opinion is that the current emotional development is actually pretty good. I personally think there is no need to create a big emotional conflict. After all, there are not many descriptions. If you add more conflicts, the progress will be too slow.
I personally feel that the writing is actually good, but there are some places that could be slightly modified. Well, actually the author's writing style is really good. But sometimes I feel really warm when I read it, and there are many settings, which are quite novel. I really like reading it, it gives people a very warm feeling. I would like to express my feelings, and then I will talk about what I suggest to change. It is just a suggestion, that is, you can expand the scope of protection a little bit, which is also written in this article, but don't increase it suddenly, try to let this protective shield slowly expand to the outside, and then add some active attack measures. The protagonist has the highest authority here, and sometimes he can be a little more tough. For example, when he comes to the door, he can activate this attack measure, or he can directly expel him, and then the relationship is flowing smoothly. I personally like it very much. I don't recommend that there be any big development or conflicts. Finally, I wish you can write better and better articles and become more and more popular 💕
You can think of this hotel as a kind of spatial ability. Then in this space, superpowers can be invincible. Wouldn't that be enough? No need to change anything else, just use this hotel. Even if it is said to the outside world that his own powers can be like this, no one will doubt it too much. Then it can be said that it is a power upgrade, and then water, food, etc. Can be refreshed. Even if it was how many kilograms or kilograms of supplies before, it can be said that the things that were stored were put out for rescue like this.
Not savoring it carefully is the most delicious way to eat it 😳 The only thing is that it makes you feel uncomfortable, right? It's more realistic, but it doesn't fit 🤔, so I can't savor it~ 😄
No. Why do you always need others to save [what] No, I tricked him into killing him. I already had a golden finger, but I still obeyed him. I fell in love with him right away. Is he good-looking or not? Family members remember This kind of business, infrastructure and farming novel, don't read it with two male protagonists. A strange smell don't try If you want to read cool articles, just watch the female and male videos.
Very good, the pace is a bit fast
Not bad, it looks so good.