Mingchao: I Became a Holographic Kati, but the Kuroshio Version

Overall, it's pretty good. I don't know if it's good or not. After all, I've never written a book or been an author, so I can't give you any good suggestions. But as a reader, I can still say a few points, such as typos. Typos are common mistakes made by every author. Just be more rigorous and correct them slowly. Then there are too many small expressions, which don't have much impact, but reading too much will cause a bit of visual fatigue. The most important thing is that it's not enough! So author, please update it quickly [crying] This novel is really well written, please give it a little more [crying] (These are all personal opinions, no malice, only good intentions)

It can be seen that the writing style is a bit green, but what I want to express is well revealed in the words, and you can feel the author's full cooking ability. Of course, we will continue to think of some ideas or make jokes here and there in the future.

Hey, support yourself, is there nothing wrong with you? (๑> <๑)

Change Bai, the writing is excellent, the description of women's clothing and women's bodies is perfect, and the description of female abduction is zero. She traveled through Mingchao and became Frudelis, and then changed the plot magically. The desire to save is difficult to calm down. The setting of Ten Thousand Queens, Lily's harem story, the emotional line is well written, and the Shura field is also very loving. Hahaha, it's worth watching.

I would like to give a good review first and make some suggestions. The author can consider it himself. The previous writing is very good. I mainly came here for the protagonist, but starting from Chapter 10, the protagonist's sense of existence is too low. I know that the author wants to lay out the setting, foreshadowing, and explain the background for readers who have never played Ming Chao. However, after understanding the setting, it seems that the hydrological component is too large, and it is still continuous for such a long length. Fan fiction is different from original work. You can make original work Write more non-protagonist perspectives, but readers know many things about the fanfiction. If you write more things that readers already know, readers will have a stronger feeling of the word count, and many people will choose to enter the book-keeping stage. This is very detrimental to new books. I personally think that the best solution is to intersperse more scenes of the protagonist, at least not without seeing the protagonist for several consecutive chapters. Even if it is just daily life, giving readers some freshness in each chapter is the best way to maintain the reading volume of the fanfic. Finally, I selfishly hope that the Drifter is a woman and the main protagonist is a woman. If the Drifter is a man, it shouldn't be given too many scenes, otherwise it will always feel weird. If it doesn't work, you can also blur the gender.

Alas, I feel like he is that kind of righteous and idealistic protagonist again. I feel disgusted every time I see this. Although the protagonist is indeed powerful enough, I still feel disgusted, and I don't know why. It's a personal reason. It's not that the author is bad. But the author is undoubtedly fat in his description. Anyway, I feel like some fan fictions are like this, it's just my personal reasons. But I still want to say that the book written by the author is undoubtedly rich. Dried plums! But I haven't seen it until now, and now it's a bit late. A little embarrassing. Seriously speaking, the fighting is well written, and the author doesn't look like a novice. After all, novices generally find fighting more difficult. But I still want to say one more thing: the author's book is undoubtedly rich. Dried plums! Well, I seem a little excited. I'll look into it later and hope there will be a book group.

Very well written, keep up the hard work~ I'm looking forward to it

The writing is very good. The writing style can be said to not read the plot when playing the game. It can also be used as a way to make up for the regrets in the plot (and the author should write more words instead of replying to the readers) (hard squeeze on the author)

The book is a good book, and there are no major problems. As for the plot, I haven't played Mingchao that much. Regarding the description of appearance, I feel that it could be streamlined. After all, after reading too much, it feels like the number of words is too low. You can also ignore some minor flaws. After all, this kind of subject matter is still a bit rare (hundred/multi-female)

Yes, I'm here to give you a rating increase. Although the early stage of the plot is a bit slow, it's better to play it steadily, otherwise you will have to fill a lot of holes [face covering] One chapter a day is not enough, so I suggest you read one chapter at 8:00 in the morning and one chapter at 8:00 in the evening [laughing evilly] @, and then don't always fail to reply to fan group messages!

The setting is good, but it's a bit verbose. The author's writing is very cute, and it feels like he writes whatever he dreams about. This book is quite good

Needless to say, it's good-looking. Of course, the key is that the author is super interesting. Compared with the novel that feels like a cook's fantasy, the author always intersperses his own descriptions in the novel, which has a bit of influence. Also, isn't this really just a fake number? Generally speaking, the book feels a bit too forceful, and the descriptions in some places are not clear enough. The protagonist feels like a character in a time-travel game, and the mother finally sees the character baby in a single push. In addition, it is a bit awkward and a bit boring at first, and the mood seems too full. But overall, the author does have something to write about, with a bit of resistance. The author also said that he is good at OOC, so I read the introduction before reading to give myself an idea of ​​what to expect. For me, the biggest drawback is that the protagonist's tone of voice is a bit off-putting at times, but I started reading the book with the entry "Story Novelty Ming Chao + Tie Tie". The Tie Tie written by the author is indeed to my taste. There are some flaws in other places that are not important to someone with high poison resistance like me, and the author is slowly improving as I read, so it is still worthy of recommendation.

First of all, I give you five stars. I personally feel that the book is very well written. "No matter who else I see it, I feel very comfortable [laughing evilly]", but I have to say sorry first. I only played the beginning of Mingchao. I had to go to Baidu to know who the characters mentioned by the author are [face covering] and then not much more. I uninstalled it immediately. I can't say that Mingchao is not fun. I also want to light it up but I can't do it. As for this trick, I have to fool around with it. After all, the world scenery of Genshin Impact is so good that I can't come back and I don't have the energy to study Mingchao [awkward laugh]

I forgot to give you a little star, so I'll make it up for you. May the world you write shine brightly, may there be light in your stories, and may there be joy in your life. May your inspiration always be with you, your literary thoughts endless, and you may meet readers who understand you in every book you read. May you feel comfortable writing, gain applause and love, and maintain inner peace and love. May you keep writing and produce excellent works frequently, and may you be treated gently by the world.

It's okay, as other comments said, there are too many PSs at the end. If the author really can't find the author, he can open a separate chapter with these PSs. Putting them in the plot does affect the perception. It doesn't particularly affect those who read the book. It's mainly for listening to the book. There is also the point about describing the appearance. Well, I didn't say that the author is wrong. I like to read it, but the author should be more cautious, because there are many such books that have been blocked [laughter]

I have read a lot of books, maybe there are good ones. But I think it is good to dare to write (except for extremely extreme ones). I became interested in it when I first started reading it. Although it may be a bit slow later on, I think it is the biggest advantage to dare to write.

It's great, this is the best Mingchao fan I've seen so far [Adoration][Adoration][Admiration]

The author is very attentive and the background of the story is very clear

This is what I want to see! It's so perfect, this is simply a masterpiece! Except for a few minor flaws, there are no poisonous points. In short, I will not delete it unless the author abandons it. Those who have watched the original plot can jump directly to Chapter 10 If you want to read the post, just skip to Chapter 26 [Like]

Good-looking is good-looking but Did you consider the relationship between opposing camps when you wrote it? Also, the protagonist is from the Kuroshio camp and she has a hostile relationship with humans. This makes me very uncomfortable looking at it If I don't know, forget it but I know [cry][cry][cry] Also, it's just as black as it is completely black. It's huge.

Although the writing style is average and tends to be more colloquial, it can be seen that the author is really working hard to write this book, and the plot is not bad, please keep writing, don't be too coo [note] [please update]

Oh my god, the interactions with the characters are so sweet, I hope the author can do more. It's not enough to watch [adoration][adoration][adoration]

A good-looking drifter must be a man

"What am I?" "I am a bystander of the world" "A deducer of the origin" "Still" "A witness of life" "I am" "An existence that has nothing to do with anything" "The wave has faded" "Civilization needs a shore to continue" "That shore" "is the starting point of my old life" "The starting point of our old time" "I understand" "I was born because of you" "In this world" "Life comes from your mission" "In silence" "Civilization will continue on the shore" "That coast" "is the proof of my existence"

Just a comment, this comment was summarized after I carefully read 91 chapters [laughing] Can the author update a few more chapters a day? One update a day is simply not enough! ! And if you play the game less and think more about the plot, Tiantian Shuiwen is a lousy author, and even if you write about whatever you dream about, you can't dream more when you go to bed so early every day! ! Since there is still progress so far, I will give you five ⭐ praises to encourage you~

The writing is detailed, although except for the protagonist and Ah Piao Jinxi, I don't know almost anyone else, don't know what they are like, and have no impression of them.

It would be nice if you could post more beautiful pictures

Earlier, the author included private information in the text, which somewhat affected the perception, but later changes made it much better. Also, the emojis are really a bit awkward. The book is good, I hope the author will continue to work hard.

I originally didn't take much notice of the drama mentioned in the comment section, but when I took a closer look, I felt that the PS person who wrote the three chapters was able to put together one chapter. The writing was almost the same as mine (I can't write either). It didn't seem like a problem, but it just felt weird, but it was all written in a cool way. I would like to give you a four-star encouragement.

Oh kids, after reading this book, Ben Zhidun's body warmed up, and he felt that the energy in his body was overflowing. I feel like I can be a TV drama BOOS again [full] [full] [full]