[Plot flow] [Decisive killing] [Multiple women] [Face-slapping master]
"Ta! Ta! Ta!"
In the dark and damp dungeon, Ji Wuming, who had just traveled through time, listened to the light footsteps in his ears, glanced at the loading system panel with his peripheral vision, and closed his eyes in intoxication.
'Oh~ Such a sweet pace~ Is the life of the protagonist of my novel finally about to begin? '
Little did they know, it was death knocking on the door.
"Brother Kaiyang!"
The girl smiles like a flower.
"Please die honestly!"
The girl looks like an evil spirit.
The moment death approached, he suddenly realized.
"This script is wrong!!"
"Where's the system?!"
"Help me!!!"
…
[Congratulations, you have awakened this system.
[A group of confidantes are rushing over...]
[This system will help you become the best succubus king in the world!
Ji Wuming, who had just died, heard this and his resentment was instantly cleared.
"King of Succubi?"
"A confidante?"
"If you want to talk about this, I won't be sleepy anymore!"
…
Many years later.
Looking down at the sentient beings in the three realms, Ji couldn't help but sigh when he recalled this period of time.
"Isn't this just toying with me?"
Reader comments
As a reader who has written novels, let me comment:
1. The writing is very descriptive, and I feel that my vocabulary is much richer than mine.
2. The logic of the plot is not that of a short novel. The plot is interspersed with each other, a bit like a starting point novel. It seems to have an outline and a middle outline. I don't know if there are detailed outlines, but it is definitely not the kind of writing that comes to mind.
3. In terms of plot, the setting and the character of the protagonist make the story interesting and relaxing! Furthermore, writing about conflicts or problems is not just about fighting, it requires brains, and I can't think of solutions to some problems myself. This kind of writing using your brain is more difficult to write than writing the layout and calculation, because writing the layout is dead and you just need to keep doing it, but this kind of writing is not possible.
4. Characterization, because the writing style is not serious and serious, so the characters cannot be based on realistic behavioral logic! Correspondingly, the memory points of the characters are much weaker, and naturally they cannot compare with high-scoring articles. But my personal feeling is that humor is more difficult to write than serious text.
5. Regarding the plot, the author is very good at setting the hook and it is very attractive.
In general, in my opinion, this kind of article seems to be refreshing, thoughtful and hopeful, and it can definitely be rated 5 stars in Tomato!
The story is not cliché, and the more you read, the more you read it. It is interesting, interesting, and decent. There are too many confidantes, and I don't know who is the heroine [thoughts]
As a reader who has written novels, let me comment: 1. The writing is very descriptive, and I feel that my vocabulary is much richer than mine. 2. The logic of the plot is not that of a short novel. The plot is interspersed with each other, a bit like a starting point novel. It seems to have an outline and a middle outline. I don't know if there are detailed outlines, but it is definitely not the kind of writing that comes to mind. 3. In terms of plot, the setting and the character of the protagonist make the story interesting and relaxing! Furthermore, writing about conflicts or problems is not just about fighting, it requires brains, and I can't think of solutions to some problems myself. This kind of writing using your brain is more difficult to write than writing the layout and calculation, because writing the layout is dead and you just need to keep doing it, but this kind of writing is not possible. 4. Characterization, because the writing style is not serious and serious, so the characters cannot be based on realistic behavioral logic! Correspondingly, the memory points of the characters are much weaker, and naturally they cannot compare with high-scoring articles. But my personal feeling is that humor is more difficult to write than serious text. 5. Regarding the plot, the author is very good at setting the hook and it is very attractive. In general, in my opinion, this kind of article seems to be refreshing, thoughtful and hopeful, and it can definitely be rated 5 stars in Tomato!
The story is not cliché, and the more you read, the more you read it. It is interesting, interesting, and decent. There are too many confidantes, and I don't know who is the heroine [thoughts]