Will the Dongfang Rebels Be Punished This Time? !

Very good, just a little short. It's so sweet, so sweet, and sometimes a little embarrassing. The author works hard to update and strengthen the heroine. I hope the heroine will not be a passive party. It would be better to strengthen her strength or brain power. Or let the heroine add her past life memories and efforts in this life to skip a level, so that the heroine can have a better future and use her brainpower to crush these men. Or by strengthening the heroine's strength, she can fight back and forth with some gangsters. This way it looks better and she has the ability to protect herself. Appearance, height, education, strength, anything is fine. 🥺

It's very good. The story is unique and does not blindly follow the original work. At the same time, the emotional changes between them are all written out, so that the story will not be too general. What I like most is the author's description of the protagonist saving her brother. It is not saved all at once. It seems very simple but her helplessness can always be seen. This fanfic is not like other fanfics that are just funny and funny. It is written to attract readers (you know). It is very meaningful. I look forward to your next content [Sending Hearts]

I hope to strengthen the heroine. I feel that a normal adult (the heroine) would give up when faced with Isana, but the heroine seems to attach great importance to family ties, so it is understandable. You can check out other good Dongfu fanfics written in Tomato

It's beautiful, the emotional descriptions are delicate (I love it 🦴), and the character interactions are natural, breaking Shinichiro's "perfect virgin white moonlight" image (silly white sweetness) in most of the articles I read. The characters are more three-dimensional, but I really didn't expect that my first love in the future would be Shinichiro... At present, the only thing that embarrasses me is that Mirai tries to communicate with Tianzhu's other family members to control them. Well, how should I put it, Mirai has always had a more sober image. Shinichiro also praised Mirai for living a more transparent life than him. Just looking at Coco's information, Isana and The nature of this transaction can be seen from Hedie's concealment and the warning from the Haigu brothers. The behavior of calling the police and suing parents is a bit OOC (can also be interpreted as caring). However, other than that, the author's writing is very good. I look forward to the beginning of the original plot (I really want to see the future in Wu Xiaodao's future vision). Is everyone including Coco and Xisaki? I am very curious about Yihu's attitude towards the future. Dongfu is so cold, I hope the author can persevere [Love] [Love] [Love]

In fact, I feel that this article has been written quite well. The heroine has a sense of morality, is kind, and wants to save people. Although she doesn't have the value of force, she at least has a bottom line and is brave, and will not be indifferent and refuse to save people. Although the result of this approach is accompanied by naivety and recklessness, it is true that not everyone can perform excellent operations in unexpected situations. Moreover, the heroine has not read the original work, and was a good citizen in her previous life. She does not know the development of the world and the dark side of the world (actually, there are some differences in living habits and educational concepts between countries. If you are not a native living here, it will feel a little inconsistent in physical and mental performance), so it is actually quite normal to have such a reaction. His thinking is quite ordinary, and he will not suddenly go crazy and make strange things, or hate the world and the earth. This emotional stability alone surpasses many other characters who start to go crazy for no apparent reason, making people's blood pressure rise. Although readers may think that such a heroine is quite useless, but considering that the background is relatively realistic and dark, they will feel that it is not bad. After all, in reality, ordinary people are still the majority and do nothing, and it is a common problem in East Asian families. Many childhood traumas caused in childhood are not easy to heal even when they grow up. This also explains why it is difficult for people with twisted personalities to correct their mentality and live a better life on their own... And since this article is said to be the ending of Be, we can roughly think of the reason for this development, which is quite reasonable. After reading quite a few articles by Dongfu, I got the feeling that many authors set their protagonists to be very smart and good at fighting, but when written, they all seem like the protagonists are like childish elementary school students, and then people around them praise them...

Very very beautiful! The future baby is tough and sunny, leading Isana along the way, and the plot is well connected! In fact, I even made fun of their brother and sister [laughing evilly] [laughing evilly] I don't know what the future direction will be. The author must continue to maintain it, and there must be sweetness.

Stepping into the perspective of the heroine, I felt like I was on the earth during the period of plate expansion. The little person stretched out his hand to grab the clothes of the person next to him, but the cracks between them slowly emerged, pulled by the powerful force. No matter how hard they tried, they could not stop it. What was even more disgusting was that everything they encountered was dragging the two of them into different abyss. They had obviously worked so hard. Didn't they say that hard work would be rewarded? Why, why did everything go astray towards the future? The future is not what the future wants.

This book is really good. I almost read Tomato's fanfics and read them to death. The heroine's part in the latest plot made me scream! ! There is just something sadistic about it, and I feel sorry for everyone. Dong Fu Yuan Manhua is simply a tragedy (self-understanding), which can only be alleviated by fan fiction (the ending of all the characters is a bit far-fetched)

The writing is very nice, but I feel that the daily life line is a bit thin. The characters are also quite thin, but the description of the heroine's character is quite good. When I almost couldn't understand her behavior several times, I immediately explained the reason for this behavior. I feel that the descriptive words are a bit too much. I could write more daily life things to flesh out the character. It is also too tight. I feel that the heroine lives in fear every day. Now that I have finally relaxed a little, I feel like I can write some happy things, and then tighten up when something happens, otherwise I will feel tense all the time now. Although it is dark, but well, it is not necessary, the whole article has a very gloomy feeling. I think some detailed and appropriate comparisons will make the whole article more relaxing. Because I am recommended by the Huigu brothers, I may pay more attention to them. I don't know if the author has read an article by Old Ford analyzing the Gray Valley brothers, because there are not many records, but it is probably said that compared to Lan, Gentian will slightly show the innocence and pure evil of children, just like the inherent evil of human nature. For example, when Isana Hedie was shot, Lan Going to pay homage to Gentian at the meeting, he just stood aside and watched, making Lan more humane. I feel that the relationship between Lan and Long in the article reflects this. In the handling of some things, Lan makes me feel that he is more humane, while Gentian just jumps out from time to time. It's an onomatopoeia, maybe because I don't care about the heroine's thoughts about living a day, but I feel that the character could be fleshed out a little more. For example, the part about teaching the heroine how to box was very well written. I felt that the writing of Shiyin and Gentian was quite juvenile, and Tianzhu was at that time. They are only 15, no matter how evil they are, they are still teenagers. You can write about their quarrels and childishness in some daily things. Although they agree with Isana, Tianzhu can be regarded as a kind of clique, but in the end they are still companions. Boys will fight and fight with each other, right?

It's okay, it's pretty good. I watched some blue screens, and I noticed one thing. Female critics always try to redeem them. But he never had a partner by his side. Hurry up, the heroine arranges for her partner to write it by the author, so why should the brother follow him around to record a certain disc? Who is following Coco to make money? Shinichiro was followed by a group of people. Even the villain who screamed "Titanium" had someone following him when he ran away. Our heroine wants to save someone but is completely helpless, which makes me mad. Over in Nanping, there are at least a few friends with whom I have had close friendships who will never leave me.

Very nice [KISS] This is the first time I have seen this type of book. The emotions are also very delicate. There are almost no shortcomings, but it is a bit short. I am looking forward to the subsequent plot, and I came here to support it [Sending my heart]

Although I have only read ten chapters, to be honest, I can tell from the beginning of the book that I am attracted to it. I have not read the original work, and my understanding of this book is only limited to some fan fiction. Of course, most of them are light and interesting types. The pain behind the characters is mostly brushed aside, so that I cannot feel how bitter their bitter past is. The beginning of this book really took me through Kurokawa Isa At the beginning, although I didn't know if it was different from the original work, it really touched me. The writing was very delicate and the emotional interaction between the characters was also very touching. I read in the comments section that Kurokawa actually had no blood relatives in the original work, but fortunately he has a sister who can grow up with him here, and He Die. I hope they can have more happy and warm memories here [Blow kiss]

It's really embarrassing to be honest! [Holds face] It's really good-looking too! [Laughs] Maybe I'm too sensitive and even cried when I saw it [Crying] But it's really good-looking It doesn't seem to be that embarrassing anymore. It was a little awkward in the early stage, but it's not a big deal, but it's really good-looking! [Adoration]

It's very beautiful, the characters don't feel OOC, and then I think the heroine's image is well described and the rhythm is just right. Now I see that the heroine is coming to find the parents of the Hui Gu brothers. I'll take it easy for a moment. It's a little embarrassing. I think about it. Yeah, yes.

Ishime Mirai successfully achieved the double-death ending of Unfinished Obsession (an unexpected ending). Mirai is really powerless. He can't be beaten and can't hide. I'm already obsessed with getting Isana and Hedie back on track. If I didn't have this obsession, I might have bowed down and become a melancholy girl in the future.

Very good reading experience mikuちゃんがきです✧* The interaction with Shinichiro makes people's hearts melt. They are both gentle and strong people at heart. I really like it. I'm already looking forward to the sequel. (Actually, when I was watching the episode, I felt that my eldest brother seemed like a husband. I recalled the scene where he was repairing a motorcycle with a cigarette in his mouth. It was really amazing, on a Bai Yueguang level)

What a great teacher, the writing is super good, I hope you can continue to update [blowing kiss]

This book is really good. I highly recommend it. The plot is very attractive to me. Shinichiro Bai Yueguang didn't survive and I really cried. Where are you, psychological committee member? I couldn't stand it [crying] [crying] [crying]

I'm not good at Chinese, but this is my favorite Tokyo Avengers fanfic! ! ! Big cheers for the author! ! [Laughing][laughing][laughing][laughing][loving][loving][loving][loving][loving]

🦴 It's so cute, but I feel that the heroine is actually quite pitiful. It's actually a bit too cruel for the person I fell in love with to die right in front of my eyes. I always wanted to change the dangerous things my brother did, but found that nothing can be changed. But it's very interesting. I just hope the author will update it soon [Love]

Isana would restrain his emotions for fear of hurting the future. If you learn about this relationship in the future, you may avoid running away. So the two of them are destined to be. Even BE is thinking about each other, even though neither is what the other needs. My dear sister, she can fall in love with anyone, but she will never "fall in love" with me. This is how I eat sweets with a knife [laughing evilly] Apart from the relationship of family members, what will my brother do to seize the future?

Written! Very good! The interaction between each character and the ups and downs of the plot are all very good. It's just delicious. The author's writing is so good that I felt so immersed in it. The emotions and characters of the characters are also very rich. I read it for several hours at a time [crying], then took a rest for a long time, and finally went to read the sweet article🤑

The characters are all very good, especially the Gray Valley brothers👬😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋 😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋 😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋 😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋 😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋 😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋 😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋😋

I can't think of a word that can be used to describe this book. It's not the best among the Dongswas type fanfics I've read, but it's one of the top ones (in my personal opinion), although it's still being updated. I'm looking forward to the follow-up articles, keep going!

I don't feel embarrassed at all. The author's writing is really super, super, super beautiful! ! I was obsessed with it all at once, but it was too little and not enough to read. It was really well written! ! ! ! ! Ahhh, the writing is really great! ! Madam, your writing is so good, it will definitely get better and better! ! !

It's really beautiful. It's very logical and progresses layer by layer. I feel sorry for the future Wuwu who really has to bear a lot. One person has to bear a lot. The portrayal is so good, I like it so much. Our future baby is really thoughtful in dealing with all the forces. Although I haven't finished reading it yet, I really like it. I continued to read it and stayed up all night reading the book.

It's short, but it's so enjoyable. I'm already looking forward to the follow-up plot. It's a feeling that feels good even if you haven't read the original work. The relationship between brother and sister is really real, and then the feeling of powerlessness and hope that is like a rolling stone of fate. I feel so happy. I really want to know the follow-up plot. There is almost enough foreshadowing. I don't know what the protagonist is going to do. Uh, I want to read the original work. Is the original work good?

The reason why I don't give you full marks is that my Bai Yueguang died again and I burst into tears.

Even if you have never watched this anime, you can still watch it smoothly. The writing is very delicate. What I saw up to this point was a sour and astringent feeling with a little bit of warmth. I haven't watched this type of movie before, and it was really fun to watch. The author often bubbles up in the comment area

Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh! Watch it for hours and hours and it gets better and better. Wow! It's so well written, I want to read it again. Update the author soon. [Shy][Admiration][Admiration] Isana's possessiveness for the future must be too strong, just show it to me. I still want to continue watching.