Martial Arts Warriors Take the Yanyun Panel to Explore the World

The first part was good, but later on when I started writing emotional scenes, I was disgusted. I committed the common problem of not being able to write emotional scenes but still having to write them. They have already changed from a man to a woman, so why add a love scene (with a female partner) so abruptly? The previous image of a hermit who was carefree in the world was suddenly dragged into a state of embarrassment and plotting by the vulgar emotional drama. The woman had to clumsily hold back the protagonist, the woman had to vulgarly see through the protagonist's identity, and the protagonist was embarrassed and injured because of concern and then took this opportunity to continue to promote the emotional drama. Forget it, I haven't even bothered to worry about myself as a playboy. When I see someone falling in love with someone else, my face is full of question marks. There is so little foreshadowing. The emotional drama is like an NPC with fixed copywriting routines. What is there to worry about? But regardless of these personal subjective views, it's still pretty good. Yanyun's systems and mechanisms basically kill people in this world, which is pretty cool. If it hadn't been for the reasons I mentioned earlier that led to the protagonist's failure, I would have continued to watch it. Other than that, the world is purely original. In such a world, you can pretend to be cool and make fun of meme. You can travel back in time and amuse yourself by playing some advanced meme that only you know. It was fine at first, but after some factors interrupted the fun, the interest waned. Book lovers who don't care can enjoy reading it. Excluding my personal subjective points, I can indeed give it five stars. After all, in addition to the clichéd parts, there are also many anti-clichéd parts, so I enjoyed it in the early stages.

It becomes invincible, but it is adapting to the world, so it is not invincible at the beginning. It's not 1v1. There are currently two ambiguous ones. I'm not sure if they will be added. I can understand it even if I haven't played the game before. It's martial arts but not low-level martial arts. The protagonist has more of a mentality in the current game and doesn't do many things seriously. Generally speaking, I can watch it.

Overall, it's very good. After all, the author is a newbie. As chapters are updated, it can be seen that the author is also improving. It is worth reading. Of course, I hope the author can explain the emotional lines of the characters more clearly, such as how the sister-in-law Liang surnamed Gu developed feelings for the protagonist, etc. I also hope that the author can continue to work hard and write better and better.

Looks good, come on. It can indeed be seen that I am a newbie and there are some problems in many places. It is not perfect, but it is an encouragement and I give you five stars.

Not bad, not bad, but I don't know why I feel so tired after watching it [Thinking]

Give yourself a five-star encouragement, friends, just give it according to your mood. This is my first book and I wanted to test the waters. There are definitely many shortcomings, and you are welcome to provide reference opinions.

After reading this Yanyun Ranger for so long, I realized that the cover actually said "Sweep Liuhe". After spending tens of thousands of Changming Jade, I won one of the ten draws in the pool. Because Mao Changming Bead and Changming Jade are separate, the monthly card is still 100 a day, and none of them are cashed out.

Quite good, starting with top level strength, just do whatever you want

It's quite nice. I can see that at least it's not all synthesized by AI. Maybe I wrote it myself. Please support me.

There are indeed problems, but since this is your first time writing a book, I don't want to catch you on purpose. Just write well, I hope the more you write, the better [makes a face] After reading it, I think your first volume was probably too fast-paced and had too many explanations. The plot is finished in about twenty chapters, and it feels a bit tiring. There are also explanations for why people do what they do in some plots. Although it does not make the supporting characters look too stupid, it does seem a bit redundant. Also, the combat power was a bit inflated, but later it was discovered that geniuses were the ceiling, so it would make sense to have more grandmasters. There was a little improvement in the second volume, but the emotional scenes were really not well written. But at least I can see that you are making progress, but I feel like you ended it a little too quickly later on. Influenced by other comments, do you want to change to a movie and TV martial arts map? Although your original world is immature, it still has some merits, so don't be too discouraged. I hope there will be more progress in the third volume [laughs]

Everything else is fine, but I don't really want the author to write so many trolls. It's best not to write the whole troll apprentice thing.

It's not invincible at all, and in this realm, I feel that in the later stage, it may still be like stacking boxes again.

After reading it, I had an idea. How about treating the world level and breakthrough level in the game as the cultivation realm and breakthrough realm of internal strength and true energy?

Please share, does your face pinching code work?

This book is not bad

Not bad [eat melon], I've been chasing it

Take Yanyun to play five stars! But I always feel that the combat power system is about to collapse. Let's see if the author can save it. Yan Yun's novels are still running out [crying]

Can anyone give me an answer?

If possible, you can put the game costume illustration here.

The author is Qingxi Qingxi. Come to our Liyuan if you are very busy!

Big cheers for the author

Although it doesn't feel like there's a main plot, it looks pretty good.

It looks good, but I miss Hongxian and the others.

It's very interesting. Although I haven't finished watching it yet, I really want to know what his realms are divided into? I feel like it's impossible to reach the Grand Master, right?

Okay, watch it when you're bored

Keep up with the big army ()

I think it's pretty good.

Not bad, you can take a look

It seems that more than 20 sheets are fine.

Can you straighten out the red line?