[Invincible + Unbreakable setting + Male to female + Protagonist is not funny + Slightly yandere in the later stage + Marrying + Indifference + Cruelty] This is the first time a newbie writes, please point out any OOC places and I will correct them little by little! If there is any difference between the reading and the original work, be sure to point it out! This is really important to me! I am trying my best to read the original text, please give me a thumbs up!
Reader comments
There are too many descriptions, and the paragraphs are too long. It makes me tired and I have no idea of reading any more. I always skip through the long paragraphs at a glance. If the protagonist's plot is too big, he will be declared invincible. This type of plot would be better if it were smaller. The situation before the protagonist's time travel is not clearly explained. The first part is that the programmer suddenly died and the time traveled, but the second part describes that the protagonist was once a high-class social elite.
Disadvantages: Some narratives are too cumbersome and the overall text could be more streamlined
Advantages: Well written, emotional description is very delicate
There are too many descriptions, and the paragraphs are too long. It makes me tired and I have no idea of reading any more. I always skip through the long paragraphs at a glance. If the protagonist's plot is too big, he will be declared invincible. This type of plot would be better if it were smaller. The situation before the protagonist's time travel is not clearly explained. The first part is that the programmer suddenly died and the time traveled, but the second part describes that the protagonist was once a high-class social elite.
Disadvantages: Some narratives are too cumbersome and the overall text could be more streamlined Advantages: Well written, emotional description is very delicate