The Captain's Unexpected Vacation!!!

A rare good article in the archives, the plot and character rhythms are well grasped. Apart from the somewhat unimpressive experience due to too many long paragraphs, overall this is a very good article! The writing is also very good, something that a restless writer like me can never hope to achieve. Keep up the good work, author, I've added a bookshelf for you [smile][smile][smile]

The writing is very good, and the characters are well created. My understanding of Iroha may not be enough. In my impression, Iroha is lazy, but his ability is not weak. In this article, it highlights the character of a girl. In other words, it is more open-minded than Kitowos. Monkey King, look at the good things you have done. However, although Kitowos is another world, it is essentially a modern Academy City, and Iroha's ability is not weak. In this article, he can't do anything. What has been outstanding so far is that it is just a physical condition (just the fight section). It feels a bit inconsistent here, but it does not affect the reading. Overall, it is a relatively fresh and sweet article. I almost thought I missed the section on the bases, but suddenly the progress increased rapidly.

The author's writing is delicate, the plot rhythm is normal, ups and downs, and there are foreshadowings to attract readers' interest. Don't worry about where you learned it. The author's writing style can be continued as a composition. Our teacher came and gave full marks to the composition he wrote.

Art! It is a very good book in BA. There is no strong narrative or too many emotions. What is there is only the patience and love that the author poured into this book. Overall, the writing style is great, the production capacity is superb, and the interactions between the characters are also very vivid and three-dimensional, making it difficult not to want to watch it. In a word, art!

The character is thoughtful and thoughtful, and the character is not ruined. I went there. What else can I say? If you like Iroha, come and watch it 😠 I'm lying to you. If you don't like it, come and watch it 😠

So pretty! This is a great talent. Whether it is the character design or the emotions, the narrative power is beyond the reach of other authors like me. It must be given a five-star rating and a plus one on the bookshelf! @ I'll find you a fellow who is equally matched. Come on!

Except for the relatively small description of the divine power of Iroha and Kiwo, everything else is quite good, especially the writing style. You can join the author group. I have tried it for everyone. If you are an active author (group leader), you will receive benefits. 😳[Blowing a kiss]

Nice! The characters have no OOC and the plot is reasonable

A+, but unfortunately the pace in the later stages was too fast and I didn't see Iroha and Ruobai returning to the chicken coop together. I hope there will be an extra story.

How to say it, I don't know 👍