Collapse of Iron: a Pioneering Story Different from the Past

It's a bit boring. The plot hasn't changed much. I hope I can write more of the author's own ideas. It would be better if the plot is not the same as the game. The more funny parts in the game don't need to be deleted. Also, I want to watch Breed [Punch] [Punch] [Punch] Give me Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed Breed

To be honest, the writing is pretty good, and it doesn't just make a temporary start, like being invincible in the world. From the perspective of an ordinary person, I got a rare object and started to embark on a pioneering journey.

It's pretty good. I saw something about Cocolia being mentioned in the comments section. I personally think it's okay to handle it this way. The main reason is that there were some problems with the previous work with Cocolia. It might make the male protagonist a bit cold-blooded? As far as the game is concerned, death is fine, but in this book, it's a bit of a stomachache. Generally speaking, this book is pretty good.

(4 Stars does not mean all levels, it is a little encouraging, and the author's opinions are understood after evaluation in the comment area) Originally I planned to give it 3.5 Stars, which is between average and good. Because I wasn't very happy watching it, I gave it a higher score to avoid emotional evaluation. Well... Regardless of whether the setting is reasonable or not, the author can be honest. The main character is developed and acceptable. It's just that the fantasy chapter was not very comfortable until the end. It can be said to be a replica of Cocolia. No, it's not as good as Cocolia, even Jingyuan can't compare. It's understandable from the perspective of the train, but somehow it's a bit uncomfortable from the perspective of the fairy boat. I can't see the place where I help Huanhu at the end. The innocent protagonist Pantao also wants it. In the end, he has to tell Jingyuan everything. Huanhuo tells Jingyuan that he's not dead, he has to tell Jingyuan about the fruit used to resurrect Cocolia, and he has to kneel down to others. What? Just after saving Jingyuan, can't you wait to show your sincerity? You want to make progress even more than Fu Xuan. After saying that Kafka only cares about himself, he later writes that he has a soft spot for bullying Fu Xuan; Jing Yuan plots against the protagonist, and the protagonist admires him so much that he wants to become his disciple; I only wrote about the uncomfortable parts. Judging from the ratings alone, it is still commendable. Because the author may change it, it is only used as a short-term reference. This time this is a real 4-star review. For me personally, if I keep writing at this pace, it will be an excellent fanfic. The author is a "fictional historian", so past memories are meaningless to readers, so they can experience it themselves.

Breeding Star God: I have turned him into a succubus system, he will definitely strengthen my breeding method😋 After a lot of hard work.......... Breeding Star God: What does it mean that my hormones are full but have not penetrated the host's sanity value? ! ! 😡 . . . . . . The girls send the protagonist a duel invitation! Protagonist: No, no, I'm going to turn into a bug ✌️🙄✌️ Breeding Star God: I am the main palace, you are just speeding up the pace of me getting him! 🤓

The plot is okay. I hope the plot characters can have more roles, it feels like it was delivered a little too quickly. I fell in love with the protagonist within two or three pictures after meeting him.

After being reminded by book friends, I will properly handle the issue of Cocolia, ensure that this character can be resurrected, and promise that this situation will not happen a second time. If I can't do it, I can just complain about it, and use this as a basis! (I know I was wrong, woo woo QAQ) I'm going to follow up on my comments. I hope you can give me some suggestions. In order to take care of the cook, this work is currently taking into account both plot and emotion, but the focus is still on the plot, so the emotional lines of the characters will seem a bit abrupt. Once I arrange emotional scenes for the characters, the plot will advance very slowly. It is commonly known as water plot. My level is limited and I don't know how to deal with it better. Please help me think of a way. I will adopt any suitable one. Thank you very much!

Yes, although it is a way of breeding, there is no shame in humanity, and using weapons to suppress the way of life is a very good idea.

It's a very good book, but why do so few people read it? Come on, author. When my living expenses are paid, let's not talk about the master certification. I'll try to encourage you by summoning a character or something.

The male protagonist is the iron-collapse succubus [laughing evilly]

Has the author ever played Simulated Universe? Have you ever played Bengtie [Anger][Anger][Anger]? Answer me! ! Look in my eyes, tell me why[ Angry ][ Angry ][ Angry ]

Cocolia was resurrected to add five stars. Cocolia is alive, add five stars.

Where's the romance? ♪

I don't play Bengtie, so I don't know what the plot changes are. I just know that this is a good book, and it's a good book [rolls eyes]

A very good book, but too little. (It is recommended that the author not eat, drink or sleep, and concentrate on finishing the manuscript!

Lao Da, Clara is a mature woman, right [shy]

Author, you have a lot of fun in the comment section [exploration]

Okay, pretty good-looking

Writing novels in your spare time has a unique flavor

At the beginning, I was playing bugs in Bengtie, but God's will allowed me to find the female character in every corner.

So far so good, the author continues to [eat melon]

Specifically, not much has been changed to fit the original plot. The protagonist grows up slowly and is not invincible at the beginning. It is worth watching.

Give four stars Advantages: The writing is good, the IQ is top-notch, not a stallion, not brainless, has educational and training content, the emotional line is very delicate, and can be read. Disadvantages: No innovative plot [thoughts]

Not much to say, not much to say, beautiful!

I think the character creation is very consistent, maybe because some parts quoted the original lines, which I quite like.

Not much to say, this novel suits my taste [laughing evilly] I have been reading this novel for a long time, and I would like to talk about its shortcomings. It is that the emotional lines of some characters are too abrupt. After all, in order to fit in with the original plot, it is impossible to have enough time to describe the emotional lines of each character. As a result, the emotions of some characters are very frivolous. In fact, some characters do not need to be included in the harem. Sometimes the plot created for a certain character is not only abrupt but also reduces the quality of the overall plot. I understand that the author is trying to take care of the other characters, but for a plate of vinegar-wrapped dumplings it's really hard to swallow.

It looks good. If you like it, come and see more.

Aha, I approve of you

Five-star support [like]

A book worth recommending