[Cultivation academy + dual Systems + childhood sweethearts + forum posts + character growth]
Qi Yun Zhao, daughter of the Wuji Sect’s leader, was born frail and sickly. She was spoiled, willful, cold, and melancholy. With her parents missing, all she could do was wait to die.
One day, two little dumplings appeared in her mind: the Saintly System said she could extend her life by doing good deeds, while the Villain System said she could grow stronger by doing evil.
Qi Yun Zhao was delighted. “I’ll take both!”
Her childhood friend Jiang Yueshi returned after three years away and discovered that the girl had gone crazy. One moment she was pulling him close to hug and kiss him; the next, she was slapping and whipping him over and over.
Jiang Yueshi was empathetic and prone to reading too much into things: “My poor little sister. She must be suffering so much. I have to spoil her rotten.”
As he was being beaten, he wondered, “Wait, aren’t we supposed to be siblings? Why do I want to bite my little sister on the lips?”
Qi Yun Zhao was born frail, but she refused to give in. She didn’t just want to survive, she wanted to stand at the peak of the world.
Come and take a look, okay? It's so beautiful 🥺 and I'll fall in love with it as soon as I see it. It's going to be very popular, believe me! The author is very skilled and the plot is also very good. The male and female protagonists are both pure. In this relationship, the female protagonist is in a higher position. If you have anything you want to ask, just ask me. Anyway, come in and take a look. It was quite interesting at first, but then I wrote about the settings and supplemented the plot. I felt very tired from piecing it all together. After all, there were only two or three readers, so I really had no motivation to write. As an introductory reader of male videos, I really like the long paragraphs about strength. As a girl, I also like sweet love. I have a lot to say about this novel, it's just advice, not education (bixin♥️) Sometimes it is much better to write according to your heart than to write for the sake of writing. I can feel that the writing is very deep in many places (it is very detailed and interesting) and I can't help myself. However, for some settings, I have to turn a corner and sometimes it is very abrupt (hard). For example, the things in Jiang Yueshi and Fulu class sometimes seem like two worlds, and the things about the demon core seem to be important sometimes and unimportant (and this is a big hole. If you can't fill it in, the text will be ruined). Those two systems In the later stage, it was a bit redundant, and Fu Lu's secondary CP also seemed to be made up (this refers to the first meeting... The man's character also collapsed, and the woman did not seem to be flesh and blood. "I can really understand that boys are attracted to the girl's personality charm that changes in the later stage, and the girl is getting better and better because of her dreams, but I really, really feel uncomfortable when I don't see the first meeting later.") You can first write separate books about love and strong women, and then read some better books to see how they are integrated well. Remember to retain your own language characteristics. After all, I am just a reader, not an experienced author. My suggestions are only based on readers' experience. The description is unclear and sometimes a bit ridiculous. I really like this way of writing, but it's a pity that the plot is messy. But for most authors, writing novels is just a side job. If you feel unhappy, just treat it like an ignorant child talking nonsense😚 Damn, if you don't want to write it anymore, can you please send me the outline? I'm quite curious about the follow-up plot. If there is no synopsis, can you post the entire plot of Demon Core? After all, this is about the bond between the male and female protagonists. If you write, I will continue to read, but will you continue to write? There is no income in this way, and it will do all harm without any benefit.