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The writing is quite touching, and the love story must be a delicate and twisted emotional collision. I hope the author can write it to the end. By the way, is it really possible to accept them all in Harmono? From the perspective of not destroying the characters, it feels like they are just the right match. It seems reasonable to accept the Yukinoshita sisters at the same time. After all, ordinary happiness like Dango Saki will not compromise on key points.

It's quite interesting. As a time traveler and an adult, Pig's Foot uses a model similar to God's perspective to solve the problems of the adolescent troubled children in the original work, which can be regarded as an alternative kind of salvation for them. After all, the only perfect ending in the original work is the big teacher [face covering] As a Junharmono fanfic, it's pretty good-looking and has multiple female protagonists. The original novel itself has some pseudo-harem elements and the male protagonist doesn't regard Hikigaya Hachiman as his father. In the book, it is known that Hikigaya Hachiman has character problems, and he is made aware of his problems by accepting commissions and guidance. The male protagonist's character is quite consistent with the setting of a time traveler. Many novels write about time travelers who don't look like time travelers at all. The male protagonist in this book feels confused about reviving his life. The feeling of confusion and loneliness about who I am, where I come from, and where I am going is really written deeply. The biggest certainty is that the update is too slow, and Ha Jixue, you are very fond of the male protagonist and why don't you go? You see, Tuanzi and Kawasaki are always on the offensive. Yukino, you are too sidelined. Come on and enjoy watching. Kawasaki is so miserable and keeps attacking the male protagonist and always pulls the flag. Tuanzi has as much sugar as the real heroine of this book [smile]

The reason why it is not popular is probably that the first-person narrative has dissuaded many people (although the writing is very good). Most people come to Tomato to watch the second series because the plot points have explosive points. The character of the protagonist is destined to have too few explosive points (less involvement in the plot, especially in the early stage) Although there are a few more later on, it can't be too much in the short term, because it will destroy the character of the protagonist, which will make it difficult to retain people. The only reason why people can be retained is probably because the heroine Chun Chun Wu Duo and her writing skills are very good. There are also some poisonous points: add a reminder when switching the perspective, otherwise the reader will think about who is very dramatic while reading and it will affect the perception. There is also a suspicion of literary youth disease at the end of the poem (it can be seen that the author has wasted a lot of effort, but... It is unnecessary, Zaimokuza understands). In short, come on, except for the poisonous points I mentioned, I like it very much and hope to maintain the quality. Work goes well

I personally feel that the male protagonist is like a narrator [laughing]

The writing is very good and the plot is also good

It's doing very well so far [eating melon]

If you start reading this novel, please stick to the third volume. The first two volumes are like an observer's diary, but starting from the third volume, you will find that observing the matter itself will intervene in the cause and effect of others. When the causes increase, the effects will slowly manifest. This novel is a very good novel.

Come on, good writing

Very good. Do you want to take it all?

Except for the poisonous point of the first person, the rest is quite good, that is, you can add more reasons to talk about the character such as family environment.

It looks okay so far, but sometimes I feel a little dizzy when changing the perspective.

It's pretty good, come on

The protagonist has a distinct personality and the supporting characters have no occ. It can be seen that the author has worked hard. The rhythm of the plot is also quite good, without any deliberate effort.

May I ask, can you reveal who the heroine is? Will be fine

It feels surprisingly good [thinking]

What on earth am I looking at?