The Desert Emperor in Peerless Tang Sect

Personally, I feel that the control of the subject matter and the rhythm of the narrative are relatively good among Tomato fanfics. However, there are many shortcomings in the depiction of emotions and characters. The emotional line is a bit abrupt and lacks foreshadowing and description. The Yu Ai chapter is quite inexplicable. , There is no in-depth description, and there is no foreshadowing in the early stage. It suddenly says that the protagonist likes Wang Dong, and the emotional line lacks reasons and motivations. When accepting two followers, the other party explains the situation, the protagonist knows the situation, and then names it, and suddenly it is loyalty. If this plot includes two brothers being bullied, or getting sick and in a life-or-death situation, and the protagonist comes to the rescue, and then the protagonist gives the two brothers two mouthfuls of chicken soup to show his personality charm, and then the two brothers express their gratitude and swear loyalty, it is cliché but useful, the emotions can be given, and the logic can be said. The writing style is a bit green, but it's still good in Tomato. Good luck, author!

The emotional scene is indeed a bit sudden, but because I really like the character Wang Dong, I feel it is okay, and I feel that the protagonist is not very strong, but I read the latest chapter, and I think it is necessary to cheat the protagonist. In the end, I actually think the writing is okay, but I feel that the protagonist is a bit aggrieved. He is obviously the emperor of Shurima, but it does not show the strength that a czar should have. But this is just my personal opinion, just for fun. Come on, author, I hope your novel will get better and better.

I like your description of the young Emperor of Shurima. May the rays of the sun's disk protect you.

The author's writing style is above average and is particularly good among Douluo novels. It doesn't have the brainless feeling of Invincible Literature, and the addition of new characters is reasonable and adds some fun. Keep up the good work, author. I'm optimistic about you.

There are a lot of changes, but it still looks good.

Good to say

The writing is good, keep up the good work! Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง

This is such a big deal. I suddenly fell in love with Wang Dong and didn't even react.

From the current point of view, this is one of the better quality among the unblocked Douluo books.

Very nice book

The author will update quickly [laughing][laughing][laughing]

Author, you must keep updating and don't disappear. It's very beautiful.

It's beautiful, good luck to the author

Good-looking, good-looking, good-looking

Is Xira an original character?