Comprehensive Comics**********

4 Points of encouragement, but because it is the author's first novel, it is not very good. There are many problems. In addition, the author said that he needs to revise the previous chapters, so I will make a few comments. 1. Some characters are OOC, such as Yinglili. If the author has not watched the heroine of Passerby, you can read the related anime reviews. There should be many such videos on station B. 2. The protagonist has an emotional disorder. To be honest, if I hadn't read the introduction, I wouldn't have known that the protagonist had this setting. Because the entire text does not reflect much, and this setting often means that the pace is slow, but because the author's book is very fast-paced, this setting seems very inappropriate. And even if I delete it, it doesn't seem to have any impact. 3. The author is sewing too many anime now. If you don't accept so many female protagonists, I suggest you not to sew too many. Because most readers assume that once you write it, you have to accept it, otherwise why would you write about her, especially for comic books? After all, everyone only reads comic books because of their love for a certain character. 4. Regarding the character An Yi, the best ending in the variety comics I have read in the past few years is as a passerby. The second best ending is as a clown and the emotional promoter of the protagonist and Eiri, Shiyu, and Megumi. The third one is that he was killed by Cha Chuang in the first three chapters. After all, there are many people who can do the animation mixed editing of the Campus Four, but have you ever seen anyone doing the mixing editing of Aki? Yukino is famous at the same time as the great teacher, but there are basically only three heroines who are famous for the passerby heroines. After all, Aki's character is not very good (I am referring to the original work). And except for the author's book, I have never seen a story about a passerby heroine but not accepting benefits, because Megumi has a crush on Aki because Aki will not ignore her, but generally the protagonist of variety comics will not be affected by Megumi's thin presence buff, and then compare the protagonist and Aki, no normal person would choose Aki. Some Harmono fandoms only take Yukino and Yui to O-sensei, or take Yukino and Yui, and then transfer Aya's sex to O-sensei, but I have never seen them leave Aki as the heroine. 5. Regarding Hanami, as I mentioned in my previous paragraph, there is a manga that also wrote about the famous scene of Hanami drinking Kusanagi Coke. However, many people could not accept the indirect kiss between the heroine and someone other than the protagonist, so they were kicked out of the heroine's position and treated as a passerby. If the author really wants to make Yanami the heroine, it is recommended to make a good choice. Moreover, the author's latest pictures have added the setting that I mentioned before that the Japanese government allows polygamy due to the declining birthrate. However, Yanami has almost no interaction with the protagonist at present. He can go back to find Cao Ke, or the author can continue to make patches. For example, Hua Lian does not allow Cao Ai to have a harem, and the eighth child is guarded by Hua Lian alone. Or be more thorough and just delete the corrupt dog heroine and stop writing about it.

I feel that the male protagonist is too gentle, very Japanese male protagonist, and the rest is okay. It would be better if the male protagonist was tougher.

Super

It looks good, but there are some minor errors in the text and punctuation. The author should have read it after writing it, and it will still look good.

It's my type. I give you five stars.

Come on, come on, come on!

Not bad, I like it very much

Children, the author is Fujiwara Takumi's father, he is very skilled

The writing is acceptable, the plot is good, and there are very few characters in this combination. I look forward to seeing other less popular characters in the future [laughs]

Urgent, urgent, urgent, urgent

Come on, come on, come on