I'm so *******

So far, the writing is okay, there are no obvious poisonous points, and the subject matter is also novel. However, the dual-line narrative requires a lot of writing skills from the author. If it is not written well, it will easily end up unfinished. I hope the author can control it well.

It is a slow-burning semi-immortal novel, with fluent writing and natural clues connecting from near to far. The author's ingenuity can be seen in the plot and setting. Unfortunately, the world view has not been fully developed. It is understandable that the author wants to leave this for later.

Comments on Chapter 23: A dark and cruel world view, but there is still warmth around the protagonist The protagonist will travel back and forth between two worlds (magic world/original world) It's pretty good-looking, not bad [like][like]

The overall content is pretty good, but there are currently a lot of pitfalls. The plot doesn't feel very cliched. At least it doesn't make people guess the next plot. I just don't know why there are so few people watching it [face covering]. The author will update it soon [almost crying]

Please support me, I hope it will be over a million words In November, I actually became a contestant with two updates a day. Is it necessary to have full attendance? Just don't interrupt the update. You can stream it on Douyin. The plot is quite good. Take a look at the reading time, and I've updated the original content.

It looks good. The subject matter is quite unique among magical girls [Blowing Kiss]

Keep up the good work and it seems to be okay so far [smile][smile]

Come on, come on, come on

The author's new book is still very interesting.

Jie Jie Jie Jie Jie Jie Jie Jie Jie

It's okay, I recommend it.

None of the skills mentioned in the introduction have been used by the protagonist in real life. At present, it seems that the interoperability of the two worlds will not be of much help to the protagonist. I don't know how long it will take to develop.

So far, the plot is okay, nothing bad about it

It's so strong. Anyone who can recreate this theme is a master.

Magical girls are so delicious, so pretty, meow

I want to see the next chapter now [cry][cry][cry]

It can be considered one of the most beautiful books I have ever read [full]

Clear structure and very creative

The fusion of new themes is beautiful and the writing style makes people feel comfortable.

The writing style is very good, the subject matter is novel, the plot is attractive and beautiful, I hope the author can make the subsequent plots more exciting [Blow kiss]

Overall, it's okay, but I just feel like I haven't gotten to the part I want to see yet. What about the abilities in the introduction?

The setting is very good, and the character of the protagonist is also very easy to accept. There is nothing serious about it so far. I hope it will be more exciting in the future.

Yes, the writing is sophisticated and the descriptions are clear. The plot is also advanced step by step. Half Immortal Grass

The writing is okay, I hope there are more exciting plots