Time Travel: People Are Having a Fight and Meet the Origami Master

Overall, it seems to be okay, quite satisfactory, at least so far it has not been poisonous.

The harem is a real harem. The emotional line in the front may be a little rushed, because it is a novice. The front is a bit weak, but the back is much better. [Laughs] As for traveling through the world and accepting female protagonists, there will be no shortage of female protagonists, and the author will work hard to be responsible for each character. As for some places that are not consistent with the original work, it can be regarded as the author's second creation. I'm really sorry [smile] For example, if you have watched Loli Time, you should know that there are three female protagonists and two female supporting teachers. At most, three female protagonists will be accepted, but the two female supporting teachers will definitely not be accepted, but it depends on the situation. If you haven't seen it, the author himself highly recommends watching it. The three lolita are all quite cute. [Blowing kiss] It's 300,000 words, and I'm ready to run away and finish it, but after writing so much, there are only 58 people rating it, and I can't even see the novel's evaluation score, so forget it.

Can I write about Sonogami Rinni, Sonogom Rinoo, Sanda Sawa, Ren, or Mori Maria, or Mori Maruna, Manyuri, or Beast Touka?

It's pretty good, I feel pretty good-looking [eating melon]

Yes, it's delicious😋. It's not poisonous. You can add a little bit of fighting. The most important thing is that you must be handsome and pretend. OK, this is a suggestion. The more immature the writing becomes, the more immature it becomes. Well, I forgot to mention the setting. Why does the entire universe only speak Chinese?

I think it's okay and I can read it. I need to add some punctuation. The writing style is better than before, it's okay. [Laughs]

System + time travel + harem, overall quite satisfactory, no bad points, very good

Very good, okay

It's very well written, please give it a try, author.

Not bad, not bad. What's interesting is why Yaeko didn't accept it directly or wait for next time. Everything else is good. Come on, rush, rush, update quickly.

It's well written, but I feel like the author can't keep going without much traffic.

Not bad, although some of the writing is really not very good, keep up the good work